Emails— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接并且结构清晰。开头给出明确的主题句（是或否），然后用一两句具体说明原因或举例，避免冗长且语法错误多的复合句。练习使用正确的时态和固定短语（例如 "once in a blue moon"、"about a year and a half ago"）。此外注意代词和主谓一致，避免像 "nobody applied me" 这样的错误，应说 "nobody replied to me"。

예시: No, I don't send emails often. I only use email once in a blue moon — about a year and a half ago I emailed my school to ask for information about my final exam, but nobody replied to me.

제안: 回答应先给出简洁的主题句，然后用一两句具体说明情景与原因。注意使用准确的词汇（例如 'apply for an internship'、'large company'）和连词使句子连贯。避免含糊或未完成的句子，保持每个答案不超过五句。

예시: I usually send emails when I need to make a formal application. For example, I would email a large company to apply for an internship because email looks more professional and shows respect for the opportunity.

제안: 先直接回答（Yes/No），然后给出具体原因和对比。避免语法错误和模糊表达（例如 'pair' 用词不当，时态不一致）。可以说明学生在校园与职场的不同使用习惯，并使用连词如 'however' 或 'but' 来衔接句子。

예시: Yes, I think email is still popular in China, especially in the workplace. As a student I don't see many people using email, but in companies people use email more often because it is a formal way to communicate.

제안: 回答需先明确表态（will be more or less popular），然后给出清晰理由和例子。注意语法（如 'will be replaced'，不是 'will being replaced'）和词汇搭配（'user-friendly'）。列举具体替代应用并说明原因会更有说服力。

예시: I think email will become less popular in the future. They are less user-friendly for casual communication, and messaging apps like WeChat in China or Instagram worldwide are more convenient, so people will prefer those for everyday use.

× I only use them once in blue moon and I can remember last time when I used that where it's like 1/2 years ago when I was about to ask my school for some further information about my final exam but nobody applied me.

✓ I only use them once in a blue moon, and I can remember the last time I used one — it was about one or two years ago when I was about to ask my school for some further information about my final exam, but nobody replied to me.

本句有多处问题： 1) 慣用語應為 "once in a blue moon"，缺少不定冠詞 a。2) “used that” 中的代词不当，应改为 "used one"（指电子邮件）。3) 时间表达 “1/2 years ago” 不规范，改为 "about one or two years ago"。4) “nobody applied me” 用词错误，应为 "nobody replied to me"（被动或及物动词 reply + to）。这些改正使句子语法正确、表达清晰。建议注意固定短语、代词指代的一致性和常见动词搭配（reply to）。

× When I want to apply for something more formal or for example when I'm asking for a period of internship in some bigger company, I I'd like to send e-mail to them because I think it will let them feel I respect these things.

✓ When I want to apply for something more formal, for example when I'm asking for an internship at a larger company, I'd like to send an email to them because I think it will show that I respect these matters.

存在时态与搭配问题：1) "a period of internship" 不自然，常用 "an internship"。2) "in some bigger company" 应为 "at a larger company"（介词和形容词比较常用搭配）。3) "send e-mail" 前缺不定冠词，改为 "send an email"。4) "let them feel I respect these things" 表达笨拙，改为 "show that I respect these matters" 更自然。建议学习常见搭配（apply for + internship；send an email；at a company）并注意从句和时态的一致性。

× So when I was applying something for more and.

✓ So when I was applying for something more formal.

原句结构不完整且冠词/介词使用错误：1) "applying something for" 是错误搭配，应为 "applying for something"。2) "for more" 不明确，可能想说 "more formal"。句子还不完整，需补全为完整短语。建议注意动词apply的固定搭配 "apply for + 名词/职位"，并把形容词补足以使意思完整。

× I don't think they're very convenient. I only use them once in blue moon

✓ I don't think they're very convenient. I only use them once in a blue moon.

这里缺少介词/冠词：惯用表达是 "once in a blue moon"，需要不定冠词 "a"。建议记住常见固定短语的完整形式。

× Well, umm, I think so because although as a student I don't see the pair using it very often, but I know when I turn into the workplace and everybody around me might started to use that since it's very formal for to connect with each other.

✓ Well, umm, I think so because although as a student I don't see people using it very often, I know that when I enter the workplace everybody around me might start to use it since it's very formal for connecting with each other.

句子存在多处时态和用词错误：1) "the pair" 用词错误，应为 "people"。2) "might started" 时态错误，应为 "might start"（情态动词后接动词原形）。3) "turn into the workplace" 不自然，改为 "enter the workplace"。4) "use that" 指代不当，改为 "use it"。5) "for to connect" 语法错误，改为动名词结构 "for connecting" 或者 "to connect"。建议注意情态动词后用动词原形、常见动词搭配以及代词指代一致性。

× Yes, I think so because they are uh less user friendly and inconvenient for me. Therefore I think they will being replaced by other more convenient applications for example like the WeChat in China or in or Instagram over the world.

✓ Yes, I think so because they are less user-friendly and inconvenient for me. Therefore I think they will be replaced by other more convenient applications, for example WeChat in China or Instagram around the world.

含有时态与被动语态错误：1) "less user friendly and inconvenient" 词序和连字符问题，改为 "less user-friendly and inconvenient"。2) "will being replaced" 是错误形式，应为被动语态的将来时 "will be replaced"。3) "for example like the WeChat" 冗余，去掉 "like"，一般说 "for example, WeChat"。4) "in or Instagram over the world" 表达混乱，改为 "Instagram around the world"。建议复习被动语态构成（will + be + 过去分词）和常见短语表达。