Emails— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答已能直接回应问题并表达观点，但存在语法和词汇错误（例如“more faster”“send the message”），句子有重复且略显不自然。建议： 1) 注意比较级搭配，避免冗余（使用“faster”或“more convenient”，不要同时加“more”）。 2) 精简句子，把要点放在首句，随后用1-2句支持。可用连接词如“because”或“so”来连接原因与结论。 3) 提高用词准确性（用“instant messaging apps”或“messaging apps”，不必加定冠词或多余词）。

예시: I don't send emails very often. I usually use messaging apps like WeChat because they are faster and more convenient for quick conversations.

제안: 回答有意图说明用途，但表达混乱且出现错误（时态、词汇如“my mountains”不明，重复词“daily, daily”，句子结构不流畅）。建议： 1) 用恰当时态（一般现在时）回答习惯性行为，如“I usually send emails to…” 2) 删除不相关或错误词汇，明确收件人：“tutors, lecturers or professors”。 3) 给出具体场景作为支持（e.g., submitting assignments, asking for feedback, scheduling meetings），并用连接词如“for example”或“such as”。

예시: I usually send emails to my tutors and professors for academic matters. For example, I email them to submit assignments, ask for feedback on my work, or arrange meeting times.

제안: 回答观点明确，但表达不够简洁，有语法和赘述问题（“I just stay the WeChat”不通）。建议： 1) 使用更自然的表达如“Wechat is more commonly used”或“People prefer messaging apps such as WeChat”。 2) 用一两句补充原因并用连接词（because, since）。 3) 避免口语填充词，如“you know”“actually”，保持答案简洁清晰。

예시: Sending emails is not very popular in China. Most people prefer messaging apps such as WeChat because they are faster and more convenient for daily communication.

제안: 观点明确但表达冗长且有语法和重复问题（如“we we”“to to”），句子结构混乱。建议： 1) 开头直接表明立场，例如“I think emails will become less popular.” 2) 使用简洁的原因句，避免重复，使用连接词“because”并给出具体理由（e.g., mobile apps, instant notifications）。 3) 最多两到三句支持论点，使答案自然流畅。

예시: I think emails will become less popular in the future because more people use mobile messaging apps and social media, which offer instant notifications and are easier for informal communication.

× It's more faster and convenient.

✓ It's faster and more convenient.

句中使用了比較級more與形容詞faster同時出現造成冗餘。英語中faster已為比較級，應直接使用faster，另一個形容詞convenient前加more構成比較級more convenient，兩者需以並列形式連接。建議：使用“faster and more convenient”或“more fast and more convenient”（不推薦）避免冗餘。

× Well, I sent emails often to my tutors, my mountains, my professors, uh, you know, we could contact with them for our school assignment and some daily, daily things. Use the emails.

✓ Well, I often sent emails to my tutors and my professors. We could contact them about our school assignments and some daily matters using email.

原句時態和用詞混亂：'sent'（過去式）可接受，但語序與頻率副詞位置不當，且'mountains'顯然是口誤應為'mentors'或刪除，'contact with'在此結構中應為'contact them'，'assignment'需複數或加冠詞，且最後片語應連接成完整句。建議：把頻率副詞放在動詞前或後（I often sent或I sent...often），用正確名詞（tutors and professors），並使用'contact them'和'using email'使句子通順。

× we could contact with them for our school assignment and some daily, daily things.

✓ we could contact them about our school assignments and some daily matters.

動詞contact在英語中通常直接接賓語（contact someone），不需要介詞with；另外用'for'在此處不自然，應用about或regarding來表示關於某事。建議：使用'contact them about'或'contact them regarding'，並把可數名詞plural化為assignments。

× sending emails is not very popular in China.

✓ Sending emails is not very popular in China.

此處僅需句首大寫，語法本身正確。提醒：句首動名詞短語作主語時首字母大寫（句首規則）；若要強調語氣，可改為'isn't very popular'。

× Many of us prefer to use the messaging applications like the I just stay the WeChat and also the messaging, you know, because it's convenient and faster.

✓ Many of us prefer messaging applications like WeChat because they're convenient and faster.

原句結構混亂，含有口語填充詞（I just stay the）和重複表達。'messaging applications like WeChat'為正確短語，'they're'指代複數applications，形容詞比較級應與對比對象明確（faster than email）。建議：刪除冗餘片語，使用清晰主語和比較結構，如'convenient and faster than email'。

× we could contact with them for our school assignment and some daily, daily things.

✓ we can contact them about our school assignments and some daily matters.

原句使用could暗示過去或假設情況，而回答應描述常態或一般情況，使用can更合適。另外如前所述，contact不需with，並用about表達關於。建議：在描述習慣或常態時使用can或usually can。

× I prefer the instant messaging apps. You know you can send the message to others.

✓ I prefer instant messaging apps. You know, you can send messages to others.

原句中'the instant messaging apps'和'send the message'的定冠詞使用不當，且單複數不一致。應去掉不必要的定冠詞並使用複數'messages'表示一般動作。建議：一般陳述時用複數無冠詞形式：instant messaging apps, send messages。

× because it's convenient and faster.

✓ because they're convenient and faster.

此處的主語是複數'applications'，所以形容詞應與複數主語一致，使用they're而不是it's（it is）。建議：確保代詞與其先行詞在人稱和數上一致。

× And I think sending emails will be less popular in the future because nowadays more and more communication software appeal to our, you know, those phones we we can choose a lot of convenient and faster way to to contact others.

✓ I think sending emails will be less popular in the future because more and more communication apps are available on our phones, so we can choose many more convenient and faster ways to contact others.

原句冗長且結構混亂：'communication software appeal to our phones'是不正確的表達，應為'apps are available on our phones'或'apps appeal to us'；重複詞（we we, to to）和不完整片語需刪除或重組。建議：使用清晰主語+被動或主動結構（are available），用'ways'複數並放置形容詞more convenient and faster前。