Emails— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid filler words. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (e.g., however, also) correctly and avoid repetition.

예시: I don't often send emails in my personal life because I find texting more convenient and faster. However, I do send emails for work and university—for example, I email colleagues about project updates and my professors about assignment details.

제안: Finish your sentences and avoid trailing off. Structure the answer: state the main times you send emails, then give brief reasons or a concrete example. Use linking words like "for example" or "also" to connect ideas.

예시: I usually send emails during working hours, particularly around 10 AM because people often reply quickly then. I also send summary emails in the evening to record what happened that day—for example, I email a brief report to my team after meetings to keep a written record.

제안: Make the response more precise and avoid vague endings. Provide a clear opinion then support it with specific sectors and a brief comparison to other platforms. Use a linking phrase like "however" correctly and finish the thought.

예시: Yes, emails are still popular in China for formal communication in sectors such as government, IT, and education. However, many people prefer WeChat for everyday conversations because it is faster and more convenient for casual messaging.

제안: Avoid repeating "it depends" and state a clearer prediction. Begin with a concise topic sentence predicting the trend for different contexts (formal vs informal), then give specific reasons and a short example. Keep to under five sentences.

예시: I think email will remain important for formal work communication, but less used for casual interactions. For instance, companies will still use email for official notices, while people will rely on apps like WeChat or Instagram for instant, everyday chats.

× No, I usually prefer texting messages rather than sending an e-mail because I think it is more convenient and easy to access text messages.

✓ No, I usually prefer texting rather than sending e-mails because I think text messages are more convenient and easier to access.

The sentence has awkward noun usage and parallelism issues. 'Texting messages' is redundant; 'texting' or 'text messages' is correct. Also 'sending an e-mail' should be plural to match general activity: 'sending e-mails.' Adjective/adverb agreement: 'more convenient and easy to access' should be 'more convenient and easier to access' because 'easier' modifies 'to access' (comparative adverb/adjective) and parallel structure requires similar forms ('more convenient and easier'). Improve by using consistent nouns and parallel comparative forms.

× Uh. However, as far as my work is concerned, I usually send emails to my colleagues and managers and customers, but also in the university work, I'll send emails to my teachers related to my projects.

✓ However, as far as my work is concerned, I usually send e-mails to my colleagues, managers, and customers, and in university I send e-mails to my teachers about my projects.

Problems: sentence fragments ('Uh.'), redundant conjunctions and poor comma usage, and inconsistent tense/modal use ('I'll send' is unnecessary when describing habitual action). Use commas in lists, avoid repeating 'and', and use 'in university' rather than 'in the university work'. Keep habitual present tense 'I send' for routine actions. Replace 'related to' with 'about' for clarity.

× I usually send emails during working hours, especially in the morning at 10 AM because at that time everyone responds to the e-mail promptly.

✓ I usually send e-mails during working hours, especially at 10 AM, because at that time people usually respond to e-mails promptly.

Minor issues: 'in the morning at 10 AM' is wordy; 'at 10 AM' suffices. 'Everyone responds to the e-mail promptly' is too absolute and repeats 'the e-mail' singularly; use 'people usually respond to e-mails promptly' to match general habitual present. Maintain plural 'e-mails' for generalization.

× I also send emails in the evening to record or to summarize the events.

✓ I also send e-mails in the evening to record or summarize events.

Remove unnecessary repetition of 'to' before both verbs when they share the same infinitive 'to record or summarize'. 'The events' is awkward; use 'events' for general reference. Keep parallel verb forms for clarity.

× It helps me to organize and maintain my future reference and help me to.

✓ It helps me organize and keep records for future reference.

Original ends abruptly and repeats 'help me to.' Use concise phrasing: 'helps me organize and keep records for future reference.' Eliminate redundant 'to' and provide clear object ('records') for 'keep.'

× Yes, I think sending emails remain quite popular in China because it helps us to do a formal communication in various sectors like government, IT and education.

✓ Yes, I think sending e-mails remains quite popular in China because it helps us communicate formally in various sectors such as government, IT, and education.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'sending emails' (singular gerund phrase) requires singular verb 'remains'. 'Helps us to do a formal communication' is unidiomatic; use 'helps us communicate formally.' Use 'such as' for examples and include serial commas for clarity.

× However, the growth of technology is also changing and people usually use WeChat in China to send messages or communicate.

✓ However, technological growth is changing how people communicate, and many people in China use WeChat to send messages.

'The growth of technology is also changing' is vague; better: 'technological growth is changing how people communicate.' Simplify and make subject clear. Avoid repeating 'or communicate' after 'send messages' since 'send messages' already indicates communication.

× So yeah, it depends on this.

✓ So yes, it depends on the situation.

'Depends on this' is vague and unnatural. Use 'depends on the situation' for clarity. 'Yeah' is informal; 'yes' is more appropriate in a test context.

× So generally, it depends on the situation.

✓ Generally, it depends on the situation.

Minor issue: remove 'So' at the start to avoid filler and make the sentence more concise. Maintain present simple to describe general truth.

× As far as work is concerned, emails are the formal way of communicating and it is compulsory in every work goal.

✓ As far as work is concerned, e-mails are the formal way to communicate, and they are often required in most workplaces.

'The formal way of communicating' is awkward; use 'the formal way to communicate.' 'It is compulsory in every work goal' is incorrect and unclear. Replace with 'they are often required in most workplaces' to express the idea that e-mails are commonly required. Also match plural subjects with plural verbs ('e-mails' -> 'they are').

× However, due to the increasing number of digitalized apps like Facebook, Instagram, and WeChat, people usually prefer texting messages instantly because it is more convenient and easy to access for day-to-day activities or daily life.

✓ However, due to the increasing number of digital apps like Facebook, Instagram, and WeChat, people usually prefer instant messaging because it is more convenient and easier to use for daily activities.

Use 'digital apps' or 'digital platforms' rather than 'digitalized apps.' 'Texting messages instantly' is awkward; 'instant messaging' is concise. 'It is more convenient and easy to access' should be 'more convenient and easier to use' for parallel comparative structure. 'Day-to-day activities or daily life' is redundant; use 'daily activities.'

× So yeah, it depends on the.

✓ So yes, it depends on the context.

Original is incomplete ('depends on the.'). Complete the sentence by supplying a noun like 'context' or 'situation.' Use 'yes' instead of 'yeah' for formality.