Emails— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, and use simple linking words to explain reasons. Correct grammar (e.g. "I don't often send emails") and use singular/plural consistently. Limit to 2–4 sentences and give a specific example of when you use instant messaging instead of email.

예시: I don't often send emails. I prefer instant messaging apps like WhatsApp or Telegram because they are faster and more convenient for casual conversations. For example, I usually message friends and colleagues on WhatsApp to make quick plans or ask short questions.

제안: Begin with a clear, direct answer and give specific context. Fix grammar: use past/present correctly ("I last used email a month ago"). Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for") to explain purpose and add one detail about the content or recipient. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I last used email about a month ago when I applied to immigrate to another country. I used email to receive official application forms and correspondence from the immigration office because they sent PDFs and instructions that couldn't be shared via messaging apps.

제안: Answer directly and support with specific contrast and examples. Correct grammar ("professors", "WhatsApp"). Use linking words like "however" or "but" to compare professional and casual use. Provide a concise reason why people prefer messaging apps.

예시: Emails are still popular in professional settings because professors and companies use them for formal communication. However, most people prefer messaging apps like WeChat or WhatsApp for everyday chats because they are quicker and more convenient.

제안: Avoid filler words and hedging. Give a clear prediction and justify it with one or two specific reasons. Use correct forms and linking words (e.g., "because", "therefore"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and be more precise about who will keep using email and why.

예시: I think email will remain important in academic and professional fields because researchers and professors need a formal record of communication. However, messaging apps will probably become more common for casual conversations worldwide because they are faster and more user-friendly.

× Males, frankly speaking, I don't like sending, uh, send emails.

✓ Honestly, I don't like sending emails.

The original uses 'Males' incorrectly (likely intended 'Maybe' or filler) and repeats verbs. This is a pronoun/word choice and redundancy issue. Use a clear subject and the gerund 'sending' after 'like'. Remove unnecessary filler words to improve clarity.

× I prefer to use instant messaging system like Instagram and Telegram and WhatsApp, uh, compared the instead of using emails, uh, because they have a special format.

✓ I prefer to use instant messaging systems like Instagram, Telegram, and WhatsApp instead of emails because emails have a specific format.

'Instant messaging system' should be plural when referring to multiple platforms; 'compared the' is incorrect word order and choice. Also 'they have a special format' is vague for 'emails' so clarify subject. Fix plural nouns and word order, and use 'instead of' to show contrast.

× To others, if I'm not mistaken, it was one month ago when I decided to immigrate in foreign country.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, it was one month ago when I decided to immigrate to a foreign country.

Use 'immigrate to' not 'immigrate in'. Also include the article 'a' before 'foreign country'. This is a preposition and article error; use correct preposition and article for natural English.

× I had to use it for receive my application forms.

✓ I had to use it to receive my application forms.

After 'had to use it' the infinitive 'to receive' is required, not the base verb alone. Replace 'for receive' with 'to receive' to use the correct verb form and structure.

× When it comes to professional areas, most professor prefer to use emails, but in general most people prefer to use instead messaging system and Whatsapps and Telegram compared to using emails.

✓ When it comes to professional areas, most professors prefer to use emails, but in general most people prefer messaging apps like WhatsApp and Telegram instead of emails.

Use plural 'professors' to match 'most'. 'Messaging system' should be 'messaging apps' or 'messaging systems', and 'Whatsapps' is incorrect — use 'WhatsApp' as a non-count proper noun. Also simplify word order: 'prefer X instead of Y.' This fixes pluralization and noun choice.

× Actually, I don't know what the future holds, uh, but uh, in academic areas, uh, will be common because most, uh, professor like to hang out with other people around the world.

✓ Actually, I don't know what the future holds, but in academic areas email will remain common because most professors like to communicate with people around the world.

The original omits a subject for 'will be common' and uses 'professor' singular with 'most'. Add the subject 'email' and plural 'professors', and use 'communicate' instead of informal 'hang out' to match the academic context and correct present/future tense agreement.

× Uh, the e-mail is the best way for them to, umm, uh, sending message, uh, messages, uh, but in general, uh, other application or will be common on the world.

✓ Email is the best way for them to send messages, but in general other applications will become more common worldwide.

After 'for them to' use the base verb 'send', not the gerund 'sending'. Also 'application or will be common on the world' is ungrammatical: use plural 'applications' and 'will become more common worldwide'. This corrects verb form and noun/plural usage.