Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more structured and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. For example, instead of repeating 'and', use 'such as' or 'including' to list items.

예시: Yes, I like drawing very much. When I was young, I used to grab a pen, colors, and a blank paper to draw various things, such as trees, skies, and the sun.

제안: Improve your answer by using more natural expressions and clearer linking words. Avoid repetition and clarify your ideas. For example, explain why you like to share art with friends and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy going to art galleries because I love admiring masterpieces. I often invite my friends to join me so that we can appreciate the art together.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your experience. For example, explain what you learn and why you enjoy it.

예시: Yes, of course. I have already taken a step by joining an art college, and so far, it has been a very good experience because I enjoy learning new techniques and art history.

제안: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing and be more specific about what you drew and why.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed drawing since I was a kid. I discovered my interest early, so I used to draw a lot. For example, I would imagine scenes in my mind and then draw them, including portraits of people I know.

× I already take a step to join art colleague and it until now it is very good experience.

✓ I have already taken a step to join an art college and until now it has been a very good experience.

The sentence requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'Take' should be in the past participle form 'taken' with the auxiliary verb 'have'. Also, 'art colleague' is incorrect; it should be 'art college'. The phrase 'it until now it is very good experience' is corrected to 'until now it has been a very good experience' to maintain proper tense and clarity.

× I enjoy watching a masterpiece art and I like to show it to my friends.

✓ I enjoy watching masterpiece art and I like to show it to my friends.

The word 'art' is uncountable, so 'a masterpiece art' is incorrect. It should be 'masterpiece art' without the article 'a'. Alternatively, 'a masterpiece' alone would be correct if referring to a single artwork.

× I used to grab a pen and the colors and the a blank paper and I started to draw a lot of trees and skies and sun and.

✓ I used to grab a pen, the colors, and a blank paper and start to draw a lot of trees, skies, and the sun.

The phrase 'the a blank paper' is incorrect; it should be 'a blank paper'. Also, 'skies' is plural and acceptable, but 'sun' is singular and should be preceded by 'the' to specify the sun. The sentence is also improved by adding commas for clarity.

× I imagine things in my mind and then draw it.

✓ I imagine things in my mind and then draw them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'things', which is plural. It should be 'them' to agree in number. This is related to pronoun usage but also affects verb agreement and clarity.

× I as well as I draw as people that I know.

✓ I also draw people that I know.

The original sentence is unclear and contains redundant pronouns. 'I as well as I draw as people that I know' is incorrect. The corrected sentence simplifies the structure to 'I also draw people that I know' for clarity and correctness.