Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and directly address the question. Use clearer vocabulary and avoid vague phrases like "making things around". Also, correct the phrase "a piece of mind" to "peace of mind". For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add a specific reason or example.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy drawing because it helps me relax and express my creativity. For instance, I often sketch scenes from nature in my sketchbook, which gives me a sense of peace and satisfaction.

제안: Avoid repeating the same idea and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, correct grammar errors such as "a artist" to "an artist" and "getting inspired from that" to "getting inspired by that".

예시: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because seeing other artists' work inspires me. Moreover, it helps me learn new techniques that I can apply to improve my own art.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy such as "I really enjoy enjoying". Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific reasons for wanting to learn more.

예시: Yes, I definitely want to learn more about art because my current knowledge is limited. Since I am passionate about becoming an artist, gaining more skills will help me express my ideas better.

제안: Try to organize your answer with clearer sentence structure and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about what you learned and how it helped you.

예시: Yes, I learned drawing at school when I was a kid. We started with basic shapes and lines, and over time I developed many skills that continue to help me improve my art today.

× I'm just always catching on my sketchbook.

✓ I'm just always sketching in my sketchbook.

The verb 'catching on' is incorrectly used here. The correct verb form to express the action of drawing in a sketchbook is 'sketching'. Using 'sketching' (verb + -ing form) correctly describes the ongoing action.

× I'm just always catching on my sketchbook.

✓ I'm just always sketching in my sketchbook.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to drawing in a sketchbook. The correct preposition is 'in' because the sketchbook is a container for the drawings.

× I really enjoy drawing because it gives me a piece of mind.

✓ I really enjoy drawing because it gives me peace of mind.

The phrase 'a piece of mind' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'peace of mind', which means a feeling of calmness or tranquility. Also, 'peace' is uncountable and does not take an article here.

× Being a artist, I love watching others work and getting inspired from that by which I can learn more and more and make my work great.

✓ Being an artist, I love watching others' work and getting inspired by it, through which I can learn more and more and improve my work.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound in 'artist'. The possessive form 'others work' should be 'others' work'. The phrase 'inspired from that' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'inspired by it'. The phrase 'by which' is better replaced with 'through which' for clarity.

× Well, I'm having a limited knowledge about art of absolutely yes I will.

✓ Well, I have limited knowledge about art, but absolutely yes, I will.

The verb 'having' is incorrectly used; 'have' is the correct verb for possession. The phrase is also missing conjunctions and punctuation for clarity. 'Of absolutely yes I will' is ungrammatical and should be separated and clarified.

× I really enjoy enjoying drawing things over and just expressing whatever I think.

✓ I really enjoy drawing things over and just expressing whatever I think.

The phrase 'enjoy enjoying' is redundant and incorrect. The verb 'enjoy' should be followed directly by the gerund 'drawing'. The preposition 'over' is unnecessary here and can be omitted.

× In my school I was taught to learn, start to draw things and like from the shapes, the lines and by the time I learned a lot of things and it was an amazing experience for me while learning as a kid because I can develop more and more skills at that time which will help me now.

✓ In my school, I was taught to learn and start drawing things, like shapes and lines. By that time, I had learned a lot, and it was an amazing experience for me as a kid because I developed many skills then that help me now.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and awkward phrasing. 'Start to draw' should be 'start drawing' for natural expression. 'Like from the shapes, the lines' is awkward; 'like shapes and lines' is better. 'By the time I learned' should be 'By that time, I had learned' to indicate past perfect. 'I can develop' should be 'I developed' to maintain past tense consistency.