Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite natural and relevant, but it lacks coherence and clarity in some parts. Avoid using vague phrases like 'but when?' which can confuse the listener. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words to improve flow.

예시: Yes, I like drawing very much. When I was a child, I used to draw frequently and even participated in competitions. However, as I grew older, I had to focus more on my studies, so I don't get much time to draw now.

제안: Your answer is natural and expressive, but it is quite short and could be improved by adding more specific details and linking words to make it more coherent and informative.

예시: Yes, I love visiting art galleries because they feel like a different world. Moreover, the variety of emotions and vibrant colours displayed in the artworks always fascinate me.

제안: Your enthusiasm is clear, but repeating phrases like 'I really want to' reduces the effectiveness of your answer. Try to use linking words and vary your vocabulary to make your response more natural and engaging.

예시: Yes, I would love to learn more about art because I want to experiment with mixing and matching colours. This way, I can create beautiful abstract paintings that express my emotions and feelings.

제안: Your answer has good content but lacks clarity and coherence. Avoid mixing tenses and ideas abruptly. Use linking words to connect your points logically and be specific about your experiences.

예시: I never formally learned drawing, but I had a natural talent as a child. For example, I created a colourful comic script that won first prize in my school competition, which was a very rewarding experience.

× Yeah, I like to draw, but when?

✓ Yeah, I like to draw, but when do I find time?

The original sentence 'but when?' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'do I find time?' completes the sentence and correctly uses the modal verb 'do' for question formation in present tense.

× I want to do a comic script with beautiful colors and paints, and I won the first prize in school.

✓ I wanted to do a comic script with beautiful colors and paints, and I won the first prize in school.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I want' with past event 'I won'. To maintain tense consistency, 'I want' should be changed to past tense 'I wanted' to match the past event.