Computers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words. Correct verb forms and remove repetition.

예시: I mainly use a computer for my studies. For example, I write essays and complete assignments online, and I also use it to research articles and read digital books for my literature courses.

제안: Clarify the timeline and reduce repetition. Combine short sentences with linking words to improve coherence, and correct unclear phrases (e.g. "PA").

예시: I first used a computer about five years ago, during the COVID-19 pandemic, when I had to buy a laptop and study online. Because all classes moved online, it became essential for attending lectures and submitting assignments.

제안: Use correct conditional grammar and give a brief comparison with specific examples. Avoid double negatives and awkward phrasing; use linking words for contrast.

예시: My life would still be manageable without a computer because I have a smartphone that can do many tasks. For instance, I could read articles, check emails and submit some assignments using mobile apps, although typing long essays would be more difficult.

제안: Correct grammar and make the condition and consequence clearer. Use a linking word to connect the condition and result, and give a concrete example of the impact.

예시: It would be difficult to use a computer if my house lost Wi‑Fi or the Internet, because then I couldn't browse or access online resources. For example, I wouldn't be able to research sources for essays or attend online classes.

× Well I study literature at school so I usually use computer for mainly for educational purpose like write essay or compete complete assignment.

✓ Well, I study literature at school, so I usually use a computer mainly for educational purposes, like writing essays or completing assignments.

The student omitted the indefinite article 'a' before 'computer' and used incorrect singular forms 'purpose', 'essay', 'assignment' and duplicated words 'compete complete'. Use plural 'purposes', 'essays', 'assignments' for general activities. Also change verbs to gerunds after 'like' ('writing', 'completing'). Add commas for clarity.

× Well, the first time I used a computer was about five years ago. It was the PA, the COVID-19 pandemic. I had to buy a laptop to pursue my study. I had to study online.

✓ Well, the first time I used a computer was about five years ago during the COVID-19 pandemic. I had to buy a laptop to continue my studies and study online.

'PA' is unclear and unnecessary; replace with 'during the COVID-19 pandemic' to show time. Use 'continue my studies' instead of 'pursue my study' and plural 'studies' is idiomatic. Maintain past tense throughout; 'had to study online' is fine but combining smooths the sentence.

× I believe that my life would be fine if I hadn't have a computer because I still have a smartphone and it's really convenient. It's as helpful as a computer.

✓ I believe that my life would be fine if I didn't have a computer because I still have a smartphone and it's really convenient. It's almost as helpful as a computer.

The conditional requires 'didn't have' not 'hadn't have' (double auxiliary error). Use 'didn't' for the unreal present conditional. 'As helpful as' is acceptable but 'almost as helpful as' is more natural to compare utility. No definite article error in content, but corrected the verb form and wording for clarity.

× I think it would be difficult for me to use a computer when my house lost Wi-Fi and Internet, so I can't searching or browsing.

✓ I think it would be difficult for me to use a computer if my house lost Wi-Fi and internet access, so I couldn't search or browse.

Use 'if' to express the conditional possibility rather than 'when' for a hypothetical situation. 'Internet access' is more natural than 'Internet'. After losing access, the conditional past 'couldn't' matches 'would be difficult'. 'Search' and 'browse' are base verbs here; remove the incorrect progressive 'searching'.