Swimming— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific supporting details without repeating phrases. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I like swimming a lot. I learned to swim when I was a teenager and have been swimming regularly since then because I believe it is an important life skill and a great way to stay fit.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about your experience.

예시: Yes, learning to swim was difficult at first because I was afraid of deep water. However, I started in a shallow pool, and thanks to my supportive instructor, I gradually gained confidence and improved my skills.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to give a clear and direct response with specific details, and avoid unnecessary repetition.

예시: In my country, most people who enjoy swimming usually go to indoor swimming pools, which often require a membership. There are only a few public swimming areas available.

제안: Your answer is somewhat confusing and repetitive. Try to clearly state the main differences and use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

예시: There are several differences between swimming in a pool and in the sea. For instance, swimming in the sea requires more safety precautions because of waves and currents, so only experienced swimmers usually swim there, while pools are safer and more controlled environments.

× I and yes, I have also learn swimming when I was a teenager

✓ I and yes, I have also learnt swimming when I was a teenager

The verb 'learn' should be in the past participle form 'learnt' when used with 'have' to form the present perfect tense. This is necessary to indicate an action completed in the past with relevance to the present.

× I have been swimming from since then

✓ I have been swimming since then

The phrase 'from since then' is redundant. 'Since' alone is sufficient to indicate the starting point of an action continuing to the present.

× Initially when I Start learning swimming, it was very difficult for me

✓ Initially when I started learning swimming, it was very difficult for me

The verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started' to match the past time reference 'Initially' and 'was' in the sentence.

× I had a full body of water and going into the deep pools

✓ I had a fear of water and going into the deep pools

The phrase 'a full body of water' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'fear of water'. Also, 'going into the deep pools' is a phrase fragment and needs to be connected properly.

× I you I started, I started it in in the shallow pool

✓ I started it in the shallow pool

The phrase 'I you I started' is redundant and incorrect. The correct form is 'I started it in the shallow pool'.

× In my country there unless they are very less pitches should people who loves to go to swimming has has to have a membership to any club or anything

✓ In my country, unless there are very few pitches, people who love to go swimming have to have a membership to a club or something

The sentence has multiple pronoun and subject-verb agreement errors. 'They' is misplaced, 'less' should be 'few' for countable nouns, 'loves' should be 'love' to agree with plural 'people', and 'has has' is a repetition and should be 'have'.

× There are many indoor pools and people of people have to go there too as well

✓ There are many indoor pools and people have to go there as well

The phrase 'people of people' is incorrect and redundant. Also, 'too as well' is repetitive; 'as well' alone suffices.

× The first, the most important difference is the safety is the safety requirements in a see people who are exporting swimming or who are professionally trained in swimming can can can swim in the sea

✓ The first, the most important difference is the safety requirements in the sea. People who are expert swimmers or who are professionally trained in swimming can swim in the sea

The phrase 'in a see' should be 'in the sea'. 'Exporting swimming' is incorrect; it should be 'expert swimmers'. The repetition 'can can can' is an error and should be 'can' once.

× whereas people who just who just take swimming as well

✓ whereas people who just take swimming as a hobby

The phrase 'take swimming as well' is incomplete and unclear. It should specify 'as a hobby' or similar to clarify the meaning.