Swimming— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm cho câu trả lời không tự nhiên và khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Ngoài ra, hãy tập trung vào việc trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể, có liên quan.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy swimming. It has always been my favorite outdoor activity because it helps me stay healthy and relaxed after school. When I was a teenager, swimming even helped me improve my posture and grow taller.

제안: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời trở nên tự nhiên và dễ hiểu hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối các ý và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể và rõ ràng hơn về trải nghiệm học bơi của bạn.

예시: Yes, learning to swim was quite difficult for me because I was afraid of water when I was young. However, after practicing regularly, I became more confident. In fact, I could swim 100 meters when I was seven years old.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng các liên từ để làm cho câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể về địa điểm bơi lội phổ biến.

예시: People in my country usually like to swim in swimming pools and at the beach. Many enjoy swimming in the sea because it is refreshing, especially after a long day. Older people often prefer pools because they are safer and cleaner.

제안: Bạn cần cải thiện cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh những câu không hoàn chỉnh. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể và chính xác về sự khác biệt giữa bơi ở hồ bơi và biển.

예시: The main difference between swimming in a pool and swimming in the sea is convenience. Pools are usually easier to access in towns or cities, but you often have to pay an entrance fee. On the other hand, swimming in the sea is free, but it can be less safe due to waves and currents.

× Swimming was a my favorite outdoor activities because it's very helpful for my mentor and it's helped me taller when I was a teenager and it's very relaxed for me after school.

✓ Swimming was my favorite outdoor activity because it's very helpful for my health and it helped me grow taller when I was a teenager and it's very relaxing for me after school.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'my favorite outdoor activities'. 'My' already specifies possession, so 'a' is unnecessary. 'Activities' should be singular 'activity' to match 'favorite'. 'Mentor' is incorrect in context; likely meant 'health'. 'Helped me taller' should be 'helped me grow taller'. 'Relaxed' should be 'relaxing' to describe the effect.

× I could swim 100 semesters when I was 7.

✓ I could swim 100 meters when I was 7.

The word 'semesters' is incorrect in this context; likely meant 'meters'. Also, 'could swim' is correct past tense modal verb usage here.

× People in my country often go swimming in the pool and in sea.

✓ People in my country often go swimming in the pool and in the sea.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'sea' when referring to a specific body of water.

× I think so because I am also swimming very relaxed and really straight after a long day at school, so old people like each very much.

✓ I think so because I also find swimming very relaxing and refreshing after a long day at school, so older people like it very much.

'Swimming very relaxed' is incorrect; should be 'find swimming very relaxing'. 'Really straight' is incorrect; likely meant 'refreshing'. 'Old people like each very much' is incorrect; should be 'older people like it very much'.

× For me, the most different between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea. Convenient.

✓ For me, the biggest difference between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea is convenience.

The original sentence is incomplete and fragmented. It needs to be combined into a complete sentence with subject and verb.

× Swimming in the pool is more convenient than in the sea, because either way in your town or in your city.

✓ Swimming in the pool is more convenient than in the sea because there is one either in your town or in your city.

The phrase 'either way in your town or in your city' is unclear and incorrect. It should specify that there is either a pool in your town or city.

× But you must buy a fine when you swim in the pool.

✓ But you must pay a fee when you swim in the pool.

'Buy a fine' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'pay a fee'.

× In contrast, don't need in swimming when you're swimming in the sea.

✓ In contrast, you don't need to pay a fee when you're swimming in the sea.

The sentence is missing the subject 'you' and the verb 'need to pay a fee'. Also, 'in swimming' is incorrect.