Swimming— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. For example, instead of 'I find it is a best exercise,' say 'I find it to be one of the best exercises.' Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I love swimming because it is an excellent way to stay fit and relieve stress. I usually swim in the morning, which helps me start my day energetically.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, correct the phrase 'I people' to 'people'. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: No, it is not difficult to learn how to swim because with some practice and proper guidance, people can learn it effectively.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Avoid filler words and use correct prepositions. Also, provide more specific details and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: In my country, people usually go to the beach to swim and relax. Sometimes, they also visit countryside pools to enjoy swimming in a peaceful environment.

제안: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use plural form 'differences' and provide clear comparisons using linking words like 'while' or 'whereas'.

예시: There are major differences between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea. For instance, swimming in the pool is generally safer, whereas swimming in the sea can be more dangerous due to strong currents.

× I find it is a best exercise.

✓ I find it is the best exercise.

The phrase 'a best exercise' is incorrect because 'best' is a superlative adjective and should be preceded by the definite article 'the'. So, it should be 'the best exercise'.

× after some practice and, uh, proper guidance, I people, uh, learn, uh, swimming properly.

✓ after some practice and proper guidance, people learn swimming properly.

The phrase 'I people' is incorrect as it mixes first person singular pronoun 'I' with plural noun 'people'. The correct form is simply 'people' to refer generally to people in plural.

× people usually go in a beach and uh, bath and sometimes they go countryside pool and the love to enjoy.

✓ people usually go to a beach and bathe, and sometimes they go to countryside pools and love to enjoy.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'go' when referring to a place; it should be 'go to'. Also, 'bath' as a noun is incorrect here; the verb 'bathe' is appropriate. 'Countryside pool' should be plural 'countryside pools' and 'the love to enjoy' should be 'love to enjoy'.

× there are a major difference between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea.

✓ there is a major difference between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea.

The subject 'difference' is singular, so the verb should be singular 'is' instead of plural 'are'. Also, 'a major difference' is correct for singular.

× swimming in the sea it's a create, uh, more dangerous and uh, current.

✓ swimming in the sea is more dangerous and has strong currents.

The phrase 'it's a create, uh, more dangerous and uh, current' is grammatically incorrect. 'Create' is not appropriate here; likely intended 'greater'. Also, 'current' should be plural 'currents' and the sentence should be restructured for clarity.