Swimming— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体自然且信息明确，但存在语法错误、重复表达及填充词（umm）。建议：1) 修正语法（如冠词和单复数、时态）；2) 精简并避免填充词，控制句子不超过5句；3) 使用连接词使叙述更连贯，如“because”、“so”、“which”替换重复结构；4) 提供更具体细节（例如喜欢什么泳姿或什么时候游泳）。

예시: Yes, I enjoy swimming because it helps me relax and stay fit. When I was at university I took a compulsory swimming course for one semester, and by the end I could swim confidently in the deep end. That progress encouraged me to keep practising and improve my freestyle technique.

제안: 内容具体但表达不够流畅，存在语法错误和重复（“stay in calm”应为“stay calm”），以及填充词。建议：1) 使用正确短语和动词形式；2) 用连接词（for example, so, because）把原因和结果连接清楚；3) 把第二句拆成两句以提高清晰度；4) 给出具体例子说明如何克服紧张（如练习呼吸）。

예시: Not really. It only took me six lessons to learn the basic strokes, and on the seventh lesson my instructor asked me to try the deep end, which went well. The hardest part for me is staying calm and relaxing my muscles, because I tend to get anxious when I try to perform better; for example, I practise breathing exercises to help me stay relaxed.

제안: 回答直接但有语法错误和不自然表达（如“don't enjoy to go”应为“don't enjoy going”, “infecting with skin diseases”应改为“catching skin infections”）。建议：1) 修正动词不定式与动名词用法；2) 使用更自然的词汇描述担忧；3) 可补充具体例子或替代选择（如私人俱乐部或海滩）。

예시: Public swimming pools are very popular in my country because they are convenient and affordable. However, I don't enjoy going to public pools because I'm worried about catching skin infections; instead, I prefer swimming at a private gym or by the sea when I can.

제안: 坦诚不会游海是可以的，但回答过于简短且有语法错误（“have high risk”应为“carries higher risks”）。建议：1) 在承认经验有限后给出更丰富的推测性细节并使用条件语气；2) 避免重复填充词并用连词使句子更流畅；3) 举例说明海泳的风险和池泳的优点以增加内容具体性。

예시: I haven't actually swum in the sea, so I can't speak from experience. However, if I had to guess, swimming in the sea probably carries higher risks because of tides, waves and marine life, whereas pools are more controlled with lifeguards and clear water.

× Yes, I enjoy swimming, it's one of the greatest exercise to relax.

✓ Yes, I enjoy swimming; it's one of the greatest exercises to relax.

句中“exercise”应为可数名词复数“exercises”，因为“one of the ...”结构之后名词需要用复数形式。建议记住“one of the + 复数名词”的固定结构。

× Back on university I took one required course on swimming for one semester and now I can swim at the deep end, which is so, umm, encouraging for me to keep improving on my swimming skills.

✓ Back at university I took a required swimming course for one semester, and now I can swim at the deep end, which is very encouraging for me to keep improving my swimming skills.

“Back on university”用法不当，应为“Back at university”。“one required course on swimming”更自然为“a required swimming course”。“so, umm, encouraging”口语中“so”可改为“very”更正式；“improving on my swimming skills”中的“on”多余，改为“improving my swimming skills”。建议掌握固定介词短语（back at）和形容词/动词搭配的常见用法。

× Not really, it only took me 6 lessons to learn the basic strokes and on the 7th lesson my instructor asked me to swim in the deep and which went well.

✓ Not really. It only took me six lessons to learn the basic strokes, and on the seventh lesson my instructor asked me to swim in the deep, which went well.

句子中标点和连接不当导致结构混乱，需用逗号或句号分开。“and which went well”中“which”应指代前句，前面要用逗号连接而不是并列连词后再接“which”。另外数字写作上建议在正式写作中使用单词形式（six, seventh）。建议注意句子连接与关系代词的指代位置。

× The hardest part for me is to stay in calm in the water and umm relax my muscles because I always wanted to perform a better which got me stressed.

✓ The hardest part for me is to stay calm in the water and relax my muscles, because I always want to perform better, which makes me stressed.

“stay in calm”错误，应为“stay calm”。“perform a better”不完整，应为“perform better”。时态上原句用过去时“不一致”，应使用一般现在时“want”与“makes”以表达习惯性情况。建议注意形容词短语和副词比较级的正确搭配以及时态一致性。

× I would say public swimming pools are really popular for people to go to swim in my country, but personally I don't enjoy to go to public swimming pools because I'm afraid of infecting with skin diseases.

✓ I would say public swimming pools are really popular places for people to go swimming in my country, but personally I don't enjoy going to public swimming pools because I'm afraid of catching skin infections.

“popular for people to go to swim”表达笨拙，改为“popular places for people to go swimming”。“don't enjoy to go”英语中不定式搭配错误，应为“don't enjoy going”。“infecting with skin diseases”用法错误，应为“catching skin infections”或“contracting skin diseases”。建议记住动词搭配（enjoy + -ing）和常用短语（catch/contract + disease）。

× Well personally I haven't swum in the sea so I don't know the difference between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea. But uh. But if I have to guess, I would say swimming in a sea is more dangerous and have high risk compared to swimming in a pool.

✓ Well, personally I haven't swum in the sea, so I don't know the difference between swimming in a pool and swimming in the sea. But if I had to guess, I would say swimming in the sea is more dangerous and carries a higher risk compared to swimming in a pool.

句子中“if I have to guess”更自然的虚拟表达是“if I had to guess”。“swimming in a sea”冠词使用不当，通常说“swimming in the sea”或“the sea”。“have high risk”语法错误，应为“carries a higher risk”或“is riskier”。建议注意虚拟语气、冠词用法与固定搭配。