Friends— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi hataları ve anlam belirsizlikleri var. Cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için, zaman ifadelerini doğru kullanmalı ve cümleleri daha net kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, gereksiz tekrarları azaltmalısınız.

예시: I have a friend whom I've known since kindergarten, so we've been friends for over 20 years. We understand each other very well, and I have shared many wonderful and enjoyable moments with her.

제안: Cevabınızda anlamı netleştirmek için daha açık ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, 'depends to our life rushes' ifadesi yanlış ve anlamsız. Doğru bağlaçlar ve ifadelerle cümlenizi geliştirin.

예시: It depends on our schedules. Since we graduated from university and started working in corporate jobs, our free time has become limited.

제안: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi hataları ve anlam bozuklukları var. 'If you're so busy, he come over to my place' ifadesi yanlış. Daha doğal ve doğru cümle yapıları kullanmalısınız.

예시: It depends on how busy we are. We enjoy going to new restaurants to try good food and listen to music, but when we're busy, my friend often comes over to my place to relax.

제안: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi ve kelime kullanımı hataları var. 'I would go often without' ifadesi anlamsız. Ayrıca, zaman uyumu ve bağlaç kullanımı geliştirilmelidir.

예시: When we were at university, I often went out with my friends to discover new restaurants and cafes. However, now we are too busy, so we usually spend time at home and rarely catch up.

제안: Cümleniz çok karışık ve anlaşılması zor. Gereksiz dolgu kelimeleri kullanılmış. Düşüncelerinizi daha açık ve düzenli ifade etmeye çalışın.

예시: In my opinion, friends are very important because the five people closest to you influence who you are. If you have a supportive and joyful environment, you will also become a supportive and joyful person.

제안: Cümleniz genel olarak anlaşılır ancak bazı ifadeler daha doğal olabilir. 'Introvert person' yerine 'an introverted person' demelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi daha akıcı bağlaçlarla bağlayın.

예시: Actually, I'm a bit of an introverted person, so I don't feel comfortable around large groups. I usually spend time with one or two close friends separately.

제안: Cümlenizde tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları var. 'We are love to spend time' ve 'I love to cooking' yanlış kullanımlar. Daha doğru ve doğal ifadeler kullanmalısınız.

예시: Yes, I definitely invite my friends to my home. We enjoy home parties, spending time together, and I love cooking and preparing dinner for these gatherings.

제안: Cevabınız iyi ancak 'meet and spend time there' ifadesi biraz tekrarlı. Daha akıcı ve doğal bağlaçlar kullanabilirsiniz.

예시: Definitely, there is a difference. In the past, we met at cafes near our homes, but now we often plan trips to different cities or countries to explore new places and spend time together.

제안: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi hataları var. 'Depends the personality' yerine 'depends on the personality' demelisiniz. Ayrıca, 'extrovert people chooses' yanlış, 'choose' olmalı.

예시: It actually depends on a person's personality. I'm an introverted person, so I prefer calm and quiet places, while extroverted people usually choose crowded and noisy places.

× I have a friend we have known each other for since kindergarten.

✓ I have a friend whom I have known since kindergarten.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'we have known each other for since kindergarten' which is redundant and grammatically incorrect. The phrase 'for since' is incorrect; 'since' alone is sufficient to indicate the starting point of knowing someone. Also, 'we have known each other' is awkward here because the subject is 'I have a friend'. Using 'whom I have known since kindergarten' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× We know each other from the inside out and I live the most beautiful and most enjoyable days with her.

✓ We know each other inside out and I live the most beautiful and enjoyable days with her.

The phrase 'from the inside out' is incorrect in this context; the correct idiom is 'inside out' without 'from the'. Also, 'most beautiful and most enjoyable' is redundant; 'most beautiful and enjoyable' is sufficient.

× Actually our lives changed a lot in two years.

✓ Actually, our lives have changed a lot in the past two years.

The original sentence uses simple past 'changed' but the context implies a change continuing up to now, so present perfect 'have changed' is more appropriate. Also, 'in two years' is vague; 'in the past two years' clarifies the time frame.

× We have graduated from university and we started working at corporate jobs.

✓ We have graduated from university and have started working at corporate jobs.

The sentence mixes present perfect 'have graduated' with simple past 'started'. For consistency and to indicate recent past actions with present relevance, both verbs should be in present perfect: 'have graduated' and 'have started'.

× So it depends to our life rushes.

✓ So it depends on our life rushes.

The verb 'depend' is followed by the preposition 'on', not 'to'. Therefore, 'depends to' is incorrect; it should be 'depends on'.

× So if you're so busy, he come over to my place.

✓ So if you're so busy, he comes over to my place.

The verb 'come' should agree with the third person singular subject 'he', so it should be 'comes' instead of 'come'.

× In the past when we were at university, I would say yes, I would go often without.

✓ In the past, when we were at university, I would say yes, I would go out often.

The phrase 'go often without' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'go out often'. Also, a comma after 'In the past' improves sentence clarity.

× With my friends we were discovering the new restaurants, new cafes.

✓ With my friends, we were discovering new restaurants and new cafes.

The article 'the' before 'new restaurants' and 'new cafes' is unnecessary because the restaurants and cafes are not specific. Also, adding 'and' improves sentence flow.

× But now we are so too busy for this and we spent time at home or we are barely catch up our lives.

✓ But now we are too busy for this and we spend time at home or we barely catch up with our lives.

The phrase 'we spent time' is past tense but the context is present, so it should be 'we spend time'. Also, 'we are barely catch up' is incorrect; it should be 'we barely catch up'. The verb 'catch up' requires the preposition 'with' after it.

× I think do it 5 persons who are nearby you defines you in a way, uh, because if you have supportive environment, you have joyful environment, you become a supportive and joyful person.

✓ I think the five people who are near you define you in a way, because if you have a supportive environment, you have a joyful environment, and you become a supportive and joyful person.

'5 persons' is unnatural; 'five people' is preferred. 'Nearby you' should be 'near you'. The verb 'defines' should be 'define' to agree with plural subject 'five people'. Also, articles 'a' are needed before 'supportive environment' and 'joyful environment'. Added 'and' for sentence flow.

× Actually I'm a bit of introvert person so I don't feel comfortable around a lot of people.

✓ Actually, I'm a bit of an introverted person, so I don't feel comfortable around a lot of people.

'Introvert' is a noun; the adjective form 'introverted' is appropriate here. Also, 'a bit of an introverted person' requires the article 'an' before 'introverted'. Commas improve sentence clarity.

× I always have one friend or two friends.

✓ I always have one or two friends.

The phrase 'one friend or two friends' is redundant; 'one or two friends' is more natural and concise.

× Actually I have a handful of friends and I want to spend time separately.

✓ Actually, I have a handful of friends and I want to spend time separately with them.

The phrase 'spend time separately' is unclear; adding 'with them' clarifies the meaning that time is spent separately with each friend. Also, a comma after 'Actually' improves readability.

× Yes, I definitely invite, invite, invite my friends to my home.

✓ Yes, I definitely invite my friends to my home.

Repeating 'invite' three times is unnecessary and incorrect in formal speech. One 'invite' is sufficient.

× We, uh, we are love to spend time together and I'm also love to cooking and I love preparing dinner, uh, to parties that are designed in my home.

✓ We love to spend time together, and I also love cooking and preparing dinner for parties held at my home.

'We are love' is incorrect; it should be 'we love'. 'I'm also love to cooking' is incorrect; it should be 'I also love cooking'. 'To parties that are designed in my home' is awkward; 'for parties held at my home' is clearer.

× Definitely, there is a difference between the past and now.

✓ Definitely, there is a difference between the past and the present.

'Now' is a time adverb and does not parallel 'the past' as a noun phrase. 'The present' is the correct noun phrase to contrast with 'the past'.

× Because actually it depends the personality.

✓ Because actually, it depends on the personality.

The verb 'depend' requires the preposition 'on'. 'Depends the personality' is incorrect; it should be 'depends on the personality'.

× I'm an introvert person so I love places which is calm and quiet and maybe extrovert people chooses the crowded and noisy places.

✓ I'm an introverted person, so I love places which are calm and quiet, and maybe extroverted people choose crowded and noisy places.

'Places which is' should be 'places which are' to agree in number. 'Extrovert people chooses' should be 'extroverted people choose' to agree with plural subject. Also, 'introvert' and 'extrovert' should be adjectives 'introverted' and 'extroverted' here.