Friends— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. "I help about the reason for all of them") and grammar mistakes (possessives, verb tenses). Use linking words like "because" or "since" to explain the gap in contact.

예시: Yes. I have a friend I've known for about 15 years because we went to the same middle and secondary schools. We lost touch for a couple of years when we started working, but we still keep in contact occasionally.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific examples. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and avoid redundant or confusing phrases. Use linking words like "but" and "now" to contrast past and present activities.

예시: We used to hang out a lot and try different places together. Now, because we are busy with short-term jobs, we usually meet at a nice cafe on weekends and catch up over coffee.

제안: Answer directly and organize information: first say where you met in the past, then where you meet now. Fix unclear words ("union", "writing to CBD") and grammar (verb forms). Use linking phrases like "formerly" and "now" or "these days".

예시: We used to meet at school when we were students. These days we often meet in the central business district because we work there and sometimes run into each other at lunchtime.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer (Yes/No) and give a concise frequency and reason. Avoid confusing phrasing and check subject–verb agreement and plural forms. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to explain reasons.

예시: Not as often nowadays. We usually meet about once every three months because we are all busy with deadline-driven jobs, especially those of us working as consultants.

제안: Give a direct opinion followed by two specific criteria. Correct awkward vocabulary ("class one") and phrasing. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to clarify reasons and provide a strong concluding statement.

예시: Friends are very important to me, but it depends on the relationship. For example, the closer someone is and the longer we've known each other, the more important they are; some of my closest friends are as important to me as family.

제안: State your preference clearly and give two concise reasons with correct vocabulary. Avoid unclear or irrelevant phrases (e.g. "get to your hotel"). Use linking words like "because" and "especially" for clarity.

예시: I prefer spending time with one friend because large groups can feel awkward if people don't know each other well, and one-on-one meetings allow deeper conversations.

제안: Answer directly and briefly, then give a clear reason with specific details. Fix confusing nouns ("stops", "gymnarium") and repetition. Use linking words like "because" and "so".

예시: No, I wouldn't. I live in a very small shared apartment—it's clean but too cramped to host friends comfortably.

제안: Begin with a clear statement of difference, then contrast past and present with specific time expressions. Remove filler words and fix tense consistency. Use linking words like "when" and "now" or "but" to show change.

예시: Yes, definitely. When I was at university we saw each other almost every day because we attended the same classes; now that we work, we usually meet about once a month.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence listing a couple of main factors, then explain each briefly with specific examples. Replace unclear phrases ("exposed to be outside limits", "players") and use linking words like "first", "second", "for example".

예시: Some places are suitable because of practical factors. First, the weather matters—outdoor places are pleasant on sunny days but unsuitable in rain. Second, the venue itself is important—for example, a quiet cafe is better for conversation than a noisy club.

× So we have been in the same middle and secondary school.

✓ So we have been in the same middle and secondary schools.

Plural form is required for 'school' when referring to two levels (middle and secondary) collectively; use 'schools' to match the compound noun. Also 'have been in' is acceptable for having attended both schools together.

× So we have known each other for pretty much 15 years, although we kind of lost each others contact in the last couple of years because we started working.

✓ So we have known each other for pretty much 15 years, although we kind of lost each other's contact in the last couple of years because we started working.

Use the possessive form 'each other's' (with apostrophe) when indicating possession. 'Each others' is incorrect; the apostrophe shows that the contact belongs to each other.

× I help about the reason for all of them.

✓ I can explain the reason for that.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace 'I help about the reason for all of them' with a concise, grammatically correct phrase such as 'I can explain the reason for that' to convey the intended meaning.

× We used to and hang out a lot together and probably pick up a nice spot and and go there and join ourselves.

✓ We used to hang out a lot together, probably pick a nice spot and go there to catch up.

Remove extraneous 'and', use correct verb 'pick' rather than 'pick up' in this context, and use 'catch up' instead of the awkward 'join ourselves'. Also streamline the sentence structure for clarity.

× But right now as soon as we are all short term working about, it's mostly just picking up a nice cafe during a weekend and having a chat over coffee.

✓ But right now, since we are all working short-term, we mostly just pick a nice cafe on the weekend and have a chat over coffee.

'Short term working about' is awkward; use 'working short-term'. Change 'it's mostly just picking up' to 'we mostly just pick' to match subject and tense. Use 'on the weekend' for habitual meeting time. Ensure verb agreement with subject.

× Well, it used to be back in union, back in schools right now sometimes writing to CBD, because we working in CBD certains we run into each other during lunchtime.

✓ Well, it used to be back at university and in school; right now, sometimes when we're working in the CBD we run into each other during lunchtime.

Use 'at university' rather than 'in union'. Use 'in school' or 'at school' for past schooling. 'Writing to CBD' is incorrect; use 'working in the CBD'. Add 'when' to form a subordinate clause and correct verb form 'we're' (we are). 'Certains' is unclear and removed.

× We used to and hang out a lot together and probably pick up a nice spot and and go there and join ourselves.

✓ We used to hang out a lot together, probably pick a nice spot and go there to catch up.

Use 'used to' with the base form 'hang out' (no 'and'). Ensure verbs are in base form after 'used to' to indicate habitual past action.

× It's typically every three months, like almost quarterly like you pick out through it.

✓ It's typically every three months, almost quarterly, like you might expect.

Original has unclear phrasing 'you pick out through it'. Replace with 'you might expect' for a natural expression. Maintain singular 'it is' for the schedule and correct surrounding phrasing.

× It depends, right? Just like many other things in life. It depends on how close we are, how long we've known each other, what I have done to him or her and what he or she has done for me.

✓ It depends, right? Just like many other things in life. It depends on how close we are, how long we've known each other, what I have done for him or her and what he or she has done for me.

Use 'done for him or her' instead of 'done to him or her' when referring to helpful actions; 'do something to someone' often implies harm, whereas 'do something for someone' implies assistance or favor.

× For the really class one, I would say as close as my family.

✓ For the really close ones, I would say they're as close as my family.

'Really class one' is incorrect. Use 'really close ones' (plural) to refer to close friends, and include a verb 'they're' for a complete sentence. Maintain plural agreement.

× I would say one of them is better because sometimes if you prefer a really large can get a bit awkward, especially you don't know each other really well and I think being with just one person can with you have the time to get to your hotel.

✓ I would say spending time with one person is better because a really large group can get a bit awkward, especially if you don't know each other well, and being with just one person gives you time to get to know them.

Rewrite for clarity and correct quantifier 'a really large group'. Fix conditional 'if you don't know' and correct phrase 'get to your hotel' to 'get to know them' which matches intent. Use proper verb forms 'gives' to agree with subject.

× No, absolutely not, because I'm living in a shared apartment with the size of a shoebox.

✓ No, absolutely not, because I'm living in a shared apartment the size of a shoebox.

Remove 'with' which is unnecessary. Use 'the size of a shoebox' as a noun phrase modifying 'apartment'.

× So it's it's clean, but it's full of stops and leaving little gymnarium for two people.

✓ It's clean, but it's full of stuff and leaves little room for two people.

Replace nonsensical 'stops' with 'stuff' and 'leaving little gymnarium' with 'leaves little room'. Match verb form 'leaves' for the singular apartment and use 'room' to express space.

× Uh, before this name, umm, I was back in uni, we used to meet a lot in classes, even if we didn't want to meet each other that often.

✓ Before I graduated, when I was at uni, we used to meet a lot in classes, even though we didn't intend to meet that often.

Clarify 'before this name' to 'before I graduated' or similar; use 'when I was at uni' for time clause. 'Even if we didn't want to meet each other that often' is awkward; 'even though we didn't intend to meet that often' is clearer and correct.

× It almost every day, but then we got to work, then we probably get to see each other like every month.

✓ It was almost every day, but once we started work, we now probably see each other about once a month.

Maintain past tense 'was' for the past habit, and use present simple 'see' for the current habitual action. 'Got to work' is changed to 'started work' for clarity.

× The first thing I can think of is the weather, whether it's exposed to be outside limits or not.

✓ The first thing I can think of is the weather, whether it's suitable to be outdoors or not.

'Exposed to be outside limits' is ungrammatical. Use 'suitable to be outdoors' to express whether weather allows outdoor meetings.

× Like if you think outside probably only good and during sunny days if it's raining it's probably not.

✓ For example, outdoor places are only good on sunny days; if it's raining, they probably aren't suitable.

Rewrite for grammatical clarity: use 'outdoor places' as subject and match verb agreement 'they aren't suitable'. Ensure conditional sense is clear.

× It also depends on how nicely the players use obviously.

✓ It also depends on how nicely the place is maintained, obviously.

Original is unclear: 'players' likely intended 'place' and 'use' wrong verb. Use passive 'is maintained' to describe condition of the place and add 'obviously' at end.