Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences complete and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about why these websites suit your personality.

예시: I often visit fashion websites such as SSS, St. Styles, Georgia, and Savannah because they offer clothes that perfectly suit my personality. Moreover, I find it convenient to shop from these sites as they provide a wide variety of styles that match my taste.

제안: Your answer has some sentence fragments and lacks smooth flow. Try to combine your ideas into complete sentences using linking words. Also, avoid repeating the same information and focus on specific reasons why you like the website.

예시: My favourite website is Savannah because it offers a wide range of trendy clothes that perfectly match my personality. Additionally, I appreciate their good quality products and reasonable prices, which make shopping enjoyable.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Please try to answer directly with clear sentences and use linking words to explain the changes. Be specific about what kind of changes happened.

예시: Yes, the fashion websites I visit have made many changes recently. For example, they have updated their collections by offering new trendy items at reasonable prices to attract more customers.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct grammar and structure your answer logically with linking words. Also, be more specific about why these websites are popular.

예시: In India, fashion websites are very popular, especially among women, because online shopping saves a lot of time. Moreover, these websites offer reasonable prices and a variety of trendy, fresh clothes that attract many customers.

× Actually I usually visit websites of clothes like SSS, St. Styles, Georgia or Savannah because I can easily find my clothes there that.

✓ Actually I usually visit clothing websites like SSS, St. Styles, Georgia, or Savannah because I can easily find my clothes there.

The phrase 'websites of clothes' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'clothing websites' or 'websites for clothes'. Also, the word 'that' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× My favorite? Is a fashion website it is Savannah because they offer a wide range of trendy clothes that are.

✓ My favorite is a fashion website; it is Savannah because they offer a wide range of trendy clothes that are.

The sentence is fragmented and missing proper punctuation. Also, 'My favorite?' should be connected properly to the rest of the sentence. The phrase 'that are.' is incomplete and needs to be connected to the next clause.

× Perfectly match my personality and I usually buy my outfits from the site since they provide good quality and reasonable prices.

✓ They perfectly match my personality, and I usually buy my outfits from the site since they provide good quality and reasonable prices.

The sentence lacks a subject at the beginning; 'Perfectly match' should be preceded by 'They' to clarify the subject. Also, a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.

× Yes I did are many changes to the website I usually visit is a fashion website and it changes the variety of clothes they offered knew trendy items for the customers in reasonable prices.

✓ Yes, there have been many changes to the website I usually visit. It is a fashion website, and it has changed the variety of clothes they offer, adding new trendy items for customers at reasonable prices.

The original sentence has multiple tense errors and incorrect verb forms. 'Did are' is incorrect; 'there have been' is correct for present perfect tense. 'It changes' should be 'it has changed' to indicate recent changes. 'They offered knew' should be 'they offer new'. Also, sentence structure is improved by splitting into two sentences.

× In India, fashion websites are very popular because womans mostly find it easier to buy from online stores because it saves a lot of time and they give reasonable prices and you trendy fresh clothes for the customers.

✓ In India, fashion websites are very popular because women mostly find it easier to buy from online stores as it saves a lot of time, and they offer reasonable prices and trendy fresh clothes for customers.

The word 'womans' is incorrect; the plural form is 'women'. Also, 'you trendy fresh clothes' is incorrect; it should be 'offer trendy fresh clothes'. The sentence is improved by correcting plural forms and verb usage.