Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, like), and use linking words to add a brief reason or example. Use specific phrasing (e.g. "social media and video sites") and limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I often visit social media and video websites. For example, I use Facebook and Instagram to keep in touch with friends, and I watch tutorials and vlogs on YouTube to learn new skills.

제안: Give a direct, organized answer: name one favourite site, say why you like it with one or two specific reasons or features, and avoid repetition or awkward phrasing. Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

예시: My favourite website is Alibaba because it offers a wide range of products at competitive prices. I like browsing different sellers and reading reviews before I buy, which helps me find good deals quickly.

제안: Answer directly and add a specific example of a change. Use linking words (e.g. "for example", "also") to make the answer coherent and avoid vague adjectives like "more precise" without explanation.

예시: Yes, many websites have become more user-friendly and faster. For example, shopping sites now have better search filters and mobile apps, which makes it easier to find products and complete purchases quickly.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific categories and a brief reason. Use linking words (first, also, finally) and avoid informal intensifiers like "so much".

예시: Social media and video platforms are the most popular in my country. For example, people use Facebook and TikTok to share news and entertainment, and many also use YouTube and online stores for learning and shopping.

× I generally visit some social websites like Facebook, uh, like Twitter and like, uh, Instagram and uh, behind of this I generally search the website like, uh, YouTube.

✓ I generally visit social websites like Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram, and besides these I usually visit websites like YouTube.

'behind of this' is incorrect; use 'besides these' or 'apart from these'. Also 'visit some social websites' is wordy; 'visit social websites' is natural. Use commas to separate items and 'usually' for frequency.

× OK, my thing, my favorite website is uh, the buying websites that will be uh alibaba.com or that will be shahaji.com. That is shop.com.

✓ My favorite websites for shopping are alibaba.com, shahaji.com, and shop.com.

The original uses awkward pronouns and singular/plural mismatch ('website' vs multiple sites). Use plural 'websites' and list them directly. Remove filler phrases like 'my thing' and 'that will be'.

× I think as a woman, I have the practice to practice for shopping.

✓ I think, as a woman, I am used to shopping.

'have the practice to practice for shopping' is incorrect and redundant. Use 'am used to shopping' to express habitual action. This fixes verb form and simplifies the sentence.

× Yeah, I think there are a lot of changes in website nowadays and the website is are now more precise, more comfortable and more user friendly.

✓ Yes, I think there have been a lot of changes in websites nowadays, and websites are now more precise, more convenient, and more user-friendly.

Use 'have been' for changes that occurred over time. 'In website' should be 'in websites' or 'to websites'. Remove duplicate verb 'is are'. Use 'convenient' instead of 'comfortable' for website usability and hyphenate 'user-friendly'.

× In my country I can say social website is so popular and then YouTube, then Tiktok and then various kinds of shopping websites are so much popular.

✓ In my country, social websites are very popular, such as YouTube, TikTok, and various shopping websites.

Subject-verb agreement: 'social website is' should be plural 'social websites are'. 'so much popular' is incorrect; use 'very popular' or 'extremely popular'. Use 'such as' to introduce examples and capitalize 'TikTok'.