Challenges— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "memorize it all" and clarify your points. For example, say "Biology is challenging because it involves a lot of complex theories that I need to understand and remember."

예시: I think biology is the most challenging subject because it has many complex theories and concepts that require careful understanding and memorization.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar, e.g., "how metabolism happens" instead of "how does metabolism happens." Also, avoid repeating words like "extra" twice. Try to say, "I often challenge myself by reading additional questions and asking my biology teacher about topics like how metabolism happens in the human body."

예시: Yes, I like to challenge myself. For instance, in biology lessons, I often read extra materials and ask my teacher questions about topics such as how metabolism happens in the human body to deepen my understanding.

제안: Your answer repeats ideas and has some grammatical mistakes. Try to combine sentences and use linking words like "because" only once. For example, "I like a challenging life because it motivates me and helps me grow. Solving problems by myself gives me a sense of achievement and valuable lessons."

예시: Yes, I enjoy a life full of challenges because it motivates me and helps me become more successful. Whenever I solve problems on my own, I feel a strong sense of achievement and learn important lessons.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but some grammar and word choice errors. For example, "emotion is always the ultra most important" is unclear. Try: "First, I calm myself down because controlling emotions is very important. Then, I try to see the problem from different perspectives, including those of other people involved, to find alternative solutions."

예시: When I face challenges, I first calm myself down because managing emotions is crucial. Then, I try to consider the problem from different perspectives, including those of other people, to find alternative ways to solve it.

× I personally think that biology is the most challenging subject because there are a lot of complicated theoretical knowledge that I have to memorize it all in order to get no into all the content.

✓ I personally think that biology is the most challenging subject because there is a lot of complicated theoretical knowledge that I have to memorize in order to understand all the content.

The word 'knowledge' is an uncountable noun and should be treated as singular, so 'there are' should be corrected to 'there is'. Also, 'get no into all the content' is incorrect; it should be 'understand all the content'. Avoid using 'it' after 'memorize' because the object is already mentioned.

× For example, in biology lesson I always read some extra questions to ask my biology teachers such as how does metabolism happens in a human body in order to gain more extra knowledge in biology.

✓ For example, in biology lessons I always read some extra questions to ask my biology teachers, such as how metabolism happens in the human body, in order to gain extra knowledge in biology.

The phrase 'how does metabolism happens' is incorrect; it should be 'how metabolism happens' because in indirect questions the auxiliary 'does' is not used and the verb should be in base form or present tense. Also, 'biology lesson' should be plural 'biology lessons' to match general meaning. 'More extra' is redundant; use 'extra' alone.

× Yes, because I think that challenges can keep my life to be motivated and more successful.

✓ Yes, because I think that challenges can keep me motivated and make my life more successful.

The phrase 'keep my life to be motivated' is incorrect. We say 'keep me motivated' because motivation applies to a person, not life. Also, 'more successful' should be linked to 'life' directly, so rephrasing improves clarity.

× Because I think that every time when I can solve the difficulties or problems by myself, I can gain a sense of achievement and learn a lot more lessons.

✓ I think that every time I solve difficulties or problems by myself, I gain a sense of achievement and learn many more lessons.

Starting a sentence with 'Because I think that' followed by a comma creates a sentence fragment. It is better to combine the ideas into one sentence. Also, 'a lot more lessons' is better expressed as 'many more lessons' for countable nouns.

× First, I would try to calm myself down because I know emotion is always the ultra most important.

✓ First, I would try to calm myself down because I know emotions are always the most important.

The phrase 'ultra most important' is not standard English. Use 'the most important' to express superlative degree. Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to refer generally to feelings.

× Second, I will try to think in different perspective.

✓ Second, I will try to think from a different perspective.

The correct preposition with 'perspective' is 'from', not 'in'. Also, 'different perspective' should be preceded by an article 'a'.

× Thinking in a way that different stakeholders may think, help me to think more alternative pathway to solve the problems.

✓ Thinking in the way that different stakeholders may think helps me to find more alternative pathways to solve problems.

The subject 'Thinking...' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' not 'help'. Also, 'more alternative pathway' should be plural 'more alternative pathways' to agree in number. 'Help me to think' is better expressed as 'helps me to find' for clarity.