Challenges— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and vary vocabulary; use a clear topic sentence followed by one specific supporting detail and a linking word. Reduce minor repetition (e.g., "timeline of different incidents" and "dates" overlap) and replace generic phrases with precise expressions.

예시: I find history the most challenging subject because I struggle to remember dates and causal links between events. For example, I often mix up the timelines of wars, which makes it hard to explain how one event led to another.

제안: Good answer: natural, relevant and specific. To improve further, tighten structure by putting the main idea first, then one or two concrete examples linked with a connector like "for example" or "for instance," and avoid extra adjectives that don't add meaning.

예시: Yes, I do sometimes. For example, when I feel confident I take solo trips abroad to try local foods and practice the language, which helps me grow and gain confidence.

제안: Strong clear response. Improve coherence by using linking words and slightly more varied vocabulary (e.g., "draining and time-consuming" -> "emotionally draining and time-consuming"). Keep it to two or three sentences to meet the naturalness rule.

예시: No, I prefer a peaceful life because too many challenges are often emotionally draining and time-consuming. Therefore, I avoid unnecessary difficulties unless they offer clear benefits.

제안: Good structure and helpful details. Improve sentence fluency and remove short fragments. Use linking words to show sequence (e.g., "First... then... finally...") and combine related ideas to stay within the five-sentence limit.

예시: I follow a fixed routine when challenges arise. First, I ask friends or family for advice; then I make a detailed plan and follow it step by step. Finally, if the plan succeeds I reward myself, and if it fails I revise the plan and try again.

× When problems come up.

✓ When problems come up, I first seek advice from friends or family.

The original fragment 'When problems come up.' is a sentence without a main verb or complete clause (Grammar Problem Type ID 23: Sentence without a verb / 26: Sentence structure errors). It is a dependent clause that needs a main clause to complete the thought. Combine it with the following action to form a complete sentence and correct the preposition 'for friends' to 'from friends' which is the idiomatic collocation when receiving advice.

× I usually try to avoid unnecessary difficulties unless they bring clear benefits.

✓ I usually try to avoid unnecessary difficulties unless they bring clear benefits to me.

Although the original sentence is grammatically acceptable, adding 'to me' clarifies the referent and intention. If the examiner requires strict corrections only for listed problem types, this is an optional improvement. The primary issue could be lack of clarity rather than a strict grammatical error; however, adding 'to me' makes the sentence clearer and more natural.

× First I seek advice for friends or family.

✓ First I seek advice from friends or family.

The collocation is 'seek advice from' rather than 'seek advice for'. Using 'for' incorrectly suggests seeking advice on behalf of friends rather than obtaining advice provided by them. Changing to 'from' corrects the preposition choice (Grammar Problem Type ID 11).