Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid awkward phrases. For example, say 'I spent my last holiday in Haryana' instead of 'I spend it'. Also, avoid unclear idioms like 'asking on cake for me'. Use simpler, clearer expressions. Use linking words like 'also' and 'besides' appropriately to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I spent my last holiday in Haryana because I enjoy hilly areas. We did a lot of trekking there, which was very exciting. Also, we visited the famous local market in Sector 13, where many items were available at affordable prices. I enjoyed bargaining there, which made shopping even more fun.

제안: Focus on grammar accuracy and avoid repetition, such as 'feel feel'. Use simpler idioms or explain them clearly. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details linked logically. For example, use 'because' and 'also' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I like holidays because I am a student and they help me refresh my mind. Also, holidays boost my productivity and creativity. I feel very happy during holidays, and spending time with my family makes it even better.

제안: Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. Avoid redundant phrases like 'kind of' repeated. Use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons. Also, be careful with prepositions and article usage, e.g., 'the Holi festival' and 'show their love to others'.

예시: My favourite public holiday is Holi, the festival of colors. We get a week off during this time. People celebrate by putting colors on each other to express happiness and love.

제안: Avoid repetition such as 'then I always then I always'. Use clearer sentence structures and linking words like 'if' and 'also' to connect ideas. Use precise vocabulary like 'extracurricular activities' instead of 'other curriculum activities'.

예시: On holidays, I usually relax. If I am in hilly areas, I prefer boating or trekking. At home, I enjoy extracurricular activities like dancing, playing sports, or making crafts to decorate my room.

제안: Be careful with word choice and grammar; 'make my bone more stronger' is incorrect and unclear. Perhaps you meant 'bond' instead of 'bone'. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow using linking words like 'also' and 'besides'.

예시: Yes, I like spending my day at home because it helps me strengthen my bond with my family. Also, I can take short naps to refresh myself and have some time alone to build my confidence.

제안: Use correct verb tenses and avoid incomplete sentences. For example, say 'it doesn't make me lethargic' instead of 'didn't'. Avoid repetition and use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas logically.

예시: I always prefer a leisurely holiday because it doesn't make me feel tired. Also, I can focus better on the things I plan to do. When I rush, I often make mistakes, so I like to take my time during holidays.

제안: Improve grammar by using plural forms correctly, e.g., 'friends' instead of 'friend'. Use clearer expressions and avoid awkward phrases like 'cherry pink sounds'. Use linking words like 'but' and 'because' effectively to contrast ideas.

예시: Sometimes, I prefer exciting holidays when I am with my cousins or friends. But when I am alone, I like peaceful holidays because they help me relax and focus on my surroundings. For example, sitting in a garden, I enjoy listening to birds singing and smelling the flowers.

× My last holiday, I spend it in Haryana as I really like hilly areas and we did a lot of trekking there.

✓ My last holiday, I spent it in Haryana as I really like hilly areas and we did a lot of trekking there.

The verb 'spend' should be in the past tense 'spent' to correctly indicate an action completed in the past, matching the context of 'last holiday'.

× It is kind of a cheap market which has a lot of things in a throwback price and you also get a lot of discount and bargaining which is asking on cake for me.

✓ It is kind of a cheap market which has a lot of things at throwback prices and you also get a lot of discounts and bargaining which is like icing on the cake for me.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'at' is used with prices. Also, 'discount' should be plural 'discounts' to match 'a lot of'. The phrase 'asking on cake' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'icing on the cake'.

× Besides that, we also went to the famous local market of Sector 13.

✓ Besides that, we also went to the famous local market in Sector 13.

The preposition 'of' is incorrect here; 'in' is appropriate to indicate location. This is a preposition issue but also relates to correct expression of place.

× Yes, I do like holidays because as I'm academic student so I really like to refresh my mind and the holiday help me a lot to do this kind of things.

✓ Yes, I do like holidays because as I'm an academic student, I really like to refresh my mind and the holiday helps me a lot to do these kinds of things.

The article 'an' is missing before 'academic student'. Also, 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'holiday'. 'This kind of things' should be 'these kinds of things' to match plural 'things'.

× Apart from that it really boosts my productivity and creativity and I always feel feel over the moon while spending holidays and if I'm with the family it's like icing on the cake for me.

✓ Apart from that, it really boosts my productivity and creativity and I always feel over the moon while spending holidays, and if I'm with the family, it's like icing on the cake for me.

Repeated word 'feel' is a typographical error. Commas are added for clarity. The sentence structure is improved for better flow.

× The one public holiday that I really like is the Holi festival that we get holidays for one week in this occasion and it is a kind of festival of colors and most people put colors on each other in kind of a happiness to show their love to towards the next person.

✓ The one public holiday that I really like is the Holi festival, during which we get holidays for one week. It is a festival of colors and most people put colors on each other in happiness to show their love towards the next person.

'Holidays for one week in this occasion' is awkward; rephrased for clarity. 'Kind of a happiness' is incorrect; 'in happiness' is correct. 'To towards' is redundant; 'towards' alone is correct.

× Usually I do some kind of relaxation on holidays and if I'm in hilly areas then I will always then I always prefer to do boating or trekking.

✓ Usually I do some kind of relaxation on holidays, and if I'm in hilly areas, I always prefer to do boating or trekking.

The phrase 'then I will always then I always' is repetitive and incorrect. The sentence is corrected by removing redundancy and adding commas for clarity.

× Apart from that, if I'm in my own home then I always prefer to do some other curriculum activities like dancing, sports or doing any kind of craft that I can put in my room to enhance the beauty of my room.

✓ Apart from that, if I'm at my own home, then I always prefer to do some other extracurricular activities like dancing, sports, or doing any kind of craft that I can put in my room to enhance its beauty.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect for 'my own home'; 'at' is appropriate. 'Curriculum activities' should be 'extracurricular activities'. Repetition of 'my room' is reduced by using 'its'. Commas added for list clarity.

× Yes, I do like to spend my day at home as whenever I spend time in home I get I make my bone more stronger with my family.

✓ Yes, I do like to spend my day at home as whenever I spend time at home, I make my bond stronger with my family.

'In home' should be 'at home'. 'I get I make my bone more stronger' is incorrect; corrected to 'I make my bond stronger'. 'Bone' is a wrong word here; 'bond' is correct.

× Besides that I can easily take a short nap to restart myself and also I can get some time for myself to be more confident.

✓ Besides that, I can easily take a short nap to refresh myself and also get some time for myself to become more confident.

'Restart myself' is not idiomatic; 'refresh myself' is better. 'Be more confident' is changed to 'become more confident' for natural expression.

× I always prefer a leisurely holiday because it didn't make me lethargic.

✓ I always prefer a leisurely holiday because it doesn't make me lethargic.

The verb tense should be present tense 'doesn't' to agree with 'I always prefer' which is present habitual action.

× Besides that it make me feel over the moon because whenever I did something in hurry I always mess messed up with the thing.

✓ Besides that, it makes me feel over the moon because whenever I do something in a hurry, I always mess up with the thing.

'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Did' should be 'do' to maintain present tense consistency. 'Mess messed up' is incorrect; corrected to 'mess up'. Added article 'a' before 'hurry'.

× So I always prefer a slow holiday rather than.

✓ So I always prefer a slow holiday rather than a busy one.

The sentence is incomplete; 'rather than' requires a comparison object. Added 'a busy one' to complete the comparison.

× Sometimes I prefer exciting holidays when I'm with my cousins or friend but when I'm alone I always prefer peaceful holiday because it really help me to restart myself and I can easily concentrate on the things that are happening around me.

✓ Sometimes I prefer exciting holidays when I'm with my cousins or friends, but when I'm alone I always prefer a peaceful holiday because it really helps me to refresh myself and I can easily concentrate on the things that are happening around me.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'cousins'. 'Peaceful holiday' needs article 'a'. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Restart myself' is better expressed as 'refresh myself'.

× Like if I'm sitting in a garden I can easily observe the birds and their cherry pink sounds and the smell of flowers and just beauty.

✓ Like if I'm sitting in a garden, I can easily observe the birds and their chirping sounds, the smell of flowers, and just the beauty around.

'Cherry pink sounds' is incorrect; likely meant 'chirping sounds'. Added commas for clarity. 'Just beauty' is vague; clarified as 'just the beauty around'.