Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use the past simple tense consistently when talking about past events, for example, 'I visited' instead of 'I have visited'. Also, avoid exaggerations like 'literally heaven on the earth' and instead use more natural expressions. Keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

예시: During my last holiday, I visited Kashmir, which is famous for its beautiful lakes and scenic views. It is truly a wonderful place to relax and enjoy nature.

제안: Try to make your sentences clearer and more grammatically correct. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to connect ideas. Also, avoid repeating the same idea multiple times; be concise and precise.

예시: Yes, I love holidays because they help me relax. After a holiday, I return to work with a fresh mind, which increases my productivity and enthusiasm.

제안: Good answer but try to use linking words like 'and' or 'also' to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be specific about the sweets or activities to enrich your answer.

예시: Diwali is my favourite public holiday because I visit my relatives and spend quality time with my family. We also enjoy various traditional sweets like ladoos and barfis, which makes the celebration special.

제안: Try to avoid filler sounds like 'uh uh' and be clear with your sentences. Also, correct the sentence structure, for example, 'At 10' is unclear. Use linking words like 'then' to connect ideas logically.

예시: On holidays, I spend most of my time with my family helping to decorate the house. Then, we sit together, play games, sing songs, and enjoy each other's company.

제안: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence grammar, for example, 'sitting in house make me feel' should be 'sitting at home makes me feel'. Use linking words like 'so' appropriately to connect ideas.

예시: Actually, no, I don't like spending the whole day at home because it makes me feel bored. So, I usually go out for a walk, talk to my neighbours, or read a book on the terrace.

제안: Good content but try to avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and natural.

예시: I prefer busy holidays because I enjoy meeting and talking to many people. As an extrovert, I like socialising rather than spending time with only a few people.

제안: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. For example, 'I always have done the most adventurous stuff of' is unclear. Also, avoid repetition and use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect ideas logically.

예시: Being the youngest in my family, I have always enjoyed adventurous activities. Therefore, I prefer exciting holidays because I love trying new things and the thrill they bring.

× During my last holiday, I have visited the most famous and delightful place in India that is Kashmir.

✓ During my last holiday, I visited the most famous and delightful place in India, which is Kashmir.

The use of present perfect tense 'have visited' is incorrect here because the time of the action is specified ('During my last holiday'), so simple past tense 'visited' should be used instead.

× it is literally the heaven on the earth.

✓ it is literally heaven on earth.

The phrase 'heaven on earth' is an idiomatic expression and does not require the definite article 'the' before 'heaven' or 'earth'.

× obviously the productivity increase and because of holidays one feel more enthusiastic towards the work.

✓ obviously the productivity increases and because of holidays one feels more enthusiastic towards work.

The verbs 'increase' and 'feel' must agree with their singular subjects 'productivity' and 'one', so they should be 'increases' and 'feels' respectively.

× Diwali is the public holiday I like the most because during Diwali I visit my relatives, I spend time with my family and we bond.

✓ Diwali is the public holiday I like the most because during Diwali I visit my relatives, spend time with my family and we bond.

The sentence is correct but can be improved by removing the repeated subject 'I' in the second clause for better fluency.

× On holidays at 10 to spend most of my time with my family and help them to decorate the house.

✓ On holidays, I tend to spend most of my time with my family and help them decorate the house.

The original sentence lacks a proper subject and verb structure. Adding 'I tend to' clarifies the subject and verb, and 'help them decorate' is the correct verb form.

× After decoration, we sit together, play, sing song and bond with each other.

✓ After decoration, we sit together, play, sing songs and bond with each other.

The phrase 'sing song' is incorrect; the plural 'sing songs' is appropriate here.

× because sitting in house make me feel very bored.

✓ because sitting in the house makes me feel very bored.

The verb 'make' must agree with the singular subject 'sitting', so it should be 'makes'. Also, 'in house' should be 'in the house'.

× So I tend to go out, uh, have a walk, uh, talk to neighbors or just read some book on terrace.

✓ So I tend to go out, have a walk, talk to neighbors or just read some books on the terrace.

'Read some book' should be 'read some books' for correct quantifier use, and 'on terrace' should be 'on the terrace' with the definite article.

× because during that I can talk to lots of people.

✓ because during that time I can talk to lots of people.

The phrase 'during that' is incomplete; it should be 'during that time' for clarity.

× I'm the youngest in my family and I always have done the most adventurous stuff of and because of that I prefer her exciting holidays.

✓ I'm the youngest in my family and I have always done the most adventurous stuff, and because of that I prefer exciting holidays.

The phrase 'have done' should be 'have always done' for correct adverb placement; 'stuff of' is incorrect and removed; 'her exciting holidays' is incorrect pronoun use and changed to 'exciting holidays'.

× I love to do new things and because of that thrill I enjoy that things.

✓ I love to do new things and because of that thrill I enjoy those things.

'That things' is incorrect; the demonstrative pronoun should agree in number, so 'those things' is correct.