Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'I went to Chandigarh with my friends for my last holiday, and I really enjoyed my time there.'

예시: I went to Chandigarh with my friends for my last holiday, and I really enjoyed my time there because the city is beautiful and has many interesting places to visit.

제안: Avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, 'Yes, I really like holidays because they allow me to spend quality time with my family and loved ones. Moreover, holidays are beneficial as they give us a break from our regular jobs.'

예시: Yes, I really like holidays because they allow me to spend quality time with my family and loved ones. Moreover, holidays are beneficial as they give us a break from our regular jobs, helping us to relax and recharge.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence flow. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words. For example, 'My favourite public holiday is Diwali. During Diwali, I enjoy spending time with my friends and family, and I also decorate my home with colourful lights and candles.'

예시: My favourite public holiday is Diwali. During Diwali, I enjoy spending time with my friends and family, and I also decorate my home with colourful lights and candles, which creates a festive atmosphere.

제안: Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, correct grammar mistakes. For example, 'On holidays, I sometimes go to the cinema with my friends, and other times I spend a lot of time with my family. Additionally, I enjoy cooking for my family in the kitchen.'

예시: On holidays, I sometimes go to the cinema with my friends, and other times I spend a lot of time with my family. Additionally, I enjoy cooking for my family in the kitchen, which is a fun and relaxing activity.

제안: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly. For example, 'No, I don't like spending my day at home because there are many restrictions. Therefore, I prefer to spend time outside with my friends and loved ones.'

예시: No, I don't like spending my day at home because there are many restrictions. Therefore, I prefer to spend time outside with my friends and loved ones, which makes me feel more relaxed and happy.

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'Honestly, I prefer leisurely holidays because I can do whatever I want. For instance, I enjoy chatting with my friends and going to the cinema.'

예시: Honestly, I prefer leisurely holidays because I can do whatever I want. For instance, I enjoy chatting with my friends and going to the cinema, which helps me relax.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve grammar. Use clear linking words and specific examples. For example, 'I prefer exciting holidays because they make me feel very happy. Also, I enjoy doing new activities with my family, such as cooking and painting.'

예시: I prefer exciting holidays because they make me feel very happy. Also, I enjoy doing new activities with my family, such as cooking and painting, which makes the holiday memorable.

× Last holiday I went to Chandigarh with my friends to spend time there and I really enjoyed on that place.

✓ Last holiday I went to Chandigarh with my friends to spend time there and I really enjoyed that place.

The phrase 'enjoyed on that place' is incorrect because 'enjoy' is a transitive verb and does not require the preposition 'on'. The correct form is 'enjoyed that place'. This correction fits the past tense context of the sentence.

× Yes, I really like holidays because on holidays I can spend many time with my family members and my loved ones.

✓ Yes, I really like holidays because during holidays I can spend a lot of time with my family members and my loved ones.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'holidays'. The correct preposition is 'during' to indicate the time period. Also, 'many time' is incorrect; 'a lot of time' is appropriate for uncountable nouns like 'time'.

× Yes, I really like holidays because on holidays I can spend many time with my family members and my loved ones.

✓ Yes, I really like holidays because during holidays I can spend a lot of time with my family members and my loved ones.

The quantifier 'many' is used with countable nouns, but 'time' is uncountable. Therefore, 'a lot of time' is the correct quantifier to use here.

× Holidays Holidays are very beneficial for us to take break from our permanent job.

✓ Holidays are very beneficial for us to take a break from our permanent job.

The sentence has a repetition error ('Holidays Holidays') and is missing the article 'a' before 'break'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× The the public holiday which I like the best the whole day is of Diwali.

✓ The public holiday which I like best is Diwali.

The sentence has repeated 'the' and awkward phrasing 'the whole day is of Diwali'. Simplifying to 'The public holiday which I like best is Diwali' is grammatically correct and clearer.

× On Diwali I really enjoy with my friends and family members and I I also decorate all my homes with colorful lights and candles.

✓ On Diwali I really enjoy time with my friends and family members and I also decorate my home with colorful lights and candles.

The verb 'enjoy' requires an object, so 'enjoy time' is correct. 'Homes' should be singular 'home' unless the speaker has multiple homes. Also, repeated 'I' is a typographical error.

× On holidays sometimes I go to cinema with my friends for a movie and sometimes I spend many time with my family.

✓ On holidays sometimes I go to the cinema with my friends for a movie and sometimes I spend a lot of time with my family.

'Many time' is incorrect because 'time' is uncountable; 'a lot of time' is correct. Also, 'go to cinema' should be 'go to the cinema' as 'cinema' is a specific place here.

× Sometimes I do cooking on my in my kitchen for my family.

✓ Sometimes I cook in my kitchen for my family.

The phrase 'do cooking on my in my kitchen' is incorrect and redundant. The correct expression is 'I cook in my kitchen'.

× No, I don't like to spend my day at my home because there is so many restrictions in my family and I always love to spend time outside with my friends and my loved ones.

✓ No, I don't like to spend my day at home because there are so many restrictions in my family and I always love to spend time outside with my friends and my loved ones.

'There is so many restrictions' is incorrect because 'restrictions' is plural; the correct form is 'there are so many restrictions'. Also, 'at my home' is better as 'at home' in this context.

× Honestly speaking, I prefer leisurely holidays because on my leisure time I can do everything which I want and I can enjoy with my friends by chatting with them and by going to cinema for movie.

✓ Honestly speaking, I prefer leisurely holidays because during my leisure time I can do everything I want and I can enjoy with my friends by chatting with them and by going to the cinema for a movie.

'On my leisure time' should be 'during my leisure time'. Also, 'going to cinema for movie' needs articles: 'going to the cinema for a movie'.

× I prefer an exciting holidays because on exciting holidays we excited the most and I also excited for doing new things with my family like cooking, painting and other any activities.

✓ I prefer an exciting holiday because on exciting holidays we get excited the most and I am also excited to do new things with my family like cooking, painting and other activities.

'An exciting holidays' is incorrect because 'holidays' is plural and 'an' is singular; it should be 'an exciting holiday'. The verb 'excited' is incorrectly used; 'we get excited' and 'I am excited' are correct. 'Other any activities' is redundant; 'other activities' suffices.