Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details without redundancy. Avoid grammatical errors and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: I went to Goa for my last holiday, which is a popular destination in India. It is famous for its beaches and vibrant nightlife. Although I was under 21, my friends and I enjoyed visiting bars and spending time together, making the trip memorable.

제안: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you like holidays.

예시: Yes, I love holidays because they help people relax and recharge. After a holiday, one feels refreshed and ready to work on new projects. Therefore, taking holidays is very important for maintaining a healthy work-life balance.

제안: Clarify your points and avoid confusing or incorrect information. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific cultural details.

예시: My favourite public holiday is Diwali because it is the most popular festival in India. During Diwali, people burst crackers and share sweets with family and friends. Guests often visit homes, which is a cherished tradition in our culture.

제안: Avoid mentioning unhealthy habits and focus on positive activities. Use clear sentences and linking words to describe what you do on holidays.

예시: On holidays, I like to spend quality time with my friends. We usually go out, enjoy healthy activities, and talk about our recent experiences. This helps us relax and strengthen our friendship.

제안: Try to avoid filler words and be more concise. Explain clearly why you like staying at home and how it relates to your work.

예시: Yes, I enjoy spending my day at home because I work as a day trader. Since my job requires me to use a laptop for many hours, staying at home allows me to focus and work comfortably.

제안: Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your preference clearly. Avoid informal contractions and provide specific reasons.

예시: I prefer busy holidays because, as a day trader, I often work even when I am on trips. For example, when I visit the mountains or the beach, I carry my laptop so I can work from anywhere.

제안: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide clear reasons for your preference.

예시: I prefer exciting holidays because I enjoy surprises. Many of my friends plan surprise trips that we have dreamed of, which makes the experience more enjoyable. Exciting holidays are great because you never know what will happen next.

× I've gone to Goa which is the most trending city in our country where people used to go in bar and enjoy, have some drinks and the same I also did as I was not 21 but still we did it as we were only friends.

✓ I went to Goa which is the most trending city in our country where people used to go to bars and enjoy, have some drinks and I did the same as I was not 21 but still we did it as we were only friends.

The phrase 'I've gone' is incorrect here because the present perfect tense is not appropriate for a completed past action with a specified time. The simple past 'I went' fits better. Also, 'go in bar' is incorrect; it should be 'go to bars' because 'go to' is the correct preposition and 'bars' should be plural. 'The same I also did' is better expressed as 'I did the same' for natural word order.

× people used to go in bar and enjoy, have some drinks

✓ people used to go to bars and enjoy, have some drinks

The correct preposition with 'go' when referring to places like bars is 'to', not 'in'. Also, 'bar' should be plural 'bars' to indicate general places people visit.

× going on holidays make people's relaxed and for their further projects or work or for anything they are now like of restarting their life or getting refueled.

✓ going on holidays makes people relaxed and helps them with their further projects or work or anything; they feel like restarting their life or getting refueled.

The subject 'going on holidays' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. Also, 'people's relaxed' is incorrect; it should be 'people relaxed'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× going on holidays make people's relaxed and for their further projects or work or for anything they are now like of restarting their life or getting refueled.

✓ going on holidays makes people relaxed and helps them with their further projects or work or anything; they feel like restarting their life or getting refueled.

The phrase 'like of restarting their life' is incorrect; it should be 'feel like restarting their life'. Also, 'for their further projects' is better expressed as 'helps them with their further projects' to correctly use prepositions.

× I like Diwali the most as it is the most popular festival in our country. It is a festival of Fridays.

✓ I like Diwali the most as it is the most popular festival in our country. It is a festival of lights.

'Festival of Fridays' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or mistranslation. Diwali is known as the 'festival of lights', so the correct phrase is 'festival of lights'.

× People used to burst crackers and have sweets every day in the morning as the guests always visit your house as it is in culture in our country.

✓ People used to burst crackers and have sweets every day in the morning as guests always visit your house as it is part of the culture in our country.

'As it is in culture' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'as it is part of the culture'. Also, 'the guests' should be 'guests' as a general statement.

× As I am being grown in India, so far I love Diwali the most.

✓ As I was brought up in India, so far I love Diwali the most.

'I am being grown' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I was brought up' or 'I grew up'. This is the proper way to express upbringing in English.

× I often go out of my house and have some quality time with my friends and we usually used to smoke some cigarettes and healthy fun and talk about the few days and how the days were going on.

✓ I often go out of my house and have some quality time with my friends and we usually smoke some cigarettes and have healthy fun and talk about the past few days and how the days were going on.

'Usually used to smoke' is incorrect; 'used to' indicates past habit, but here present habit is intended, so 'usually smoke' is correct. 'Healthy fun' is awkward but kept as is. 'The few days' should be 'the past few days' for clarity.

× I love to spend my day at home because I'm a day trader and, uh, usually my work is often at my home, so I'm always uh, like, uh, 5 to 10 hours a day in front of the laptop, 24/7 in the screen.

✓ I love to spend my day at home because I'm a day trader and usually my work is at home, so I'm always, like, 5 to 10 hours a day in front of the laptop, 24/7 on the screen.

'My work is often at my home' is better as 'my work is at home'. Also, '24/7 in the screen' should be '24/7 on the screen' because we say 'on the screen'.

× I prefer busy holiday 'cause I'm a day trader and uh, usually when I'm on my holidays or any of the trips like in the mountains or beach, I usually carry my laptop so I can work anywhere as I want.

✓ I prefer busy holidays 'cause I'm a day trader and usually when I'm on my holidays or any trips like in the mountains or beach, I usually carry my laptop so I can work anywhere I want.

'Busy holiday' should be plural 'busy holidays' to match the general statement. Also, 'any of the trips' is better as 'any trips' for natural phrasing.

× I usually carry my laptop so I can work anywhere as I want.

✓ I usually carry my laptop so I can work anywhere I want.

The phrase 'anywhere as I want' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'anywhere I want' without 'as'.

× I prefer exciting holiday 'cause I love surprises and most of my friends give me surprises like the trip as a we have decided or we've dreamed of having that trip.

✓ I prefer exciting holidays 'cause I love surprises and most of my friends give me surprises like the trip we have decided on or we've dreamed of having.

'Exciting holiday' should be plural 'exciting holidays' to match the general preference. Also, 'like the trip as a we have decided' is incorrect; it should be 'like the trip we have decided on'.

× So exciting holidays are the best 'cause you don't know what is going to happen in next days or hours.

✓ So exciting holidays are the best 'cause you don't know what is going to happen in the next days or hours.

The phrase 'in next days' is missing the definite article 'the'. It should be 'in the next days or hours'.