Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多いので、正しい文法と自然な表現を使う練習をしましょう。また、内容がやや曖昧なので、具体的な場所や体験を詳しく述べると良いです。

예시: Last holiday, I went to an amusement park in Yamanashi Prefecture with three of my friends. It was very exciting and we enjoyed many rides. At the end of the day, we promised to visit the park again during the winter vacation.

제안: 文の構造が少し複雑で繰り返しがあるため、簡潔で明確な表現を心がけましょう。また、理由をより具体的に述べると良いです。

예시: I really love holidays, especially long ones like summer vacation, because they give me plenty of free time. I can travel to distant places and enjoy new experiences for several days.

제안: 発音や単語の選択に誤りがあり、意味が伝わりにくいです。正しい単語を使い、文を整理して話す練習をしましょう。具体的な習慣や理由を明確に述べることも大切です。

예시: My favorite public holiday is "Omisoka," which is the day before New Year's Day in Japan. On this day, we usually eat soba noodles, a traditional Japanese dish, and receive envelopes with money from our grandparents.

제안: 時制の一致や文法の誤りに注意し、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。また、活動内容を具体的に説明すると良いです。

예시: On normal holidays, I usually play online video games with my friends. However, during long holidays like summer vacation, we often go to amusement parks to have fun. Therefore, I prefer long holidays.

제안: 繰り返しや不自然な表現を避け、文法を正しく使いましょう。また、理由や具体的な活動を明確に述べることが重要です。

예시: I usually enjoy spending my day at home, but after about a week, I start to feel bored. So, I invite my friends to watch movies or go to karaoke to have a fun day together.

제안: 繰り返しや不自然な表現が多いので、簡潔で明確な文を作る練習をしましょう。また、理由を具体的に説明すると良いです。

예시: I prefer busy holidays because I feel that leisurely holidays waste time. I like to use my time efficiently and do many activities during my holidays.

제안: 文が途中で終わっているため、完全な文を作る練習をしましょう。また、理由を明確に述べ、文をつなげる接続詞を使うと良いです。

예시: I prefer exciting holidays because I want to experience something new and fresh. Since my weekdays are usually peaceful and routine, I like to spend my weekends doing exciting activities.

× Other in last holiday I went to amusement park in Yemen's prefecture with my three friends and that is very interesting and there's a lot of fun there.

✓ Other than last holiday, I went to an amusement park in Yemen's prefecture with my three friends and it was very interesting and there was a lot of fun there.

The phrase 'Other in last holiday' is incorrect; it should be 'Other than last holiday' to express contrast. 'Amusement park' needs an article 'an' because it is a singular countable noun. 'That is very interesting' should be 'it was very interesting' to match past tense. 'There's a lot of fun there' should be 'there was a lot of fun there' to maintain past tense consistency.

× And at last we promised that we will go into there again in winter vacation.

✓ And at last, we promised that we would go there again in winter vacation.

When reporting a past promise, the future tense 'will' changes to 'would' in reported speech. Also, 'go into there' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go there'.

× I really love holidays, especially long holiday like summer vacation because we can make a lot of free time and by using that free time we can go go to the place that is very far away and can enjoy for few days.

✓ I really love holidays, especially long holidays like summer vacation because we can have a lot of free time and by using that free time we can go to places that are very far away and enjoy for a few days.

'Long holiday' should be plural 'long holidays' to match 'holidays'. 'Make a lot of free time' is incorrect; 'have a lot of free time' is appropriate. 'Go go' is a repetition error; only one 'go' is needed. 'The place' should be plural 'places' to match 'very far away'. 'Can enjoy for few days' needs an article: 'enjoy for a few days'.

× I love one soccer holiday the best.

✓ I love one soccer holiday the most.

'The best' is a superlative adjective used with nouns; here, 'the most' is the correct adverb to modify 'love'.

× Uh on Mysoka is Japanese unique holiday that held in one day before the New Year's.

✓ Uh, Omisoka is a unique Japanese holiday that is held one day before New Year's.

'On Mysoka' is incorrect; it should be 'Omisoka'. 'Japanese unique holiday' should be 'a unique Japanese holiday' with the indefinite article 'a'. 'That held' needs the verb 'is' to form 'that is held'. 'In one day before the New Year's' should be 'one day before New Year's' without 'in' and 'the' before New Year's.

× And in Omitsaka we usually eat soba which is traditional Japanese poodle and get envelope from the grandpa.

✓ And in Omisoka, we usually eat soba, which is a traditional Japanese noodle, and get envelopes from grandpa.

'Omitsaka' is a misspelling; correct is 'Omisoka'. 'Traditional Japanese poodle' is incorrect; it should be 'traditional Japanese noodle'. 'Get envelope' should be plural 'get envelopes'. 'From the grandpa' should be 'from grandpa' without 'the'.

× For a normal holidays I usually play online video games with my friends, but for the long holidays, for example summer vacation, we usually went out to play go to amusement park to play a lot.

✓ For normal holidays, I usually play online video games with my friends, but for long holidays, for example summer vacation, we usually go out to amusement parks to play a lot.

'For a normal holidays' is incorrect; it should be 'For normal holidays' (no article with plural). 'We usually went out' is past tense inconsistent with 'usually'; it should be 'we usually go out'. 'Play go to amusement park' is incorrect; it should be 'go to amusement parks'. 'Play a lot' is acceptable but better connected with 'go to amusement parks'.

× So I'm much more prefer the long holidays.

✓ So I much prefer long holidays.

'Much more prefer' is incorrect; 'prefer' is a stative verb and does not combine with 'more' in this way. 'Much prefer' is correct. Also, 'the long holidays' should be 'long holidays' without 'the'.

× I usually like to spend my day at home but after spending like a week I will get bored by the circumstance.

✓ I usually like to spend my day at home, but after spending about a week, I get bored with the situation.

'Like a week' is informal; 'about a week' is better. 'Will get bored' is future tense inconsistent with habitual action; 'get bored' is better. 'Bored by the circumstance' is incorrect; 'bored with the situation' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× So I invite my friend and go to watch some movies or go to karaoke to spend spend a day.

✓ So I invite my friends and go to watch some movies or go to karaoke to spend a day.

'My friend' should be plural 'my friends' to match the context. 'Spend spend' is a repetition error; only one 'spend' is needed.

× I prefer busy holiday because if you spend leisurely holiday I I feel I am wasting time and I want to use the efficiency efficiency, so I prefer busy holiday.

✓ I prefer busy holidays because if you spend a leisurely holiday, I feel I am wasting time and I want to use time efficiently, so I prefer busy holidays.

'Busy holiday' should be plural 'busy holidays'. 'Leisurely holiday' needs an article 'a'. 'I I' is a repetition error. 'Use the efficiency efficiency' is incorrect; it should be 'use time efficiently'.

× I prefer exciting holiday because in holiday I want to experience something new and fresh.

✓ I prefer exciting holidays because during holidays I want to experience something new and fresh.

'Exciting holiday' should be plural 'exciting holidays'. 'In holiday' is incorrect; 'during holidays' is correct.

× This is because I usually cannot do something very exciting on weekday, because I want to spend my usual day very peacefully.

✓ This is because I usually cannot do something very exciting on weekdays, because I want to spend my usual days very peacefully.

'On weekday' should be plural 'on weekdays'. 'My usual day' should be plural 'my usual days' to match the habitual action.