Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use correct articles and plural forms, and make your answer more natural by avoiding unnecessary words. Also, provide a bit more detail to enrich your response.

예시: Last holiday, I went to a shopping mall to buy some clothes and shoes for the upcoming season.

제안: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I love holidays because they give me a break from work, which makes me feel very happy and relaxed.

제안: Reduce hesitation and filler words. Use correct verb tenses and clearer expressions. Explain why the holiday is meaningful with specific reasons.

예시: I like the Diwali festival best because it brings me a lot of happiness and relaxation, and it is a special time for family reunions.

제안: Use correct verb forms and clearer phrasing. Link your ideas logically and be more specific about your activities.

예시: On holidays, I usually relax by spending time with my family and going out with my friends.

제안: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to clarify your reasoning and avoid repetition.

예시: It depends on my schedule; if I am busy, I prefer to stay at home and rest.

제안: Try to avoid repetition and use more concise language. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I prefer leisurely holidays because they allow me to spend quality time with my family and friends, which I find very rewarding.

제안: Reduce filler words and improve clarity. Use correct expressions and linking words to express your preference clearly.

예시: Both exciting and peaceful holidays are important to me, but I especially prefer peaceful holidays because they help me feel relaxed and comfortable.

× I remember that last holiday we went to a shopping mall to buy a clothes and shoes.

✓ I remember that last holiday we went to a shopping mall to buy clothes and shoes.

The word 'clothes' is an uncountable plural noun and does not require an article 'a'. Using 'a clothes' is incorrect. The correct form is simply 'clothes'.

× When I there is a holiday I feel very happy because there is a no umm work on this day.

✓ When there is a holiday, I feel very happy because there is no work on this day.

The phrase 'When I there is a holiday' is incorrect; 'there is' should be used without 'I'. Also, 'a no umm work' is incorrect; 'no work' is the correct form without an article. The sentence should start with 'When there is a holiday'.

× I like the, uh, Diwali festival because it gave me a lots of happiness and uh, uh, relax and uh, give a preference to reunion.

✓ I like the Diwali festival because it gave me lots of happiness and relaxation and gives preference to reunion.

The phrase 'a lots of happiness' is incorrect; 'lots of' is plural and does not take 'a'. Also, 'relax' should be a noun 'relaxation' to fit the context. 'Give a preference' should be 'gives preference' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× On the holiday I mostly used to do free and I go out with my friends and also spend a time with my family.

✓ On the holiday I mostly use my free time and I go out with my friends and also spend time with my family.

The phrase 'used to do free' is incorrect; 'use my free time' is the correct expression. Also, 'spend a time' should be 'spend time' as 'time' is uncountable and does not require an article.

× Well, it depends on the day in. When I I'm a busy in my schedule at that time, I mostly prefer to stay in the home.

✓ Well, it depends on the day. When I am busy with my schedule at that time, I mostly prefer to stay at home.

The phrase 'depends on the day in' is incorrect; 'in' is unnecessary. 'I'm a busy' is incorrect; it should be 'I am busy'. Also, 'busy in my schedule' should be 'busy with my schedule'. 'Stay in the home' should be 'stay at home' as 'at home' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× I mostly prefer a spare time in the holiday because in the spare time I have a lot of time to spend with my family, which is very beneficial for me and I also spend a time with my friends to enjoy my life.

✓ I mostly prefer spare time during the holiday because in spare time I have a lot of time to spend with my family, which is very beneficial for me and I also spend time with my friends to enjoy my life.

The phrase 'a spare time' is incorrect because 'time' is uncountable and does not take an article. It should be 'spare time'. Also, 'a time' should be 'time' when referring to uncountable time.

× Uh, both are very important in my life. Like both have their own mean. So I'm uh, especially prefer the peaceful holidays which helps me feel comfortable and relaxed to my mind.

✓ Uh, both are very important in my life. Like both have their own meaning. So I especially prefer peaceful holidays which help me feel comfortable and relaxed in my mind.

The word 'mean' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'meaning'. 'I'm especially prefer' is incorrect; it should be 'I especially prefer'. Also, 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with plural 'holidays'. 'Relaxed to my mind' should be 'relaxed in my mind' for correct preposition use.