Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid filler and fix sentence structure (e.g., "there's in" is incorrect).

예시: I went to Korea last year. It’s my hometown, so I visit often to see my grandparents who live there. I usually stay with them for a week and explore the local markets.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and two concise supporting reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and use singular/plural correctly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy holidays because they let me relax and spend quality time with my family. Also, I can catch up on studying, so holidays are both restful and productive for me.

제안: Good clear answer and reason. Improve by using more natural phrasing and one concise supporting detail linking to personal meaning rather than repeating the same idea.

예시: My favourite public holiday is Christmas because I can attend church services and celebrate with family. The holiday is meaningful to me as a Christian and we usually have a special family dinner afterwards.

제안: Use consistent verb forms and be specific with examples. Begin with a topic sentence, then add two clear supporting activities linked with a conjunction.

예시: On holidays I usually spend time with my family. For example, we often go on short trips or have a big family meal, and I also use some time to study at home.

제안: Give a clear direct response first, then one or two specific reasons. Fix grammar and awkward phrases, and avoid repeating the same idea.

예시: Not really. Staying at home makes me feel isolated because many friends and families go on trips, and I prefer to travel or meet others during holidays.

제안: Choose one preference or say you like both but explain clearly with linking words. Correct grammar and provide specific examples of each type.

예시: I like both types of holidays. For example, a leisurely holiday lets me relax and read, while a busy holiday is useful for studying or visiting museums, which makes me feel productive.

제안: Good ideas but improve fluency and natural phrasing. State your mixed preference concisely and give one precise example for each type, using linking words.

예시: I enjoy both. An exciting holiday, like a city tour or amusement park visit, makes me happy, while a peaceful holiday, such as staying at a quiet countryside B&B and having tea, helps me relax.

× I went to Korea last year. I often go to Korea because that's my hometown and there's in and also there's my grandmother and grandfather living there too.

✓ I went to Korea last year. I often go to Korea because that's my hometown and my grandmother and grandfather live there too.

Incorrect use of 'there's in' and 'there's my grandmother and grandfather living there' — 'there is' (there's) is used for existence and cannot be followed by 'in' or a noun phrase with a person in this context. Use the simple clause 'my grandmother and grandfather live there too' to state where they reside. Suggestion: Remove 'there's' and use the active verb 'live' to show location.

× Of course I like holiday holiday.

✓ Of course I like holidays.

The noun 'holiday' is countable in this context and should be plural when speaking generally. Repeating the word is unnecessary. Use 'holidays' to express liking holidays in general. Suggestion: Use 'holiday' as 'a holiday' for single instances or 'holidays' for general preference.

× In holiday I can relax and spend time with my families.

✓ On holidays I can relax and spend time with my family.

Preposition and article errors: use 'on holidays' (general periods) not 'in holiday'. 'Family' as a collective noun does not take plural 'families' when referring to one's own family. Suggestion: Use 'on holidays' or 'during a holiday' and 'my family'.

× Also I could be able to have more time to study, which is a very good choice and a very good opportunities while other people is sleeping or doing something.

✓ Also I can have more time to study, which is a very good opportunity while other people are sleeping or doing other things.

Redundant and incorrect modal usage: 'could be able to' is wordy and wrong; use 'can' for ability. 'Opportunities' should be singular 'opportunity' to match 'a very good'. Subject-verb agreement: 'other people is' should be 'other people are'. Use 'other things' to parallel 'doing'. Suggestion: Use simple modals ('can') and ensure number agreement.

× I really like Christmas break because I can go to church and worship God, which is the very good choice to do as I am a Christian.

✓ I really like the Christmas break because I can go to church and worship God, which is a very good thing to do since I am a Christian.

Article: 'Christmas break' as a specific period takes 'the'. 'Which is the very good choice' is awkward — 'a very good thing' is natural. Use 'since' or 'because' instead of 'as' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'the Christmas break' and prefer 'a very good thing to do'.

× I really admire Jesus and I'm willing to go to church and celebrate his birth.

✓ I really admire Jesus and I like to go to church to celebrate his birth.

'I'm willing to go' suggests obligation rather than preference; 'I like to go' fits better for voluntary repeated action. Also 'celebrate his birth' is correct; this change improves naturalness. Suggestion: Use verbs that match speaker intent: 'like to' or 'enjoy' for preference.

× I usually spend time with my families such as going on a trip with them or take having a meal with them.

✓ I usually spend time with my family, such as going on a trip with them or having a meal with them.

Use 'my family' (collective), not 'families'. Parallel structure: 'going on a trip' and 'having a meal' should both be gerunds; 'take having a meal' is incorrect. Suggestion: Keep parallel gerund phrases and use singular collective 'family'.

× Also, I usually spend time studying at home while others are resting.

✓ Also, I usually spend time studying at home while others are resting.

This sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. Suggestion: None.

× Not really because it makes me feel isolated and it makes me feel depressed too because other people tend to go on a trip with their families or going to foreign country. I also want to go so I think it's bad to stay at.

✓ Not really, because it makes me feel isolated and depressed when other people tend to go on trips with their families or go to foreign countries. I also want to go, so I think it's bad to stay at home.

Several issues: parallelism ('go on a trip' vs 'going to foreign country') — use parallel infinitives/phrases. 'Foreign country' needs plural or article: 'go to foreign countries' or 'go to a foreign country'. Missing object after 'stay at' — should be 'stay at home'. Combine ideas and simplify for clarity. Suggestion: Use parallel structures and complete prepositional phrases ('stay at home').

× I prefer both, leisurely makes me feel relaxed and calm and happy too.

✓ I prefer both; a leisurely holiday makes me feel relaxed, calm and happy.

'Leisurely' is an adjective and should modify 'holiday' or be used as 'a leisurely one'. Add article and noun for clarity, and commas for list of adjectives. Suggestion: Use 'a leisurely holiday' or 'leisurely ones' to be grammatical.

× However, busy holiday makes me that I'm using the the holiday as my studying day which makes me feel that I'm really a good person.

✓ However, a busy holiday means I use the holiday as a study period, which makes me feel like I am being productive.

Awkward and incorrect phrasing: 'makes me that I'm using' is ungrammatical. 'busy holiday' needs an article. 'my studying day' is awkward; use 'a study period' or 'time to study'. 'really a good person' is semantic; 'productive' fits better. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb constructions and appropriate nouns (a busy holiday, a study period).

× I would like to prefer both. Exciting holiday makes my heart feel warm and makes me happy.

✓ I would prefer both. An exciting holiday warms my heart and makes me happy.

'I would like to prefer' is redundant and unidiomatic; use 'I would prefer'. Add article 'an' before 'exciting holiday'. Use concise verb 'warms' instead of 'makes my heart feel warm'. Suggestion: Simplify modal expressions and include articles.

× On the other hand, peaceful holiday makes me feel calm, relaxed. For example, having a cup of tea or doing a meditation.

✓ On the other hand, a peaceful holiday makes me feel calm and relaxed. For example, I might have a cup of tea or do meditation.

Add article 'a' before 'peaceful holiday'. Use 'calm and relaxed' with 'and'. 'Doing a meditation' is awkward; 'do meditation' or 'meditate' is natural. 'Having a cup of tea' is fine but combine into a full sentence. Suggestion: Use appropriate articles and natural verbs for activities ('have a cup of tea', 'meditate').