Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar (articles, verb forms) and give one or two specific details about the trip. Use a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking phrase.

예시: I went to Dubai with my family for the New Year holiday. It was a very memorable trip because we visited the Burj Khalifa and saw the New Year fireworks, which were spectacular.

제안: Answer directly with a clear reason, avoid unclear phrases (e.g. "can't arrest") and reduce repetition. Provide one or two specific activities you enjoy and use linking words.

예시: Yes, I enjoy holidays because they give me time to rest and catch up on personal tasks. For example, I usually sleep more, play sports, and finish small projects at home.

제안: State the holiday clearly and correct vocabulary (e.g. "offices are closed"). Reduce hesitations and give a specific reason or example of how people celebrate. Use one linking phrase.

예시: I like New Year’s Day the most because offices are closed and families often get together. For instance, we usually meet relatives and share a special meal.

제안: Open with a clear topic sentence and use correct collocations (e.g. "go on a trip"). Mention two activities with a linking word and be specific about what you read or watch.

예시: On holidays I usually try to rest. If possible, I go on a trip with my family; if not, I watch movies and read novels, especially history books.

제안: Answer directly, correct phrasing ("after a workday"), and avoid listing contradictory activities without structure. Use linking words to show alternatives and give a specific example.

예시: Yes, after a workday I prefer to stay at home and relax. Sometimes I watch movies at home, and at other times I go to the cinema to see a new release.

제안: State preference clearly and give concise reasons. Correct grammar ("I prefer a leisurely holiday"), avoid repetition, and give one specific personal example.

예시: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I am very busy with work. For example, I like to stay home, catch up on sleep, and watch films.

제안: Be concise and correct verb forms ("I would prefer a peaceful holiday"). Give one clear reason and a specific example of what you do to relax. Avoid repetition and filler words.

예시: I would prefer a peaceful holiday because I want to relax. For instance, I enjoy lying on the sofa, watching movies, and having quiet time with a good book.

× Last holiday it was a New Year holiday and I went to the Dubai with my family and that was a memorable experience that I have and it's very beautiful and pleasure journey that I have ever been.

✓ Last holiday was the New Year holiday and I went to Dubai with my family; it was the most memorable and beautiful journey I have ever had.

The phrase 'it was a New Year holiday' is awkward; use 'was the New Year holiday'. 'the Dubai' incorrectly uses the definite article before a city. 'that was a memorable experience that I have' mixes tenses and structure; use 'it was the most memorable... I have ever had' to match present perfect with 'ever'. 'pleasure journey' is incorrect collocation; use 'beautiful' and 'most memorable' and correct verb 'have had'. Use appropriate articles and tense consistency.

× Yes, actually I like holidays because in holidays I can't arrest and I can sleep more and also I can do my private things and I can do a sports more and also I can do the anything.

✓ Yes, I like holidays because during them I can relax, sleep more, take care of personal matters, and do more sports; I can also do anything I want.

'can't arrest' is incorrect word choice; use 'can relax'. 'in holidays' should be 'during them' or 'on holidays'. 'do my private things' is awkward; use 'take care of personal matters'. 'do a sports' is ungrammatical; use 'do more sports' or 'play more sports'. 'do the anything' is wrong; use 'do anything I want'. Modal verbs 'can' were used but phrase choices were wrong.

× Actually, I, I like the new new year holidays, uh, the best because in new day, a new year holiday, uh, every, every offices are, uh, clothed and all the people can, uh, see each other and meet each other.

✓ Actually, I like the New Year holidays best because on New Year's Day all the offices are closed and people can meet and see each other.

'the new new year holidays' has repetition and incorrect capitalization; use 'New Year holidays'. 'in new day' should be 'on New Year's Day'. 'every, every offices are clothed' has wrong article, plural and wrong word 'clothed' instead of 'closed'. 'all the people can see each other' is fine but can be simplified to 'people can meet and see each other'.

× Actually, I tried to take a rest and if I can, I go to the journey and I have a journey with my family and if I can't, I watch a movie and read books and that's it.

✓ Usually I try to rest; if I can, I go on a trip with my family, and if I can't, I watch movies and read books.

'tried' suggests past but context is habitual; use 'try' or 'usually I try'. 'go to the journey' is incorrect collocation; use 'go on a trip'. 'I have a journey' is unnatural. 'watch a movie' should agree in number with habit: 'watch movies'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, after work day, I really like to spend the day at home and take a rest and be relaxed and go to the cinema or I like to watch movies.

✓ Yes, after a work day I like to spend the day at home to rest and relax, or I like to go to the cinema and watch movies.

'after work day' needs the article: 'after a work day'. 'take a rest and be relaxed' is wordy; prefer 'rest and relax'. Maintain parallel structure: 'go to the cinema and watch movies'. Use present simple for general preferences.

× Actually nowadays I prefer leisurely holiday because I am too busy at work and I work much and I rather to stay at home and watch movies or take care of a personal matters.

✓ Nowadays I prefer a leisurely holiday because I am very busy at work and I work a lot; I would rather stay at home to watch movies or take care of personal matters.

'prefer leisurely holiday' needs an article: 'a leisurely holiday'. 'work much' should be 'work a lot' or 'work long hours'. 'I rather to stay' is incorrect: use 'I would rather stay'. 'take care of a personal matters' has article and number errors: use 'personal matters' without 'a'.

× Actually, as I mentioned that I rather a peaceful holiday because I want to be relaxed and take a rest. I can, I want to lie on the sofa and watching movie and that is very satisfying for me and I I very pleasure of this.

✓ As I mentioned, I prefer a peaceful holiday because I want to relax and rest. I want to lie on the sofa and watch a movie; that is very satisfying for me and I enjoy it a lot.

'I rather a peaceful holiday' should be 'I prefer a peaceful holiday'. 'be relaxed and take a rest' better as 'relax and rest'. 'want to lie on the sofa and watching movie' mixes infinitive and -ing; use 'watch'. 'I I very pleasure of this' is ungrammatical; use 'I enjoy it a lot' or 'it gives me great pleasure'.