Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, then give one or two concrete details (when, who, what you did). Avoid unclear phrases like “Cox's budget.” Use linking words if adding details.

예시: I went to Cox's Bazar beach with my family last summer. We stayed for three days, swam in the sea and watched the sunrise each morning, which was very relaxing.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence and two specific reasons with brief examples. Fix incomplete sentences and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

예시: Yes, I really enjoy holidays because they allow me to reconnect with family and reduce stress. For example, during holidays I visit my parents and we cook together, which makes me feel relaxed.

제안: Answer directly naming the holiday, then give specific details about how it is celebrated and why you like it. Avoid trailing off and provide a complete sentence with linking words like “because” or “for instance.”

예시: My favorite public holiday is 26th March, our national independence day. It is celebrated with parades, colorful balloons and traditional performances, and I enjoy watching the ceremonies with my family because it feels patriotic.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two or three specific activities with linking words. Use natural verbs (spend time, travel) and avoid awkward phrases like “investing time.”

예시: On holidays I usually relax and do several activities. For example, I spend mornings gardening, afternoons meeting friends and family, and sometimes I travel to nearby cities for a short trip.

제안: Give a direct response and explain with a clear reason and example. Use correct tense and natural expressions (feel stressed, spend the day at home). Keep it concise.

예시: Yes, I often like to spend a day at home when I feel stressed. For instance, I stay in, read books and cook with my family, which helps me relax.

제안: Make a clear choice then justify it with specific reasons and examples. Avoid hedging phrases like “pretty much both.” Use linking words (however, because, for example) and correct grammar (a lot of time).

예시: I prefer a leisurely holiday because it gives me time to relax and try different activities. For example, I can read, meet friends and go for long walks without rushing.

제안: Answer directly and complete the explanation with clear reasons and a specific example. Avoid awkward phrasing like “obtain peaceful moment” and incomplete sentence endings. Use linking words such as “because” and “so.”

예시: I would prefer a peaceful holiday because my daily routine is hectic and tiring. For example, I enjoy a quiet beach break where I can read and sleep early to recharge.

× Speaking of the last holiday, I went to the sea beach with my family members.

✓ Speaking of my last holiday, I went to the seaside with my family.

Used incorrect preposition/phrase and unnecessary word: 'the sea beach' is unnatural; 'seaside' or 'beach' is correct. Also use 'my last holiday' instead of 'the last holiday' for natural reference and omit 'members' after 'family' because 'family' already implies members. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× More specifically in the Cox's budget.

✓ More specifically, we went to Cox's Bazar.

Sentence uses wrong words and missing preposition and punctuation: 'in the Cox's budget' is incorrect; the place name is 'Cox's Bazar' and should be used directly. Add a comma and make it a complete clause. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Absolutely, I'm very passionate about getting holidays because it helps me to connect with my family members and friends and provides a lot of time to spend with them and also helps me to reduce my stress and.

✓ Absolutely, I'm very fond of holidays because they help me connect with family and friends, give me more time to spend with them, and reduce my stress.

Run-on sentence and incorrect nouns/pronouns: 'getting holidays' is unnatural; use 'holidays' or 'time off'. Use plural 'they' to match 'holidays'. Remove trailing 'and' and redundant phrases. Streamline parallel structure using commas and conjunctions. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× The public holiday 26th March, which is the national holiday in my country and it celebrates with colorful balloons and traditionally arrangements and I also enjoy the holiday with some of my.

✓ The public holiday on 26th March, which is the national day in my country, is celebrated with colorful balloons and traditional arrangements, and I also enjoy the holiday with some of my relatives.

Missing preposition 'on' before a date and wrong article/use of noun: 'national holiday' better as 'national day' here; 'it celebrates' incorrect passive/active usage; use 'is celebrated'. 'Traditionally' (adverb) should be 'traditional' (adjective) for 'arrangements'. Sentence incomplete 'some of my' needs object 'relatives' or 'friends'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I usually do multiple activities on holiday.

✓ I usually do several activities on holidays.

'Multiple' is acceptable but 'several' is more natural. Also maintain plural 'holidays' to speak generally. Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural collocation. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× More specifically, I do gardening along with investing time with my friends and families.

✓ More specifically, I do gardening and spend time with my friends and family.

Wrong verb phrase 'investing time with' should be 'spend time with'. 'Families' should be 'family' unless referring to multiple families. Use parallel structure with 'and'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Apart from that, I also go to travel outside my city.

✓ Apart from that, I also travel outside my city.

'Go to travel' is incorrect collocation; use 'travel' or 'go traveling'. 'Outside my city' is fine; remove extra 'to'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Of course, I'm fairly keen on spending time at home.

✓ Of course, I'm quite keen on spending time at home.

'Fairly' is not wrong but 'quite' is more natural here. This is a stylistic suggestion rather than a strict grammar error; sentence is otherwise correct. Keep present continuous 'I'm...spending' to express general preference. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× In other words, when I felt so stressed and anxiety, I try to spend the whole day at home and invest time with my family members.

✓ In other words, when I feel stressed and anxious, I try to spend the whole day at home and spend time with my family.

Tense consistency: 'felt' (past) should be 'feel' (present) because describing habitual reaction. 'Stressed and anxiety' mixes adjective and noun; use 'stressed and anxious'. Use 'spend time' not 'invest time' for natural collocation. Remove 'members'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Actually pretty much both, but mostly I guess enjoy leisurely holiday because it helps me to do several activities and I found it very interesting.

✓ Actually, pretty much both, but mostly I prefer leisurely holidays because they allow me to do various activities and I find them very enjoyable.

Several issues: missing commas, incorrect verb forms ('enjoy leisurely holiday' should be 'prefer leisurely holidays'), tense inconsistency ('found' should be 'find' for general statement), and article use. Use plural 'holidays' and parallel phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× For instance, it provides a lots of time and along with also keep in touch with my friend.

✓ For instance, they provide a lot of time and help me keep in touch with my friends.

'A lots of' is incorrect; use 'a lot of' or 'lots of'. Subject 'it' wrong; refer to 'holidays' so use 'they'. 'Along with also keep' is ungrammatical; use 'help me keep'. Use plural 'friends' for generality. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× Yeah, I would prefer a peaceful holiday because this day I stay quite busy with my hectic routines, which is why I don't have enough time to obtain peaceful moment. So I would like to get a peaceful holiday to reduce.

✓ Yes, I would prefer a peaceful holiday because these days I stay quite busy with my hectic routine, which is why I don't have enough time to enjoy peaceful moments. So I would like a peaceful holiday to relax.

Several tense and word choice errors: 'this day' should be 'these days' to indicate current habitual situation. 'Routines' better as 'routine' or 'routines' but 'hectic routine' is natural. 'Obtain peaceful moment' is unnatural; use 'enjoy peaceful moments'. Final fragment 'to reduce' incomplete; specify 'to relax' or 'to reduce stress'. Grammar problem type ID: 6