Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حاول تبسّط وتنوّق الجمل وتستخدم زمن واحد واضح. ابدأ بجملة موضوع مباشرة (I went to Salalah with my family last holiday)، ثم أضف تفاصيل محددة مرتبة باستخدام أدوات ربط مثل 'because' أو 'so' واذكر موسم أو نشاط واحد واضح. تجنّب التكرار وتصحيح الكلمات الخاطئة (مثلاً 'Khareef' بدل 'Kore a' أو 'Karif').

예시: I went to Salalah with my family last holiday. We visited in the Khareef season, which makes the landscapes very green and cool. Because of the pleasant weather, we relaxed and enjoyed walks on the beach together.

제안: استخدم جملة موضوع واضحة تشرح لماذا تحب الأعياد، ثم أعطِ سببين مدعومين بتفاصيل قصيرة. رتب الأفكار باستخدام روابط مثل 'because' و 'sometimes' و 'for example' وتجنّب التكرار وعبارات غير مكتملة.

예시: Yes, I really like holidays because they give me a break from work and study. For example, I sometimes travel with my family or friends, and last year we spent one month in Salalah which helped me relax and recharge.

제안: اذكر اسم العطلة بشكل واضح ثم صف نشاطين محددين تقومان بهما مع الأسرة. استخدم أدوات ربط مثل 'also' و 'for example' لتنسيق الجمل، وابتعد عن التكرار وعبارات التردد مثل 'uh'.

예시: My favourite public holiday is Eid al-Fitr. During Eid we visit family houses and eat special meals together. We also watch films and sometimes visit friends, so it is a joyful and relaxing time.

제안: قدّم جملة بداية واضحة ثم اذكر أنشطة محددة (go to restaurants, buy clothes, visit parks). استخدم روابط مثل 'for example' و'also' وأعطِ سببًا واحدًا للاختيار (e.g. to relax). تخلص من الترديدات والكلمات الملأية.

예시: On holidays I usually go out with my family. For example, we eat at restaurants, buy new clothes in the suburbs, and visit parks to relax and enjoy the fresh air.

제안: ابدأ بج جواب مباشر (Yes/No) ثم أوضح الشرطين بترتيب واضح: عندما أعمل/أدرس أبقى في المنزل، وإذا كنت حرًا أخرج. استخدم أمثلة واضحة (study, homework, visit park) وتجنّب الأخطاء اللغوية مثل 'I feel restrained' إن كنت تقصد 'relaxed'.

예시: Yes, it depends. If I have work or homework, I stay at home to study. But if I am free, I usually go out to visit a park or meet friends and eat at a restaurant, which makes me feel relaxed.

제안: أجب بصراحة ثم وضح السبب مع مثال محدد. اذكر التوازن إن وجد (sometimes busy for courses, sometimes leisurely). استخدم ربط مثل 'because' و 'so' وصغ الجمل بصيغة صحيحة زمنياً (I study, not I studying).

예시: I prefer a mix, but often I choose a busy holiday to study. For example, I take online reading and writing courses during holidays because I need to improve those skills, so I spend many hours studying at home.

제안: ابدأ بجملة واضحة (I prefer a peaceful holiday) ثم اشرح السبب وأعطِ مثالًا واحدًا عن مكان هادئ تحبه (Salalah, Makkah) واستخدم رابط 'because' أو 'for example'. تجنّب التكرار وعبارات الملأ مثل 'uh' و 'umm'.

예시: I prefer a peaceful holiday because I enjoy relaxing with my family. For example, we often visit Salalah or Makkah, where the atmosphere is calm and suitable for quiet reflection.

× I want I want to Salalah in last in last holiday with my family.

✓ I went to Salalah on my last holiday with my family.

The sentence uses present tense 'I want' incorrectly; the past event requires past tense 'I went' (Past tense issue - ID 5). Also word order and preposition are wrong: use 'to Salalah' and 'on my last holiday' (Sentence structure error - ID 26, Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). Suggestion: Use simple past for past events and place prepositions correctly: 'I went to Salalah on my last holiday with my family.'

× When I went with my family to Salalah especially in Korea the season it is so beautiful and I feel relaxed with my family hobby so happy.

✓ When I went to Salalah with my family, especially in the Khareef season, the weather was very beautiful and I felt relaxed and happy with my family.

Multiple issues: Use past tense for past events ('went' is fine but follow-up verbs must be past: 'was', 'felt') (Past tense issue - ID 5). 'Korea' likely mispronunciation of 'Khareef' (proper noun); 'season it is' is incorrect word order (Sentence structure error - ID 26). 'Hobby' is incorrect word choice; use 'happy' or 'feeling happy' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs - ID 13). Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense and clear noun phrases: 'the Khareef season', and use 'felt relaxed and happy.'

× The weather in Salalah in Karif season is so beautiful and the weather is very nice outside.

✓ The weather in Salalah during the Khareef season was very beautiful and pleasant outside.

Use 'during' instead of 'in' for seasons (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). Use past tense 'was' to match past event (Past tense issue - ID 5). Repetition of 'the weather' is redundant (Sentence structure error - ID 26). Suggestion: Use 'during the Khareef season' and avoid repeating the same noun: 'was very beautiful and pleasant.'

× I I like holiday so much because I went with my family outside sometime I went with my friends group of my friends.

✓ I like holidays very much because I go out with my family, and sometimes I go with my group of friends.

Mixing present and past incorrectly: preference uses present ('I like') while examples of actions should use present simple for habitual actions ('I go') (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'Holiday' should be plural 'holidays' for general preference (Singular and plural issue - ID 1). Word order 'group of my friends' should be 'my group of friends' or 'a group of friends' (Sentence structure - ID 26). Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and correct pluralization: 'I like holidays... I go out... sometimes with my group of friends.'

× I feel relaxed from streets and from works.

✓ I feel relaxed away from the streets and work.

Use 'away from' rather than 'from' to express relief (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). 'Works' is uncountable here; use 'work' (Singular and plural issue / word choice - ID 1, 13). Suggestion: Use 'away from the streets and work' to indicate relief from busy places and tasks.

× So I I I went to Salalah with my family and and we spent one month there in.

✓ So I went to Salalah with my family and we spent one month there.

Unnecessary filler words removed. 'Spent one month there' is correct past tense; trailing 'in' is unnecessary (Sentence structure error - ID 26). Suggestion: Keep past simple and remove extra words: 'we spent one month there.'

× I like Idila and Dil Eid al Mubarak holiday Republic.

✓ I like Eid al-Fitr and Eid al-Adha holidays.

The original has incorrect names and word order. Use standard holiday names 'Eid al-Fitr' and 'Eid al-Adha' and plural 'holidays' for general preference (Article errors - ID 22; Sentence structure - ID 26). Suggestion: Use correct holiday names and plural form for multiple holidays.

× We, we were, we go to, uh, we go to uh, my family house.

✓ We go to my family's house.

Mixed tenses and repetition; use present simple for habitual action 'we go' (Present tense issue - ID 6). Possessive form should be 'my family's house' (Incorrect use of pronouns/possessive - ID 12). Suggestion: Use clean present simple and correct possessive form.

× We gathered, we eat together, we watch sometimes film.

✓ We gather and eat together, and sometimes we watch films.

Use present simple for habitual actions (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'Watch sometimes film' needs word order correction and plural 'films' (Sentence structure - ID 26; Singular and plural issue - ID 1). Suggestion: Use parallel verbs and correct order: 'We gather, eat together, and sometimes watch films.'

× We spend good time together. We, we are relaxed and happy together.

✓ We spend good time together. We are relaxed and happy together.

Remove redundant repetition. Present simple is fine for habitual statements (Present tense issue resolved). Suggestion: Avoid repeating words; keep concise: 'We spend good time together and are relaxed and happy.'

× Sometime I went to my friend, uh.

✓ Sometimes I go to my friend's house.

Use present simple 'go' for habitual action (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' and possessive needed 'my friend's house' (Incorrect use of adverb - ID 20; Incorrect use of pronouns - ID 12). Suggestion: Use 'Sometimes I go to my friend's house.'

× We will go outside a restaurant or when, or we buy some clothes in suburb, uh, we go uh, outside, for example, to uh, uh, barks sometime, uh, it is so beautiful.

✓ We go out to restaurants or buy clothes in the suburbs, and sometimes we go to parks; it is very nice.

Mixing future 'will' with general habits; use present simple for habitual actions (Future tense issue - ID 7 vs Present tense issue - ID 6). Use 'suburbs' plural and 'parks' instead of 'barks' (Incorrect use of prepositions/articles - ID 11; Singular/plural - ID 1). Suggestion: Use present simple for routines: 'We go out to restaurants, buy clothes in the suburbs, and sometimes go to parks.'

× Uh, it is umm, reduce of umm, stretch of the work.

✓ It reduces the stress of work.

Incorrect noun and verb forms: use 'reduces' (third person singular) and 'stress' not 'stretch' (Third person singular issue - ID 2; Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs/word choice - ID 13). Suggestion: Use correct collocations: 'reduces the stress of work.'

× I like to go outside with my family.

✓ I like to go out with my family.

Use 'go out' rather than 'go outside' in this context (Incorrect use of prepositions/adverbs - ID 11/20). Present tense 'like' is correct. Suggestion: Say 'I like to go out with my family.'

× And giving it for my work.

✓ And I use the time for my work.

Original lacks subject and verb agreement, sentence fragment (Sentence without a verb - ID 23; Sentence structure - ID 26). Suggestion: Use full clause: 'I use the time for my work.'

× If I have work, for example, if I I have study, if I want to study something or I have homework, I stay at home.

✓ If I have work to do, for example study or homework, I stay at home.

Reduce repetition and use correct noun forms 'study' as uncountable or 'study tasks' (Sentence structure - ID 26). Present simple condition is fine. Suggestion: Simplify: 'If I have work to do, such as studying or homework, I stay at home.'

× If I I am free I go outside. I sent message to my friend. So go to go to visit park or to go soup or restaurants.

✓ If I am free, I go outside. I send messages to my friends and go to visit parks or go to cafes or restaurants.

Use present simple for habitual actions (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'Sent' is past; should be 'send'. 'Soup' unclear—likely 'cafes' (word choice) (Past tense issue - ID 5; Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). Suggestion: Use present simple consistently: 'I send messages... I go to parks, cafes, or restaurants.'

× It is so so beautiful and I feel restrained.

✓ It is very nice and I feel relaxed.

'Beautiful' can be used but 'nice' fits activities; 'restrained' is wrong word; should be 'relaxed' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs - ID 13). Suggestion: Use 'relaxed' to express a state of calm.

× Sometimes in a holiday I am I share in online courses like reading or writing to improve my 2 skills.

✓ Sometimes during holidays I take online courses like reading or writing to improve my language skills.

Use 'during holidays' not 'in a holiday' (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). 'I am I share' wrong; use 'I take' or 'I participate in' (Sentence structure - ID 26). '2 skills' unclear; use 'language skills' (Word choice - ID 13). Suggestion: Say: 'Sometimes during holidays I take online courses to improve my language skills.'

× Because I have a problem in these skills, I spend a lot of the time busy in holiday.

✓ Because I have problems with these skills, I spend a lot of time being busy during holidays.

Use plural 'problems' and 'with' rather than 'in' (Singular/plural - ID 1; Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). 'Spend a lot of time being busy' and 'during holidays' corrects order (Sentence structure - ID 26). Suggestion: 'I spend a lot of time improving them during holidays.'

× I stay at home without going going outside with my friend or my family. I studying a lot of the.

✓ I stay at home without going out with my friends or family. I study a lot.

Use 'go out' not 'going outside' and correct plural 'friends' (Incorrect use of prepositions/adverbs - ID 11; Singular/plural - ID 1). 'I studying' is incorrect verb form; use 'I study' (Verb + -ing form / verb form - ID 8/9). Suggestion: Use base form for habitual present: 'I study a lot.'

× I prefer a peaceful holiday. Uh, went with my family outside with peaceful uh too, especially in Salalah or Makkah, uh, for real religious bearers, we go outside.

✓ I prefer a peaceful holiday, especially when I go out with my family to Salalah or Makkah for religious reasons.

Use present simple 'prefers' is fine as 'I prefer'. 'Went' is past; use 'go' for general preference (Past vs present tense - ID 5/6). 'Bearers' incorrect for 'pilgrims' or 'reasons' (Word choice - ID 13). Sentence structure messy; simplify and use correct noun 'reasons' or 'pilgrimage' if intended. Suggestion: 'I prefer a peaceful holiday, especially when I go with my family to Salalah or Makkah for religious reasons.'

× It is so nice. Umm, we go outside with the peaceful, holy, holy peaceful. So.

✓ It is very nice. We go to peaceful, holy places.

Redundant words and incorrect adjective order. Use 'peaceful, holy places' (Incorrect order of adjectives - ID 18; Redundancy - ID 26). Suggestion: Use concise phrase: 'peaceful, holy places.'