Holidays— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the sentence structure natural and concise, correct grammar (use subject order and articles), and add one specific detail to enrich the answer. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: I went to a beautiful beach in Shenzhen with some friends. It was a memorable trip because we swam, played beach volleyball and watched the sunset. The weather was warm and the water was clear, so we stayed until evening.

제안: Provide a complete reason with a clear topic sentence and a specific example. Avoid unfinished phrases like 'after' — finish the thought (after work/studies). Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy holidays because they give me time to relax and recover after a busy workweek. For example, I usually sleep more, read books and go for long walks to reduce stress.

제안: Remove fillers (uh) and correct article usage. Give one or two specific reasons beyond length (traditions, family gatherings). Keep it concise and coherent with linking words.

예시: My favorite public holiday is Chinese New Year because it lasts about seven days and I can spend time with my family. Also, we have traditional meals and visit relatives, which makes it special.

제안: Combine short fragments into full, connected sentences and give a specific example or frequency. Use linking words like 'and' or 'sometimes' to make it flow naturally.

예시: On holidays I usually visit my family and sometimes play badminton with friends. I also join local celebrations, which are festive and relaxing, especially during national holidays.

제안: Avoid hesitations and complete the thought (finish the singer's name or say 'artists'). Add one specific activity detail and a linking phrase. Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

예시: Yes, I enjoy spending days at home, especially on weekends. I usually listen to my favorite music from singers I like, read a book and cook something simple.

제안: Clarify your preference—'leisurely' or 'busy'—and avoid unclear phrases like 'necessary holiday' and 'arrive after'. State a clear reason and give a specific example of how you spend such a holiday.

예시: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I need time to relax after busy periods at work. For example, I spend my time walking in the park, listening to music and catching up on sleep.

제안: Use correct comparative form ('a peaceful holiday rather than an exciting one') and finish incomplete sentences. Give a brief reason and one specific activity that illustrates 'peaceful'.

예시: I would prefer a peaceful holiday rather than an exciting one because I am more of a homebody. I enjoy quiet activities like reading, listening to music and taking long walks alone.

× On my last holiday, I and my friends went to a beautiful beach in Shenzhen.

✓ On my last holiday, my friends and I went to a beautiful beach in Shenzhen.

Use 'my friends and I' not 'I and my friends' because polite English places others before yourself; also the subject pronoun order is conventional and more natural. This is a subject order/pronoun usage issue. Suggestion: list others before yourself when combining subjects and keep 'I' as the subject pronoun.

× It was a enjoyable and memorable experience when we played.

✓ It was an enjoyable and memorable experience when we played.

Use the article 'an' before a vowel sound (enjoyable begins with a vowel sound). Also the sentence is awkward with 'when we played' — specify what you played or say 'while we were playing' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'an enjoyable' and consider 'while we were playing' or name the activity.

× They are great opportunities for relaxation and to reduce stress after.

✓ They are great opportunities for relaxation and to reduce stress afterwards.

Use the adverb 'afterwards' rather than 'after' at the end of this clause to indicate 'after work or study'. Alternatively rephrase 'to reduce stress' to 'for reducing stress'. This is an adverb/preposition choice issue. Suggestion: use 'afterwards' or rephrase the parallel structure: 'opportunities for relaxation and for reducing stress'.

× I like a Chinese New Year's Day the most because it has, uh, the longest holidays, uh, for about, uh, seven days.

✓ I like Chinese New Year the most because it has the longest holidays, for about seven days.

Use 'Chinese New Year' (no 'a' and no 'Day') as the holiday name. 'Has the longest holidays' is acceptable; remove extra articles and fillers. Also 'for about seven days' should not have commas splitting it. Suggestion: say 'I like Chinese New Year the most because it has the longest holiday period, about seven days.'

× I usually visit my family, play sports such as badminton with my friends. Or join a celebration during holidays.

✓ I usually visit my family and play sports such as badminton with my friends, or I join celebrations during holidays.

Avoid sentence fragments; combine clauses properly and maintain parallel structure. 'Or join a celebration during holidays' is a fragment lacking a subject. Suggestion: use 'or I join celebrations' and keep verbs parallel.

× They are festive and relaxing.

✓ They are festive and relaxing.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed. (Included for completeness.)

× Yes, I enjoy spending days at home, especially on weekends.

✓ Yes, I enjoy spending the day at home, especially on weekends.

'Spending days at home' is odd; use 'spending the day at home' or 'spending time at home'. This fixes plurality and collocation. Suggestion: use 'spending time at home' or 'spending the day at home'.

× I usually listen to my favorite music during that time, mostly uh from my favorite singer such as Drago or.

✓ I usually listen to my favorite music at that time, mostly from singers such as Drago.

Use preposition 'at that time' not 'during that time' for this context. Avoid repeating 'favorite'. Finish the example list; do not leave 'or' dangling. Suggestion: 'mostly from singers such as Drago' or name another singer.

× I prefer a necessary holiday because it is a great way to arrive after.

✓ I prefer a relaxing holiday because it is a great way to recover after busy work.

'Necessary holiday' and 'arrive after' are incorrect collocations. Likely meaning is 'relaxing' or 'needed', and 'recover after busy work' completes the idea. This is a sentence structure/word choice issue. Suggestion: use 'relaxing' or 'a holiday to recover' and include what you're recovering from.

× Busy work, I enjoy listening to my favorite music at the time.

✓ After busy work, I enjoy listening to my favorite music at that time.

The phrase should be 'After busy work' to indicate time; keep 'at that time' or better 'to relax'. Original word order is awkward. Suggestion: 'After a busy day at work, I enjoy listening to my favorite music to relax.'

× I prefer peaceful holiday than exciting holiday and because I am a homebody, I enjoy being alone and I usually listening to my.

✓ I prefer a peaceful holiday to an exciting one because I am a homebody; I enjoy being alone and I usually listen to music at home.

Use comparative structure 'prefer X to Y' and articles: 'a peaceful holiday' and 'an exciting one'. 'I usually listening' is incorrect — use 'I usually listen'. Also complete the sentence by stating 'music at home'. This involves comparative, article, and verb form errors. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B', include correct articles, and use the base verb form after adverbs: 'usually listen'.