Plants— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'um' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, provide a clear topic sentence and support it with concise reasons using linking words to improve coherence. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain your reasons clearly and briefly.

예시: No, I don't keep plants at home because I don't find it necessary. Moreover, my main focus is on my studies and other hobbies, so I don't have time to take care of plants.

제안: Avoid repetition of filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words like 'but' and 'so' to connect ideas logically. Also, try to be more specific about the plant or your experience to enrich your answer.

예시: When I was young, I planted a yellow flower, but I can't remember its name. I took care of it for about two months, but unfortunately, I forgot to water it one day, so it died.

제안: Work on sentence clarity and grammar to make your ideas easier to understand. Use linking words to organize your points logically. Also, avoid excessive filler words and try to use more precise vocabulary related to plant care.

예시: From my childhood experience, I learned that watering plants daily is very important. Some flowers even need water at regular intervals, so it's essential to remember to water them properly.

제안: Try to reduce filler words and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Provide a more general answer about cultural practices, then support it with your example. This will make your answer more complete and coherent.

예시: Yes, Chinese people often send plants or flowers as gifts on special occasions. For example, at my school, the student council gave flowers to teachers on Teacher's Day, and the decorations were beautiful, which made the teachers very happy.

× Personally, I'm not really interested in planting trees or flowers.

✓ Personally, I'm not really interested in planting trees or flowers.

No grammatical error detected in this sentence.

× Uh, first is because I don't think it's necessary for me and I, uh, have no interest in planting trees.

✓ First, it's because I don't think it's necessary for me and I have no interest in planting trees.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject for 'first is'. Adding 'it's' clarifies the sentence structure and improves readability.

× Moreover, uh, my focus, it's only on studies and also other, uh, sort of entertainments.

✓ Moreover, my focus is only on studies and also other sorts of entertainment.

The phrase 'my focus, it's only' is redundant. Replacing it with 'my focus is only' corrects the sentence structure. Also, 'sort of entertainments' should be 'sorts of entertainment' for correct plural and uncountable noun usage.

× Well, when I was young I planned 1 flower uh, but I couldn't really remember the name of it.

✓ Well, when I was young I planted one flower, but I couldn't really remember the name of it.

The verb 'planned' is incorrect here; the correct past tense verb is 'planted' when referring to growing a flower. Also, '1' should be written as 'one' in formal writing.

× However I forgot to uh, give it water one day and then it dies.

✓ However, I forgot to give it water one day and then it died.

The verb 'dies' is present tense, but the sentence refers to a past event, so it should be 'died' to maintain past tense consistency.

× While what I learned from my childhood of planting trees and flowers that I know, uh, it's as important to prove the water every day for the flowers, especially there's some, uh, specific flowers that really needs water, uh, maybe even, uh, every interval.

✓ From what I learned in my childhood about planting trees and flowers, I know it's important to provide water every day for the flowers, especially some specific flowers that really need water, maybe even at very short intervals.

The phrase 'prove the water' is incorrect; it should be 'provide water'. Also, 'needs' should be 'need' to agree with plural 'flowers'. 'Every interval' is vague; 'at very short intervals' is clearer. Prepositions and verb agreement are corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Well, to be honest, I saw, uh, the student council in our school, they sent, uh, the flowers to the teachers in the teacher's day and it was lovely because, uh, the layouts and also the decoration, uh, was really great.

✓ Well, to be honest, I saw the student council in our school send flowers to the teachers on Teacher's Day, and it was lovely because the arrangements and decorations were really great.

'The flowers' can be simplified to 'flowers' for general reference. 'Layouts' is not the correct word here; 'arrangements' fits better. 'Decoration' should be plural 'decorations' to match 'layouts'. Also, 'was' should be 'were' to agree with plural subject 'arrangements and decorations'. 'Teacher's day' should be capitalized as 'Teacher's Day'.

× And teachers also found, uh, happy about it.

✓ And the teachers were also happy about it.

The phrase 'found happy about it' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'were happy about it'. Also, adding 'the' before 'teachers' specifies the group.