Plants— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar and use linking words to make ideas clearer. Avoid redundancy (e.g., 'at my home' -> 'at home', 'a little water and a plenty of sunlight' -> 'little water and plenty of sunlight'). Use one topic sentence, then briefly add a reason and a personal effect. Check verb forms ('I look my cactus' -> 'I tend/inspect it').

예시: I keep a small cactus at home. I bought it three months ago because it’s low-maintenance — it only needs little water and plenty of sunlight. I check it almost every day, and caring for it helps me relax.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence naming the plant, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct the plant name if needed ('otakusa' might be 'azalea' or 'otakusa'—clarify). Avoid repeating 'easy' twice and improve cohesion ('so' -> 'therefore' or 'for example').

예시: When I was seven I grew azaleas (called otakusa). They are very common in Japan because they are easy to care for. For example, my primary school teacher used them in science lessons to show children how to plant and water seedlings.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence, then list specific practical tips with clear linking words. Correct tense and phrasing ('used to be' -> 'was', 'ask questions from him' -> 'ask him'). Avoid absolute statements like 'all we need'—be more realistic and nuanced.

예시: Yes, I know some basics about plant care from my grandfather, who was an orange farmer. For healthy growth, plants generally need regular watering, sufficient sunlight and occasional nitrogen-rich fertilizer, though requirements vary by species.

제안: Answer directly, then give a clear example with correct grammar and linking words. Fix sentence fragments and agreement errors ('Orchid is' -> 'Orchids are', 'symbolize' -> 'symbolizes' for singular). Use more precise vocabulary ('long-lasting').

예시: Yes, many Chinese people give plants or flowers as gifts for special occasions. For example, orchids are popular because they symbolize good wishes and long-lasting happiness, so people often give them at weddings and anniversaries.

× Yes, I have a small cactus at my home.

✓ Yes, I have a small cactus at home.

Use of the definite article 'the' before 'home' is unnecessary and unnatural in this context; native speakers say 'at home'. Suggestion: omit 'the' when referring to one's home in general.

× I bought it three months ago because that plant is very easy to look after since all we need is a little water and a plenty of sunlight and I look my cactus almost every day and refresh my mind.

✓ I bought it three months ago because the plant is very easy to look after since all it needs is a little water and plenty of sunlight, and I look after my cactus almost every day to refresh my mind.

Multiple issues: 'that plant' is okay but 'the plant' is more natural (article issue); 'all we need is' is inappropriate for describing the plant's needs—use 'all it needs is' (incorrect use of pronouns/subject reference); 'a plenty of sunlight' is incorrect article and quantifier use—use 'plenty of sunlight' (quantifier/article error); 'I look my cactus' misses the preposition 'after' (preposition error); sentence run-on needs punctuation and connective rephrasing (sentence structure). Suggestion: refer to the plant with 'it', use 'look after' for caring, drop 'a' before 'plenty', and break into clearer clauses.

× When I was seven years old, I grew otakusa.

✓ When I was seven years old, I grew otakusa plants.

Singular/plural issue: 'grew otakusa' could be acceptable if otakusa is uncountable, but here it refers to plants and needs plural to match meaning. Suggestion: use plural 'plants' after 'grew' when referring to cultivating multiple specimens or the species in general.

× This flower is very common and popular in Japan because it's easy for everyone to look after.

✓ This flower is very common and popular in Japan because it is easy for everyone to look after.

Contraction 'it's' is acceptable, but clarity better with 'it is'; no major grammar error—provide minor style suggestion to avoid contractions in formal speech. Suggestion: use full form 'it is' for clarity in tests.

× So the teacher of my primary school used the plant to teach children how to grow plants in science lessons.

✓ So my primary school teacher used the plant to teach children how to grow plants in science lessons.

'The teacher of my primary school' is wordy and unnatural; use possessive 'my primary school teacher'. This is an article/word order and style issue. Suggestion: prefer 'my primary school teacher' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I know a little about how to grow plants healthily because my grandfather used to be an orange farmer when he was young and I asked some questions from him and I understand that all we need is plenty of water, sunlight and some nitrogen rich fertilizer to help them grow.

✓ Yes, I know a little about how to grow plants healthily because my grandfather used to be an orange farmer when he was young, and I asked him some questions. I understand that all they need is plenty of water, sunlight, and some nitrogen-rich fertilizer to help them grow.

Multiple issues: 'asked some questions from him' is incorrect preposition; correct is 'asked him some questions' (preposition/pronoun use). 'All we need is' should be 'all they need is' when referring to plants (pronoun reference). 'Nitrogen rich' needs hyphen as compound adjective before noun. Also sentence run-on; split for clarity. Suggestion: use 'ask someone a question' structure, match pronouns to the subject, hyphenate compound adjectives, and separate ideas into two sentences.

× Yes, in my view, many Chinese prefer sending flowers like orchids when they want to celebrate someone's special occasions like weddings and anniversaries.

✓ Yes, in my view, many Chinese prefer sending flowers like orchids when they want to celebrate someone's special occasions, such as weddings and anniversaries.

'Like weddings and anniversaries' is acceptable but 'such as' is more appropriate for examples. Also comma improves readability. No strong grammar error; this is a style suggestion. Suggestion: use 'such as' for examples and add comma for clarity.

× For example. Orchid is very popular in China because the flower symbolize the good wishes and long lasting happiness.

✓ For example, orchids are very popular in China because the flowers symbolize good wishes and long-lasting happiness.

Multiple errors: 'For example.' should attach to following clause with a comma. 'Orchid' should be plural 'orchids' to match general statement (singular/plural). 'The flower symbolize' has subject-verb agreement error—use 'the flowers symbolize' (plural). 'The good wishes' should be 'good wishes' (article unnecessary). 'Long lasting' as compound adjective before noun should be hyphenated 'long-lasting'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for generalizations, ensure subject-verb agreement, remove unnecessary articles, and hyphenate compound adjectives.