Stories— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many repetitions and grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundancy and focus on natural English expressions.

예시: Yes, I loved stories when I was a child. My parents used to tell me bedtime stories, which helped me relax and sparked my imagination. These stories made me excited and curious about different worlds. Therefore, I always looked forward to hearing new stories before sleeping.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons for your preference. Keep your sentences concise and natural.

예시: I prefer listening to stories rather than reading them because reading requires a lot of concentration and energy. On the other hand, listening is easier for me, especially since I can do it while doing other tasks. This makes listening more convenient and enjoyable.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Use precise vocabulary and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I wrote stories when I was a child. For example, I wrote about hiking Mount Fuji because I had actually climbed it during my childhood. Writing these stories helped me develop my creativity and imagination.

제안: Your answer is on topic but includes many fillers and grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain why you like that type of story with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I like science fiction stories, especially Harry Potter. It is one of the most famous stories in the world, and I find it exciting because the magic in the story makes anything possible. This imaginative element really captures my interest.

× When I was a child of food, our love stories because I because I remember my parents told me the stories when I when the be before sleeping because which is because which made me a little relaxed and some which which lead me some imagination stories which is really excited for me.

✓ When I was a child, I loved stories because I remember my parents told me stories before sleeping, which made me a little relaxed and led me to imagine stories that were really exciting for me.

The original sentence is confusing and contains many redundant and misplaced phrases, causing sentence structure errors. Simplifying and reorganizing the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I prefer listening to reading because reading consumer many energy.

✓ I prefer listening to reading because reading consumes a lot of energy.

The verb 'consume' needs to be in the third person singular form 'consumes' to agree with the singular subject 'reading'. Also, 'consumer' is a noun, not a verb. Additionally, 'many energy' is incorrect; 'a lot of energy' is the correct quantifier for uncountable nouns like 'energy'.

× Harry Potter is one of the best famous, uh, stories in the world, which is really, uh, excited for me because magic can be, can makes it everything, uh, possible to do.

✓ Harry Potter is one of the most famous stories in the world, which is really exciting for me because magic can make everything possible to do.

The phrase 'can makes' is incorrect; modal verbs like 'can' are followed by the base form of the verb, so it should be 'can make'. Also, 'excited' should be 'exciting' to describe the story. 'Best famous' is incorrect; 'most famous' is the correct superlative form.

× I did wrote about the hiking of Mount Fuji, which was really imagination, which helps me some imagine creativity and imagination.

✓ I wrote about hiking Mount Fuji, which was really imaginative and helped me develop creativity and imagination.

The phrase 'did wrote' is incorrect; 'did' is an auxiliary verb used with the base form 'write'. Also, 'imagination' should be 'imaginative' to describe the story. The sentence needed rephrasing for clarity and correct tense usage.

× For me it's it. It is really difficult to concentrate on for me, but listening for as an for listening, it's really really easy to listen while while other doing other thing.

✓ For me, it is really difficult to concentrate when reading, but listening is really easy because I can listen while doing other things.

The original sentence has incorrect and redundant prepositions and awkward phrasing. 'Concentrate on for me' is incorrect; 'concentrate when reading' is clearer. 'Listening for as an for listening' is incorrect and replaced with a clearer expression. Also, 'other doing other thing' is corrected to 'doing other things'.