Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts because it allows me to show appreciation to others. For example, I often choose items that I personally like, which makes the gift more meaningful.

제안: Be careful with word choice and clarity. Use correct terms for occasions and provide specific examples. Also, use linking words to organize your answer logically.

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, hospital discharges, the birth of a new baby, and when someone receives a school certificate.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more natural by explaining your criteria for choosing gifts with specific details. Avoid vague expressions and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: When choosing a gift, I consider its appearance and texture. For instance, I prefer items that look attractive and feel smooth to the touch because they seem more thoughtful.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, add a little more detail to enrich your response.

예시: Yes, I enjoy crafts and arts. When I was a child, I often made handmade gifts for my parents, and they really appreciated the personal touch.

제안: Try to give a more complete and natural answer by starting with a clear opinion and supporting it with reasons and examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: Not necessarily. Expensive gifts don't always express feelings better because sometimes simple, inexpensive items can convey emotions more sincerely.

× I like to express my thankful moments and appreciation towards others by gifting them a few things that I like.

✓ I like to express my gratitude and appreciation to others by gifting them a few things that I like.

The phrase 'thankful moments' is incorrect; 'gratitude' is the proper noun to express thankfulness. Also, the preposition 'towards' is less appropriate here; 'to' is commonly used with 'appreciation'. So, 'express my gratitude and appreciation to others' is correct.

× Giving gifts is important and exchanging gifts also between people is friendly.

✓ Giving gifts is important, and exchanging gifts between people is a friendly gesture.

The original sentence is awkward and lacks proper conjunction and article usage. Adding a comma before 'and' and rephrasing 'exchanging gifts also between people is friendly' to 'exchanging gifts between people is a friendly gesture' improves clarity and correctness.

× Examples are birthday resignations, discharge from hospitals, giving birth for a new baby, getting school certificate.

✓ Examples are birthday celebrations, discharge from hospitals, giving birth to a new baby, and receiving a school certificate.

The word 'resignations' is incorrect; likely intended 'celebrations'. Also, the preposition 'for' after 'giving birth' should be 'to'. 'Getting school certificate' should be 'receiving a school certificate' for correctness.

× Choosing a gift relies on what my eyes select.

✓ Choosing a gift depends on what my eyes select.

The verb 'relies on' is typically used with people or entities, not with abstract things like 'choosing a gift'. 'Depends on' is more appropriate here.

× I usually go as per what my eyes find it suitable and what my hands find it is smooth and good enough.

✓ I usually choose based on what my eyes find suitable and what my hands find smooth and good enough.

The phrase 'what my eyes find it suitable' is incorrect; 'it' is unnecessary and causes redundancy. Similarly, 'what my hands find it is smooth' is incorrect. Removing 'it' and restructuring the sentence improves grammar.

× When I was a kid, I was making some handmade gifts to my mother and father.

✓ When I was a kid, I made some handmade gifts for my mother and father.

The past continuous 'was making' is less appropriate here; simple past 'made' is better for completed actions. Also, the preposition 'to' should be 'for' when giving gifts.

× They loved it and they appreciated having it from me.

✓ They loved it and appreciated receiving it from me.

The phrase 'appreciated having it from me' is awkward. 'Appreciated receiving it from me' is the correct expression.

× Not necessary.

✓ It is not necessary.

The sentence fragment 'Not necessary.' lacks a modal verb or auxiliary verb to be a complete sentence. Adding 'It is' makes it grammatically correct.

× Sometimes there are cheaper items that can convey the emotional feelings toward.

✓ Sometimes there are cheaper items that can convey emotional feelings.

The phrase 'convey the emotional feelings toward' is incomplete and incorrect. Removing 'toward' clarifies the sentence.