Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid tense and grammar errors, and limit to 2–3 sentences. Add a brief reason with correct grammar and word choice.

예시: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts. Seeing the recipient’s smile makes me happy, so I try to choose presents that will really please them.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Use linking words to list occasions and give one specific cultural example concisely.

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as anniversaries and birthdays. In Korea, for example, it’s common for girls to give chocolates to their boyfriends on Valentine’s Day.

제안: Make the answer clearer and eliminate repetition. Start with a direct statement, then give one or two specific factors with brief explanation using linking words for coherence.

예시: I consider the person’s interests and personality. For example, if they enjoy cooking I might buy a useful kitchen gadget, whereas a booklover would appreciate a recent bestseller.

제안: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary and grammar. Give one clear example of a handmade gift and briefly explain who received it and why. Avoid unclear phrases and redundancy.

예시: Yes. I enjoy crafting, so I once handmade a fabric doll for a friend, and I wrote a heartfelt letter for my mother on Mother’s Day.

제안: Make the opinion statement stronger and improve grammar. Provide a concise reason and a brief example to support your view using linking words for coherence.

예시: No, I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better. Rather, it’s more meaningful to give something thoughtful that suits the person’s tastes, such as a handmade item or a book they wanted.

× Yes, I am good at giving gifts and I enjoy it also because their smiling face when they gave the presents makes me feel happy.

✓ Yes, I am good at giving gifts and I also enjoy it because their smiling faces when they receive the presents make me feel happy.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'their' can be used for plural, but 'their smiling face' should be 'their smiling faces' to match plural recipients. Tense and verb choice: 'when they gave the presents' is past; the intended meaning is a general habit, so use present 'when they receive the presents'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'faces... make' (plural subject requires plural verb). Suggestion: Use consistent present-tense for habitual actions and match plural nouns and verbs.

× Umm, especially on anniversary or their birthday I usually give them a gift.

✓ Umm, especially on anniversaries or on their birthdays I usually give them a gift.

Singular/plural inconsistency: 'anniversary' and 'birthday' refer to recurring events, so plural forms 'anniversaries' and 'birthdays' are more natural when speaking generally. Also add 'on' before 'their birthdays' for correct preposition use and parallel structure. Suggestion: Use plural forms for recurring occasions and keep parallel prepositions.

× And furthermore, on Valentine's it is common in Korea that girls give chocolate for boy boyfriend.

✓ And furthermore, on Valentine's Day it is common in Korea for girls to give chocolate to their boyfriends.

Article and noun form errors: 'Valentine's' should be 'Valentine's Day'. Preposition and noun errors: use 'for girls to give chocolate to their boyfriends' for correct verb pattern and plural 'boyfriends' (general statement). Also 'boy boyfriend' is redundant and incorrect. Suggestion: Use the full holiday name and correct verb pattern 'for X to do Y' and pluralize when making general statements.

× I consider their interests and their personalities because I'm giving what they what they want to get is important for presenting, so I think I have to consider their interest.

✓ I consider their interests and personalities because giving them what they want is important when choosing a present, so I think I have to consider their interests.

Pronoun repetition and noun agreement: remove duplicate 'what they' and use 'giving them what they want' as correct object structure. Use 'present' (or 'presenting' is odd) and plural 'interests' to match 'their'. Also adjust word order for clarity and natural expression. Suggestion: Simplify the clause and keep consistent plural forms and appropriate nouns.

× Yes, my hobby is creating so I gave someone a gift like kill killing the dolls made by sharing and in the past I made a letter for my mum. I made a letter paper.

✓ Yes, my hobby is creating, so I have given someone gifts like handmade dolls, and in the past I wrote a letter for my mum.

Verb tense and word choice errors: use present continuous noun 'creating' is okay as hobby but 'gave' should be present perfect 'have given' for experiences; 'kill killing the dolls made by sharing' is nonsensical—replace with 'handmade dolls'. 'Made a letter' is incorrect collocation; use 'wrote a letter'. Remove 'letter paper'. Suggestion: Use correct collocations (write a letter, handmade dolls) and appropriate tenses for life experiences.

× No, I don't think so, because it is more important what they give rather than how much that is so I think. Giving them what really want is more important.

✓ No, I don't think so, because it is more important what someone gives rather than how much it costs. Giving them what they really want is more important.

Awkward sentence structure and missing pronouns: 'what they give' is unclear—use 'what someone gives' for generality. 'Rather than how much that is so I think' is ungrammatical; replace with 'rather than how much it costs'. Second sentence missing pronoun 'they' in 'what they really want'. Suggestion: Rephrase to a clearer comparative structure and include necessary pronouns.