Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g., “keeping guests” is wrong). Add one specific reason or brief example with a linking word. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts because it makes me happy to see people I care about smile. For example, I often choose small, thoughtful presents for close friends on special occasions.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and connect supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (use plural/singular appropriately) and combine short fragments into one coherent answer. Include a brief example to be specific.

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries. For instance, I always buy a small present for my sister on her birthday and a card for our anniversary.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and expand with specific details using linking words. Avoid broken sentences and filler words. Mention particular factors (interests, needs, surprise element) and explain briefly why they matter.

예시: When choosing a gift, I consider the recipient's interests and needs. For example, if they like reading, I might choose a novel, and I also try to add a small surprise to make it memorable.

제안: Answer directly and complete the thought. Avoid fillers like “uh” and redundant connectors (“but however”). Explain why you choose handwritten letters with one specific reason and finish the sentence. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I haven't given a handmade item, but I often give handwritten letters because they feel personal and meaningful. For example, I write a letter to close friends on their birthdays to express my appreciation.

제안: State your opinion clearly and support it with a brief reason and an example. Avoid grammar mistakes (use “depend on” correctly) and fillers. Use a linking word like “because” or “since” to connect the reason.

예시: I don't think so because the emotional value of a gift matters more than its price. For instance, a thoughtful handmade card can mean more to someone than an expensive but impersonal item.

× I I like keeping guests for others who I like or love because it gives me happiness.

✓ I like keeping gifts for people I like or love because it makes me happy.

Repeated word 'I' and wrong noun 'guests' instead of 'gifts'; pronoun 'who' is awkward with 'others' and 'people' is better. 'It gives me happiness' is unnatural; use 'it makes me happy'. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, use correct nouns and simple subject pronoun 'people' and natural verb phrase 'makes me happy'.

× I'd rather give gifts to others. In special occasions like birthdays. And anniversary, for example.

✓ I'd rather give gifts to others on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries, for example.

Sentence fragments and wrong preposition/article use: use 'on special occasions' not 'in', and plural 'anniversaries' matches 'birthdays' or use 'an anniversary'. Combine fragments into one sentence. Suggestion: use 'on' for occasions and keep consistent plurality.

× I consider. What the what other person want when choosing a gift and a bit surprising.

✓ I consider what the other person wants when choosing a gift, and I try to make it a bit surprising.

Fragmented sentence and incorrect word order. Remove stray period, correct verb agreement 'wants', and add subject 'I' for the second clause. Suggestion: form a complete sentence, ensure subject-verb agreement and clear coordination.

× Uh, no. But however, I often give others a handwritten letter because it's the best way to.

✓ No, but I often give people a handwritten letter because it's the best way to show my feelings.

Redundant conjunctions 'but however' should be simplified to 'but' or 'however'. 'Give others' is awkward; use 'give people' or 'give someone'. Sentence ends abruptly 'to.' and needs object 'show my feelings'. Suggestion: avoid redundant connectors and finish the clause with a clear object.

× I don't think so, because it's not depend on the price whether other people become, uh, happy by the gift.

✓ I don't think so, because it doesn't depend on the price whether people are happy with the gift.

Incorrect verb form 'it's not depend' should be 'it doesn't depend'; use 'people are happy with' rather than 'become happy by'. Remove filler 'other' unless contrasting. Suggestion: use correct auxiliary for negation and natural collocations 'happy with'.