History— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「interesting」ではなく「interested」を使い、「Napoleons」ではなく「Napoleon」が正しいです。また、理由を述べる際により明確で自然な表現を使うことが重要です。

예시: Yes, I studied world history in high school because I was interested in Napoleon and French history. I chose this subject to learn more about France's past.

제안: 回答が断片的で文がつながっておらず、意味が不明瞭です。文をつなげて、具体的な学習方法を明確に述べる必要があります。また、「Les Miserable」は歴史映画ではなくミュージカルや小説なので、正確な例を挙げることが望ましいです。

예시: I usually learn history by watching historical movies, such as "The King's Speech," and by reading many history books to deepen my understanding.

제안: 回答が非常に不明瞭で、文法的にも誤りが多いです。歴史を学ぶ利点を明確に述べ、具体的な例を使って説明することが必要です。文をつなげて論理的に話す練習をしましょう。

예시: One benefit of learning history is that it helps us understand the significance of historical places when we visit them, making the experience more meaningful.

제안: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。「running history」ではなく「learning history」が正しいです。また、理由を述べる際により自然で流暢な表現を使うことが必要です。

예시: I think learning history is very important because it helps us understand the reasons behind discrimination and wars, which can prevent similar problems in the future.

× It is because I was interesting in a Napoleons, especially I like French so.

✓ It is because I was interested in Napoleon, especially I like French.

The adjective 'interesting' is incorrectly used instead of the past participle adjective 'interested' to describe the student's feeling. Also, 'a Napoleons' is incorrect; 'Napoleon' is a proper noun and should not be pluralized or preceded by 'a'. The phrase 'especially I like French so' is awkward and should be simplified to 'especially I like French.'

× It is because I was interesting in a Napoleons, especially I like French so.

✓ It is because I was interested in Napoleon, especially I like French.

'Napoleons' is incorrectly pluralized. 'Napoleon' is a proper noun referring to a specific person and should remain singular.

× It is because I was interesting in a Napoleons, especially I like French so.

✓ It is because I was interested in Napoleon, especially I like French.

The preposition 'in' is correct here, but the overall sentence structure is awkward. The phrase 'especially I like French so' is not a proper use of conjunctions or prepositions and should be rephrased.

× especially I like French so.

✓ especially because I like French.

The conjunction 'so' is incorrectly used here. 'Because' is more appropriate to express reason.

× I want to furrow the history of French, so I choose to study world history.

✓ I want to learn the history of France, so I chose to study world history.

The verb 'furrow' is incorrect; the intended verb is likely 'follow' or 'learn'. Also, 'history of French' should be 'history of France' to refer to the country. The tense 'choose' should be past tense 'chose' to match the context.

× I want to furrow the history of French, so I choose to study world history.

✓ I want to learn the history of France, so I chose to study world history.

The verb 'choose' should be in past tense 'chose' to align with the past action described.

× I used to. Watch history movies.

✓ I used to watch history movies.

The sentence is fragmented. 'I used to' should be followed directly by the verb without a period.

× Likely Les Miserable.

✓ For example, Les Misérables.

'Likely' is incorrectly used; 'for example' or 'such as' is appropriate to introduce an example. Also, the title should be 'Les Misérables'.

× It's a French history.

✓ It's French history.

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'French history' because 'history' is an uncountable noun here.

× And also. I read many books to run histories.

✓ Also, I read many books to learn history.

The phrase 'to run histories' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'to learn history'. Also, the sentence is fragmented and should be combined properly.

× The benefit of running history is to visiting place that.

✓ The benefit of learning history is visiting places that

'Running history' is incorrect; 'learning history' is correct. 'To visiting' is incorrect; it should be 'visiting'. The sentence is incomplete and needs continuation.

× The benefit of running history is to visiting place that.

✓ The benefit of learning history is visiting places that

The phrase 'visiting place that' is incomplete and should be 'visiting places that are related to history'.

× Is related to the history.

✓ are related to history.

The sentence fragment 'Is related to the history.' lacks a subject and should be connected to the previous sentence with correct subject-verb agreement.

× It. You. Very. Better explains at there.

✓ It helps you understand better when you are there.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It should be rephrased to express that visiting historical places helps understanding.

× It. You. Very. Better explains at there.

✓ It helps you understand better when you are there.

The preposition 'at there' is incorrect; 'when you are there' or 'there' alone is appropriate.

× I think running history is very important.

✓ I think learning history is very important.

'Running history' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'learning history'.

× It is because we can. Understand why the discrimination happened or why the war happen.

✓ It is because we can understand why discrimination happened or why the war happened.

The sentence is fragmented. 'Understand' should not be separated. Also, 'happen' should be past tense 'happened' to match the past events.