History— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors.

예시: Yes, I studied history during my school days. I found some parts boring, but I enjoyed learning about the Mughal emperors because their stories were fascinating.

제안: Provide a more detailed and coherent answer by using linking words and explaining your learning methods clearly. Avoid vague phrases like 'just remembering'.

예시: I learn history mainly by paying attention in class and memorizing important events and dates. Additionally, I sometimes read history books to understand the topics better.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific benefits of learning history with examples.

예시: Learning history helps us understand our past and the culture of ancient people. Moreover, it teaches us important lessons and helps us avoid repeating mistakes.

제안: Improve sentence structure and coherence by using linking words. Express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons or examples.

예시: Yes, I believe learning history is important because it helps us understand our heritage. For instance, when younger generations ask about our past, we can provide accurate answers.

× Yes, I had studied history in my school time and at that time it was so boring subject that I get bored when teachers start studying the history subjects.

✓ Yes, I studied history during my school time and at that time it was such a boring subject that I got bored when teachers started teaching history.

The use of 'had studied' is incorrect here because the past perfect tense is used for actions completed before another past action, which is not the case. Simple past 'studied' is appropriate. Also, 'get' should be 'got' and 'start' should be 'started' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Studying the history subjects' is awkward; 'teaching history' is clearer.

× Yes, I had studied history in my school time and at that time it was so boring subject that I get bored when teachers start studying the history subjects.

✓ Yes, I studied history during my school time and at that time it was such a boring subject that I got bored when teachers started teaching history.

The phrase 'so boring subject' should be 'such a boring subject' because 'subject' is singular and requires the article 'a' and the intensifier 'such'. Also, 'subjects' should be singular 'subject' to match the context.

× Also I had studied many types of history of Mogul Emperor's.

✓ Also, I studied many types of history of the Mughal Emperors.

The phrase 'Mogul Emperor's' incorrectly uses an apostrophe suggesting possession; it should be plural 'Emperors'. Also, 'Mogul' is more commonly spelled 'Mughal' in historical context.

× I learn history by just remembering the things which I had been taught by my teacher in the school.

✓ I learn history by just remembering the things which I was taught by my teacher in school.

The phrase 'had been taught' is past perfect continuous/passive, which is unnecessary here. Simple past passive 'was taught' is appropriate. Also, 'in the school' should be 'in school' as a general statement.

× There are many benefits of learning history like we can get our past ancient times.

✓ There are many benefits of learning history, like we can learn about our ancient past.

The phrase 'get our past ancient times' is incorrect; 'learn about our ancient past' is clearer. Also, a comma is needed before 'like' to separate clauses.

× People theory and also we can get a great amount of knowledge by memorizing the. Important facts and dates about the history.

✓ We can also understand people's theories and gain a great amount of knowledge by memorizing important facts and dates about history.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'People theory' is vague; 'people's theories' is clearer. The period after 'the' is incorrect and breaks the sentence. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, definitely. I think learning history is important in our life becauses in upcoming time if the young generation will ask some questions about our history then.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think learning history is important in our lives because in the future, if the young generation asks some questions about our history, then

'Becauses' is a typo for 'because'. 'In upcoming time' should be 'in the future'. The modal 'will' is unnecessary after 'if'; simple present 'asks' is correct for future conditional. 'Our life' should be plural 'our lives'.

× The people should know. How to give them answer about our history?

✓ people should know how to answer them about our history.

The original sentences are fragmented and awkward. 'The people' is better as 'people' in general. 'How to give them answer' is incorrect; 'how to answer them' is correct. The question mark is inappropriate as this is a statement.