Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects the naturalness and effectiveness of your response. Try to give a direct answer first, then add specific supporting details using linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: No, I have never borrowed money from others because I always manage my finances carefully. For example, I budget my expenses and only use my own money when shopping. Occasionally, I may borrow money from my parents if necessary, but I avoid borrowing from friends or others.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes, which makes it difficult to understand. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific examples or reasons, using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases and keep your answer concise.

예시: Yes, I often lend money to my friends when they face urgent financial problems. For instance, if a friend needs money for medical expenses, I am willing to help. I believe it is important to support friends and family in times of need because it shows kindness and strengthens relationships.

× No, I never borrowed money from others because I believe that the money or is always with me.

✓ No, I have never borrowed money from others because I believe that the money is always with me.

The sentence uses 'never borrowed' which is simple past tense, but the context implies an experience up to now, so present perfect 'have never borrowed' is appropriate. Also, 'or' is a typo and should be removed.

× That is more specifically, I managed to arrange my money in different aspects.

✓ More specifically, I manage my money in different ways.

The original sentence is awkward and mixes tenses. 'That is more specifically' is incorrect; 'More specifically' is the correct phrase. Also, 'managed' is past tense, but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'manage' is better.

× Whenever I go to shopping or in various purposes, I used to use only my money, but I used to take my money from my parents but not from any other other than my family members.

✓ Whenever I go shopping or for various purposes, I use only my own money, but I sometimes take money from my parents, not from anyone other than my family members.

The phrase 'go to shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'go shopping'. 'In various purposes' should be 'for various purposes'. 'Used to use' implies past habit, but the context suggests current habit, so 'use' is better. Also, 'any other other' is a repetition and should be corrected to 'anyone other'.

× Whenever they are, they do not have the money for a serious situations are used to lend them money for their purposes.

✓ Whenever they do not have money for serious situations, I lend them money for their needs.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. 'Are used to lend' is incorrect here; the correct form is simple present 'I lend'. Also, 'a serious situations' mixes singular and plural; it should be 'serious situations'.

× And you must give it is a helpful nature.

✓ And you must give; it is a helpful nature.

The sentence is unclear and seems to combine two ideas incorrectly. Separating into two sentences clarifies meaning. 'Give it is' is incorrect; it should be 'give; it is'. Alternatively, rephrasing for clarity is recommended.