Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you could improve it by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence. Also, try to avoid repeating similar phrases and keep your answer concise within five sentences.

예시: Yes, I have borrowed money from friends, particularly during my high school years. For instance, once I forgot my wallet and needed some cash to buy breakfast, so I asked a friend to lend me some money for the day. This experience taught me to be more careful about carrying essentials.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat repetitive, which affects clarity. To improve, focus on correct verb forms, avoid repetition, and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

예시: Yes, I have lent money to others, although it is quite rare since I usually don't carry much cash. Instead, I often pay the bills directly for my friends when we go out together, which is more convenient for me.

× Yes, I have lends money for others but it is quite rare because I don't carry much cash.

✓ Yes, I have lent money to others but it is quite rare because I don't carry much cash.

The verb 'lends' is incorrectly used in the present tense third person singular form. Since the sentence uses the present perfect tense 'have', the past participle form 'lent' should be used instead. Also, 'money for others' should be 'money to others' because 'lend' is followed by 'to' when indicating the recipient.

× Instead I paid the bill for them and I paid the bills for them and.

✓ Instead, I paid the bill for them.

The sentence is incomplete and contains repetition and an unnecessary conjunction 'and' at the end. Removing the repeated phrase and the extra 'and' corrects the sentence structure and makes it clear and concise.