Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "an IRI" which seems unclear. To improve, focus on correcting grammar, using precise vocabulary, and making your sentences more natural and concise. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly with linking words.

예시: Yes, I have borrowed money from my friends, especially during high school, because I often forgot to bring cash. For instance, I would borrow money to pay for my breakfast when I didn't have any on me.

제안: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but the phrase "pay the bills draft directly" is confusing and unnatural. To improve, use clearer expressions and linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to provide a specific example to enrich your answer.

예시: Yes, I have lent money to others, although it is quite rare because I usually don't carry much cash. Instead, I prefer to pay their bills directly, for example, by transferring money online when they need help.

× Yes, I have borrowed money from my friend, especially in high school because I always forgot to bring any cash an IRI.

✓ Yes, I have borrowed money from my friends, especially in high school because I always forgot to bring any cash on me.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'my friend' when referring to borrowing money from multiple people, which should be plural 'my friends'. Also, 'an IRI' appears to be a typographical error and should be corrected to 'on me' to indicate carrying cash. Using the correct pronouns and prepositions improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I borrowed their money to pay for my breakfast.

✓ I borrowed their money to pay for my breakfast.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require any changes.

× Instead I prefer to pay the bills draft directly for them whenever possible.

✓ Instead, I prefer to pay the bills directly for them whenever possible.

The phrase 'pay the bills draft' is incorrect. The word 'draft' is unnecessary and causes confusion. Removing 'draft' and adding a comma after 'Instead' improves sentence flow and clarity.