Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、言い淀みや繰り返しが多く、自然さに欠けます。また、詳細が曖昧で具体性が不足しています。より流暢で具体的な表現を心がけ、接続詞を使って論理的に話を展開しましょう。

예시: Yes, I once borrowed money from my sister when I was 23 because I didn't have enough funds to cover my daily expenses. I felt quite embarrassed about asking her, but she was very understanding and helped me out.

제안: 文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。親の教えについて話す際は、文を簡潔にし、接続詞を使って理由を明確に述べましょう。

예시: No, I have never lent money to adults because my parents were very strict and always taught me not to lend money to others, as it could cause problems.

× Yes, I borrowed money from my sister when I was 23 years old and at that time, uh, I was, uh, lucky and didn't have enough money to spend a daily life, so I asked her to lend it.

✓ Yes, I borrowed money from my sister when I was 23 years old and at that time, uh, I was, uh, unlucky and didn't have enough money to live daily life, so I asked her to lend it.

The word 'lucky' is incorrect in this context because the speaker is describing a negative situation of not having enough money. The correct adjective is 'unlucky'. Also, 'spend a daily life' is unnatural; the correct phrase is 'live daily life' or better 'live my daily life'.

× I, I was a very ashamed, uh, about that.

✓ I was very ashamed about that.

The phrase 'a very ashamed' is incorrect because 'ashamed' is an adjective that does not take an article 'a'. The correct form is 'very ashamed' without 'a'.

× No, I've never arranged money to the adults because my parents were a very strict person and always taught me that you at this you couldn't any money to others because it may occur the problem.

✓ No, I've never lent money to adults because my parents were very strict people and always taught me that you shouldn't give money to others because it may cause problems.

The phrase 'arranged money to the adults' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'lent money to adults'. 'A very strict person' is incorrect when referring to 'parents' (plural); it should be 'very strict people'. The phrase 'you at this you couldn't any money' is ungrammatical; it should be 'you shouldn't give money'. 'It may occur the problem' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'it may cause problems'.