Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect verb forms. For example, you can say: "Yes, I borrowed $5000 from my brother when I was a student because I needed to pay my tuition fees. He was always willing to help me financially, which I really appreciated."

예시: Yes, I borrowed $5000 from my brother when I was a student because I needed to pay my tuition fees. He was always willing to help me financially, which I really appreciated.

제안: Your answer should be more structured and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid awkward phrasing and redundancy. For example, you could say: "Yes, I often lend money to my family members and friends. For instance, once a friend asked me for money during an emergency, and she returned it within three days. I believe lending money in such situations is a good way to support others."

예시: Yes, I often lend money to my family members and friends. For instance, once a friend asked me for money during an emergency, and she returned it within three days. I believe lending money in such situations is a good way to support others.

× Yes I have a borrowed money from my brother when I was a student and I got a $5000.

✓ Yes, I borrowed money from my brother when I was a student and I got $5000.

The phrase 'have a borrowed' is incorrect because 'have' is unnecessary here and 'borrowed' should be in simple past tense to match the time reference 'when I was a student'. The correct form is 'I borrowed money'. Also, the article 'a' before 'borrowed money' is incorrect because 'money' is uncountable.

× I have I had to be pay my tuition fees and my brother always willing to be willing to be help with the money and I'm sure.

✓ I had to pay my tuition fees and my brother was always willing to help with the money, and I'm sure.

The phrase 'have I had to be pay' is incorrect; the correct modal verb usage is 'had to pay' for past obligation. Also, 'willing to be willing to be help' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'was always willing to help'. The sentence structure is corrected to reflect proper modal verb and verb form usage.

× Yes, I will lend money to others to my family member and friends.

✓ Yes, I lend money to my family members and friends.

The use of 'will lend' suggests future action, but the question asks about past experience. The simple present 'I lend' is more appropriate to express habitual action. Also, 'to others to my family member' is incorrect; it should be 'to my family members and friends' with plural 'members'.

× Yes, I will lend money to others to my family member and friends.

✓ Yes, I lend money to my family members and friends.

The phrase 'family member' should be plural 'family members' because it refers to more than one person. Also, 'to others to my family member' is redundant and incorrect; 'to my family members and friends' is correct.

× I remember once a time I friend ask for a money in emergency situations and she also quickly in a three days return it.

✓ I remember one time a friend asked for money in an emergency situation and she returned it quickly within three days.

The phrase 'I friend ask' is incorrect; it should be 'a friend asked' in past tense. 'A money' is incorrect because 'money' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. 'She also quickly in a three days return it' is awkward and incorrect; the correct form is 'she returned it quickly within three days'.

× I remember once a time I friend ask for a money in emergency situations and she also quickly in a three days return it.

✓ I remember one time a friend asked for money in an emergency situation and she returned it quickly within three days.

The preposition 'in a three days' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'within' to indicate the time frame. Also, 'in emergency situations' should be 'in an emergency situation' to be grammatically correct.

× And it is the very good way to help others in a hard time.

✓ And it is a very good way to help others in a hard time.

The phrase 'the very good way' is incorrect; it should be 'a very good way' because it is a general statement, not a specific known way. Also, 'in a hard time' is acceptable but 'in hard times' is more natural; however, the correction focuses on the article usage here.