Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but could be more natural and structured. Avoid redundancy and improve grammar, for example, use 'especially' instead of 'specially'. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I have borrowed money before, especially from my closest friends. However, I usually prefer not to because I earn my own money. If I ever need financial help, I tend to ask my father instead.

제안: Your answer shows your willingness to help, but it lacks clarity and coherence. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details linked logically. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'they keep benefiting from me' and explain your point more specifically.

예시: Yes, I often lend money to others because I like to help people in need. However, sometimes I feel that they take advantage of my generosity, which makes me more cautious now.

× Yes, I do ask for money from specially from the closest friends.

✓ Yes, I do ask for money, especially from my closest friends.

The phrase 'specially from the closest friends' is incorrect. The correct adverb is 'especially' to indicate emphasis, and 'my closest friends' is the proper possessive form. Also, a comma is needed before 'especially' to separate the clauses clearly.

× Otherwise I'd prefer not to because I earned my own money and if I ever wanted I ask my father about it.

✓ Otherwise, I'd prefer not to because I earn my own money, and if I ever want to, I ask my father about it.

The sentence mixes past tense 'earned' with present context; it should be present tense 'earn' to match the ongoing preference. Also, 'if I ever wanted' should be 'if I ever want to' to maintain present/future conditional meaning. A comma is needed after 'Otherwise' and before 'and' to improve clarity.

× Yes, I do give money to others quite often because I have a very good heart for others, so I tend to give more, but they keep benefiting from me.

✓ Yes, I do give money to others quite often because I have a very good heart for them, so I tend to give more, but they keep benefiting from me.

The phrase 'a very good heart for others' is awkward; 'a very good heart for them' is more natural and specific. The rest of the sentence is grammatically correct.