Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid repeating phrases and focus on clarity. For example, you can say: "Yes, I borrowed money from my friends about five months ago because I had used all my savings and needed to pay my rent."

예시: Yes, I borrowed money from my friends about five months ago because I had used all my savings and needed to pay my rent. Fortunately, they were willing to help me, and I paid them back as soon as I could.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and is repetitive. Use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas. For example, you can say: "Yes, I have lent money to my friends when they wanted to buy gadgets but didn't have enough funds."

예시: Yes, I have lent money to my friends when they wanted to buy gadgets but didn't have enough funds. I usually help them because I understand their needs, and they always repay me on time.

× Yes I have borrowed money from my friends when it was about 5 months ago and I have to pay my rent house rent I couldn't find I have to I used all of the money and so I borrowed this from my friends.

✓ Yes, I borrowed money from my friends about 5 months ago because I had to pay my house rent and couldn't find the money. I had used all of my money, so I borrowed some from my friends.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes present perfect tense ('have borrowed') with a specific past time reference ('about 5 months ago'), which requires simple past tense. Also, the sentence is fragmented and unclear. Using simple past tense ('borrowed') is appropriate for actions completed at a definite time in the past. Additionally, restructuring the sentence improves clarity and coherence.

× Yes, I have landed a lot of money with my friends, landed a lot of money to my friends as whenever they wanted to buy a lot of gadgets and they didn't have a lot of money, plenty of money. So I have to give them some money.

✓ Yes, I lent a lot of money to my friends whenever they wanted to buy gadgets and didn't have enough money. So, I gave them some money.

The verb 'landed' is incorrect here; the correct past tense of 'lend' is 'lent'. Also, 'have landed' is inappropriate because the action refers to specific past events. Using simple past tense ('lent', 'gave') fits the context. The sentence is also simplified for clarity and grammatical correctness.