Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to provide a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid incomplete or unclear phrases like 'Origin Magical building'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, keep your answer concise and natural, within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I have borrowed money from close friends and family members when I faced unexpected expenses. For instance, once I had to pay for urgent car repairs, so a friend lent me some money to cover the cost. This support helped me manage the situation without stress.

제안: Your response contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases, which affect the naturalness and effectiveness of your answer. Make sure to use correct verb forms and provide specific, clear details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and logical. Keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

예시: Yes, I have lent money to close friends and family members in times of need. For example, a friend once required financial help for medical treatment, so I lent them some money to ease their burden. I felt glad to support them during that difficult time.

× Yes, I have borrowed money from the other and a few associations, usually from close friends or family members.

✓ Yes, I have borrowed money from others and a few associations, usually from close friends or family members.

The phrase 'the other' is incorrect here because it implies a specific other person previously mentioned. The correct phrase is 'others' to refer to people in general. Using 'others' without 'the' is appropriate when talking about people in general.

× For example, in office.

✓ For example, at the office.

The phrase 'in office' is incomplete and unclear. The correct preposition is 'at' when referring to a location like 'the office'. Also, the article 'the' is necessary before 'office' to specify the place.

× Unexpected expense such as Origin Magical building helped me manage the situation without some stress.

✓ An unexpected expense, such as the Origin Magical building, helped me manage the situation without much stress.

The sentence lacks an article before 'unexpected expense' and 'Origin Magical building'. Also, 'some stress' is better expressed as 'much stress' to convey less stress. Adding commas improves clarity.

× Yes, I have lend money to address on a few ostitions, usually to a gross friend or family member who were indeed originally.

✓ Yes, I have lent money to others on a few occasions, usually to a close friend or family member who was indeed in need.

The verb 'lend' in present tense is incorrect after 'have'; the past participle 'lent' is required. 'Address on a few ostitions' is unclear and likely a typo; corrected to 'others on a few occasions'. 'Gross friend' is incorrect; corrected to 'close friend'. 'Who were' should be 'who was' to agree with singular 'friend'. 'Indeed originally' is unclear; replaced with 'indeed in need' for clarity.

× For example, one friend need help medical experience, so I lend them some money to ease their burden.

✓ For example, one friend needed help with medical expenses, so I lent them some money to ease their burden.

The verb 'need' should be in past tense 'needed' to match the past context. 'Help medical experience' is incorrect; corrected to 'help with medical expenses'. 'Lend' should be past tense 'lent' to match the past action.