Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be more natural and clear. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain the situation with specific details and linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I have borrowed money from my relatives once because I was in a difficult situation. I had an accident and couldn't tell my family about it, so I needed financial help. Therefore, I borrowed money from my elders to cover the expenses.

제안: Try to make your answer more fluent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details. Avoid repeating phrases like 'at that time' multiple times.

예시: Yes, I have lent money to a friend who was going through a tough time. His mother was hospitalized, and they were facing financial difficulties. So, I decided to help him by lending some money to support his family.

× Yeah, I have brought a money from my address because it was very important for me at that time.

✓ Yeah, I have borrowed money from my address because it was very important for me at that time.

The verb 'brought' is the past tense and past participle of 'bring', which means to carry something to a place. The correct verb here is 'borrowed', which means to take something temporarily. Also, 'a money' is incorrect because 'money' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article 'a'. Nepali: 'brought' को अर्थ 'ल्याउनु' हुन्छ जुन यहाँ उपयुक्त छैन। यहाँ 'borrowed' अर्थात् 'धेरै समयका लागि लिनु' प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ। साथै 'money' अनगिन्ती संज्ञा हो, त्यसैले 'a' प्रयोग हुँदैन।

× I had a accident that time and I would I cannot tell my family about that accident incident.

✓ I had an accident at that time and I could not tell my family about that accident.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound as in 'accident'. The phrase 'I would I cannot' is incorrect; it should be 'I could not' to express inability in the past. Also, 'accident incident' is redundant; 'accident' alone suffices. Nepali: 'accident' अगाडि 'a' होइन 'an' आउनुपर्छ किनभने यो स्वर ध्वनि सुरु हुन्छ। 'I would I cannot' गलत संरचना हो, यसलाई 'I could not' ले प्रतिस्थापन गर्नुपर्छ। 'accident incident' दोहोरिएको छ, केवल 'accident' प्रयोग गर्नु राम्रो हुन्छ।

× So I should have to borrow money from elders.

✓ So I had to borrow money from elders.

The phrase 'should have to' is incorrect here. To express necessity in the past, 'had to' is appropriate. 'Should have to' is not a correct modal verb construction. Nepali: 'should have to' गलत प्रयोग हो। विगतमा आवश्यकताको लागि 'had to' प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ।

× He do have a difficult situation.

✓ He had a difficult situation.

The subject 'He' requires the verb to be in third person singular past tense here. 'Do have' is incorrect; it should be 'had' to indicate past tense. Nepali: 'He' को लागि क्रिया 'do have' होइन 'had' प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ किनभने यो विगतकाल हो।

× At that moment, his mother was at hospital and they were facing financial crisis at that time and I have lent money to my friend that time.

✓ At that moment, his mother was in the hospital and they were facing a financial crisis, so I lent money to my friend then.

The correct preposition is 'in the hospital' not 'at hospital'. 'Financial crisis' is a countable noun here and needs the article 'a'. Also, 'I have lent' is present perfect, but the context requires simple past 'I lent'. 'That time' is better replaced with 'then' for fluency. Nepali: 'at hospital' होइन 'in the hospital' प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ। 'financial crisis' अगाडि 'a' आवश्यक छ। 'I have lent' को सट्टा 'I lent' प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ किनभने घटना विगतमा भएको छ। 'that time' लाई 'then' ले राम्रो सन्दर्भ दिन्छ।