Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms, articles, and prepositions. Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and use linking words like “for example” or “sometimes” correctly. For instance, say whether you borrow often or rarely, from whom, and one specific situation when you did.

예시: Yes, I have borrowed money from others sometimes. For example, I occasionally ask my father to lend me money when I go out with friends because I don’t always have cash. Usually I repay him within a few days.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then one clear specific example with correct tense and sentence structure. Avoid repetition and fix pronoun and article errors. Use linking words such as “for example” or “for instance” to introduce the situation and state whether you expect repayment or not. Keep it concise and logical.

예시: Yes, I have lent money to others. For instance, I lent my brother some money last year so he could buy a bicycle because he didn’t have enough savings; he paid me back after two months.

× Yes, I pour it sometime for my family.

✓ Yes, I borrow it sometimes for my family.

The student used 'pour' incorrectly; the correct verb is 'borrow' to mean taking money temporarily. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). Use present simple 'I borrow' for habitual action. Suggestion: use 'I borrow money sometimes' for natural expression.

× For example, when I want to go to with my friend, I ask my father to give me a money to enjoy with our friend.

✓ For example, when I want to go out with my friend, I ask my father to give me some money so I can enjoy time with my friend.

Multiple errors: missing verb phrase 'go out', incorrect article 'a money' (money is uncountable), and awkward clause 'to enjoy with our friend'. Use 'some money' for uncountable nouns and 'so I can' to express purpose. Keep present simple 'want' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'go out' and 'some money' and link purpose with 'so I can'.

× Course, when I have money I lend to other people if they didn't have any money, such as when my brother want to buy a bicycle didn't have he didn't have enough money. So I.

✓ Of course, when I have money, I lend it to other people if they do not have any. For example, when my brother wanted to buy a bicycle but did not have enough money, I lent him some.

This sentence has pronoun and tense problems: missing 'it' after 'lend', incorrect contraction 'didn't' with present context, and wrong word order 'didn't have he'. Also inconsistent tenses: use present simple for general truth ('I lend it') and past simple for a specific past event ('my brother wanted... I lent him'). 'Lend' requires an object pronoun ('lend it' or 'lend him money'). Suggestion: separate general habit and specific example, use correct pronouns and consistent tenses.