Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one specific detail with correct grammar and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler words (e.g., “uh”, “like this condition”).

예시: Yes, I have. In middle school I borrowed some money from a classmate to cover our class contribution for a school activity. I returned the money the following week, and everyone was satisfied.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity. Begin with a direct topic sentence, state who borrowed the money and why, use linking words (for example, “for example” or “because”), and correct verb forms (e.g., “buy” → “to buy”, “repair me” → “pay me back”). Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I have. I have lent money to friends and classmates, usually so they could buy books or other essentials. They have always paid me back by the next week.

× Yes, I have in my memory.

✓ Yes, I have.

The phrase 'in my memory' is unnecessary and unidiomatic in this context. The simple present perfect 'Yes, I have' sufficiently answers the question. Remove 'in my memory' to make the reply natural and grammatically correct. Suggestion: Use 'Yes, I have' for a straightforward yes/no response to experience questions.

× When I was in middle school I borrowed some money from a classmate because our class found needed contribution for a school activities.

✓ When I was in middle school I borrowed some money from a classmate because our class needed to collect contributions for a school activity.

Several issues: 'found needed contribution' is ungrammatical — use 'needed to collect contributions' or 'needed contributions'. 'a school activities' is incorrect article and number agreement; use 'a school activity' (singular) or 'school activities' (plural) consistently. Also 'our class needed to collect contributions' correctly expresses the past intention. Suggestion: Keep verb tense past ('needed') and fix noun number and word order.

× I paid them back the following week like this condition, it just happened.

✓ I paid him back the following week; it just happened that way.

'Them' is incorrect if referring to a single classmate; use 'him' or 'her' to match gender if known, or 'the classmate'. 'Like this condition' is unnatural and ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'it just happened that way' to express coincidence. Use a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use clear pronouns matching the antecedent and natural idiomatic phrases.

× Yes, I have I lent money to my friends, my classmates and about my friend, she borrowed my money for buy some books or some uh, essential thing, but they they all always following next week repair me in addition.

✓ Yes, I have. I have lent money to my friends and classmates. For example, a friend borrowed money to buy some books and other essentials, and they always pay me back the following week.

Multiple problems: run-on sentences and tense inconsistency. Use present perfect 'I have lent' to indicate experience. 'about my friend' is awkward—use 'for example, a friend'. 'for buy' should be 'to buy' (infinitive). 'essential thing' should be 'other essentials' or 'essential items'. 'they they all always following next week repair me in addition' is ungrammatical and unclear; correct to 'they always pay me back the following week.' Suggestion: Split into shorter sentences, use correct infinitive 'to buy', correct plural nouns, and place adverbs properly.