Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ หลีกเลี่ยงคำอ้ำอึ้งและคำซ้ำซ้อน เติมรายละเอียดที่เฉพาะเจาะจง และเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อม เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so' เพื่อให้ความหมายชัดเจน ตัวอย่างเช่น บอกว่าเมื่อไหร่ สถานการณ์เป็นอย่างไร และผลลัพธ์คืออะไร (ไม่เกิน 3–4 ประโยค)

예시: Yes. Once when I was a student and had no cash to pay for lunch, I couldn’t even buy food, so I asked a classmate to lend me 200 baht. Because I paid him back the next day, the situation didn’t affect our friendship.

제안: ปรับคำให้ถูกไวยากรณ์ ใช้ประโยคหัวเรื่องแล้วอธิบายเหตุผลพร้อมตัวอย่างสั้นๆ ใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น 'because' หรือ 'for example' เพื่อลดความซ้ำซ้อนและทำให้ชัดเจน ควรใส่รายละเอียดเกี่ยวกับสถานการณ์หรือเงื่อนไขที่คุณจะยอมให้ยืม (ไม่เกิน 3–4 ประโยค)

예시: Yes, I have lent money a few times, but I think it should be done carefully. For example, I only lend small amounts to close friends and ask for repayment within a week, because repeated borrowing can strain a relationship.

× Yes, there's a time that I don't have money for my pocket and I try not umm, get myself full by drinking a lot of water and it's really tough time so buy so borrow someone's money is the only thing that I could do at that moment.

✓ Yes, there was a time when I didn't have any money in my pocket, and I tried not to eat much by drinking a lot of water. It was a really tough time, so borrowing someone's money was the only thing I could do at that moment.

The speaker mixes present and past tenses incorrectly (use past when recounting an event). Use 'there was a time when' and past verbs 'didn't have', 'tried', 'was', 'borrowing...was' to keep tense consistent. Also 'money for my pocket' is unnatural; use 'money in my pocket'. Combine clauses with appropriate conjunctions and infinitive form 'try not to eat'. Suggestions: Use consistent past tense when telling past experiences; replace informal fillers and unclear phrases with standard expressions.

× Yes, but I usually do not agree that it is a good things to do.

✓ Yes, but I usually do not think that it is a good thing to do.

'Things' is plural while the article 'a' indicates singular; this is a quantifier/article mismatch. Use the singular 'thing' with 'a', or remove 'a' and use plural. Also 'do not agree' is less natural than 'do not think' in this context. Suggestions: Match articles and nouns (a + singular noun). Use 'think' for opinions rather than 'agree' when not contrasting.

× If you want to maintain a good friendship with your friends, don't always let them borrow your money.

✓ If you want to maintain good friendships, don't always let friends borrow your money.

Redundant repetition 'friendship with your friends' is wordy. Use plural 'friendships' or 'your friends' alone. Also 'let them borrow your money' is acceptable but 'let friends borrow your money' is more concise. Suggestions: Avoid repetition by choosing one clear phrase; use plural for general statements.

× It is it is could make your friendships with your friends worse.

✓ It could make your friendships worse.

The sentence contains duplication 'It is it is' and unnecessary pronoun/noun repetition 'friendships with your friends'. Also mixing 'is' and 'could' is ungrammatical. Use one modal verb 'could' plus main verb 'make' and a concise object 'your friendships'. Suggestions: Remove duplicated words, use a single modal verb, and avoid repeating the same noun.