App— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答比较自然且内容相关，但有些地方表达重复（如“with my with friends”），需要注意语言的准确性和简洁性。建议避免重复词汇，保持句子流畅。

예시: Recently, I have used various apps, but I use TikTok the most because many people post interesting videos and blogs there. I enjoy watching creative content and sharing my own videos with friends.

제안: 你的回答结构清晰，内容具体且有逻辑，但可以使用更多连接词使表达更连贯，例如使用“because”或“as”。同时，注意时态一致性。

예시: I am usually interested in game apps, especially puzzle games like finding the difference between two pictures, because although they seem simple at first, they require careful observation and attention to detail, which I find very enjoyable and challenging.

제안: 回答内容完整且条理清晰，但口语中避免使用数字序号“1st”，可以用“first”或“first of all”。此外，适当使用连接词如“then”、“finally”可以增强连贯性。

예시: First, I usually search for the specific function I need in the App Store. Then, the App Store provides several options, so I carefully read the descriptions and user reviews to compare them. Finally, I select the app that seems most reliable and has the features I want before downloading it.

제안: 你的回答内容具体且表达清晰，但“effectively efficiently”两个副词连用略显重复，建议选择其中一个。可以适当增加连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: In the future, I would like to use apps that can assist me in writing essays and dissertations efficiently, especially those that use advanced AI technology but are not too obvious. This would help me reduce the high workload of daily assignments and allow me to focus more on understanding the topic.

× I enjoy watching creative content and sharing my own videos with my with friends.

✓ I enjoy watching creative content and sharing my own videos with my friends.

The phrase 'with my with friends' contains a repeated preposition 'with'. The correct form is 'with my friends' to indicate sharing videos together. Removing the extra 'with' corrects the sentence.

× Recently, I am usually interested in apps for playing games, especially puzzle games like finding the difference between 2 pictures.

✓ Recently, I have usually been interested in apps for playing games, especially puzzle games like finding the difference between 2 pictures.

The phrase 'Recently, I am usually interested' mixes present simple with a recent time frame. Using present perfect continuous 'have usually been interested' better expresses a recent and ongoing interest.

× Although this game seems simple at first, they actually require careful observation and attention to detail, which I find very enjoyable and challenging.

✓ Although this game seems simple at first, it actually requires careful observation and attention to detail, which I find very enjoyable and challenging.

The subject 'this game' is singular, so the pronoun and verb must also be singular. 'They' and 'require' are plural forms and should be changed to 'it' and 'requires' to agree with the singular subject.